Clare
Tuesday 8th December 2009 21:54 | Lost |
| Very interesting set up - I can already see a lot of conflict being caused, excellent! |
| Tuesday 1st January 2002 05:12 | Lost (Author Response) |
| its always a lot of fun to set up the conflict |
gymnastgal19
Saturday 20th September 2008 23:48 | Lost |
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| Sunday 21st September 2008 05:44 | Lost (Author Response) |
| thank you |
blue_and_white_witch
Sunday 31st August 2008 07:56 | Lost |
| It's so Harry. That shocked me. But its such a great twist especially with that evil Frankie thrown into the mix! |
| Tuesday 2nd September 2008 05:54 | Lost (Author Response) |
Evil Frankie, eh, I really quite like her character. |
gymnastgal19
Thursday 14th February 2008 06:59 | Lost |
that was interesting! I knew that harry would be at that camp lol
im surprised that gin didnt recgonize him or anything.... although im not sure if she even looked at him...
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| Saturday 16th February 2008 03:52 | Lost (Author Response) |
| Ginny didn't see him |
ShadeXH
Friday 29th June 2007 10:36 | Lost |
| I just can't understand why everyone doesn't just recognize him from his scar, you know? |
| Saturday 30th June 2007 13:41 | Lost (Author Response) |
| I explain very early in this chapter that Harry's face has been greatly disfigured, so those that have only known him through his fame would not be able to recognise him. |
LisaPotter
Wednesday 6th June 2007 18:28 | Lost |
now you've confused me..... Is that um.... who i thought it was the first couple of seconds or did i not read thoroughly enough to notice anything different?
signed,
AKA: LisaPotter |
| Sunday 24th June 2007 01:36 | Lost (Author Response) |
I'm not sure what your question is and where your confusion lies, but I will try and clear this up for you.
All the odd chapters are written from Ginny's point of view, while all the even chapters are written from Harry's point of view. |
brown_eyes
Tuesday 10th April 2007 08:43 | Lost |
| Very interesting twists. I like how Harry has been drawn to Ginny's character and how he seems to be falling in love with a character who is very much like Ginny in Frankie. It will be a shame when he has her heartbroken. |
| Wednesday 11th April 2007 09:06 | Lost (Author Response) |
| Ginny, like Frankie, strange, I never thought of her like that before. |
Patches
Friday 23rd February 2007 02:58 | Lost |
| OK. Harry ofviously doesn't remember who he is and Ginny is at the camp where he lives. How long before she finds him and he remembers something of importance? I like this. You are doing a great job. I look forward to your updates. I've added you to my favorites list. p |
| Saturday 24th February 2007 03:41 | Lost (Author Response) |
How long before she finds him and he remembers something of importance?
That may take some time otherwise it would be a very short story. |
CJS
Monday 12th June 2006 06:01 | Lost |
| I'm confused! Frankie's bunkmates consider "Jack" to be her boyfriend, Frankie herself says "we're more than friends", but Jack doesn't see her in thast way....yet. Great story though. I can't wait to see what happens between Ginny and Frankie when "Jack"'s identity finally comes out. |
| Monday 19th June 2006 15:22 | Lost (Author Response) |
Frankie's bunkmates consider "Jack" to be her boyfriend, Frankie herself says "we're more than friends", but Jack doesn't see her in thast way....yet.
This is just a case of rumours getting the better of people. Adding to Ginny confusion. Also the more than friend's comment is just one to show that they are close. |
Wooster
Friday 9th June 2006 01:44 | Lost |
Perfect. Absolutely perfect use of dramatic irony. The quotes/memories you use are...well...perfect. The reader recognizes them, and they're JUST enough for him to sort of get an idea of his past and still not know who he is. Brilliant.
Also, very realistic having him be considering a relationship with Frankie. Most would have him reluctant to even consider another girl and simply not know why. This holds a lot truer. |
| Sunday 11th June 2006 16:19 | Lost (Author Response) |
Also, very realistic having him be considering a relationship with Frankie. Most would have him reluctant to even consider another girl and simply not know why. This holds a lot truer.
I tend to try to make my pieces as realistic as possible. |
timbers
Sunday 14th May 2006 07:04 | Lost |
That\'s cause you\'re the pre-beta doopy.
Shh...we don\'t want anyone to know. Otherwise, I\'ll have a horde of anxious readers after me, when you tell them the chapter is still with the pre-beta and I don\'t think I can handle that |
| Sunday 14th May 2006 07:40 | Lost (Author Response) |
Ha, you overestimate the pulling power of this piece.
So guys it's her email you want. Oh and maybe to shout at me a little for not writing much on chapter five yet. |
timbers
Saturday 13th May 2006 07:54 | Lost |
A really good chapter, can't wait to see how this progresses!
And just to add to parakletos' comment- I get to see unfinished chapters from both of you without having to do any writing myself
Now, thats a good deal *grin*
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| Sunday 14th May 2006 06:46 | Lost (Author Response) |
Cheers for the review mate.
Now, thats a good deal *grin*
That's cause you're the pre-beta doopy. |
paladin
Friday 12th May 2006 10:37 | Lost |
Wow! This is stirring some great emotions from just the first few chapters.
I have been meaning to read your story since the earlier postings but kept getting pushed off for life's issues. I finally made the time to read P-ch2 last night and I am glad I did. You have really created a great plot and set it up well. The prologue was standard opening info but you established the emotion with H&G's dialog and interaction.
Ch2... OMG, I could feel my body draining of energy when I empathized with and what it must feel like. Just the character & scene descriptions were just right to let us readers use our imaginations to paint the rest of the picture.
This installment firmly rooted your plot (I believe) and you have thrown in a good amount of potential obstacles and variables to build this up well. I like the description of disfigurement. A face maybe not only can love though?
~Awesome effort! I can't wait for the next post. |
| Sunday 14th May 2006 06:45 | Lost (Author Response) |
Wow, what a review, thank you very much, I'm honoured.
The prologue was standard opening info but you established the emotion with H&G's dialog and interaction.
You're right the prologue was needed to set out the story and a lot of information but I'm glad it didn't come out bland.
Ch2... OMG, I could feel my body draining of energy when I empathized with and what it must feel like.
It's not a good position for Ginny, but I hope I provided some hope for our heroine.
This installment firmly rooted your plot (I believe) and you have thrown in a good amount of potential obstacles and variables to build this up well.
The cause of true love never did run smooth. Because where would the fun be in life if it did. |
eaglebird
Thursday 11th May 2006 21:46 | Lost |
| OMG, you have brought them together so quickly. You are building the suspense beautifully. I'm really curious to see how far the harry/Frankie relationship goes before Harry and Ginny finally meet. That should be interesting. Looking forward to your update |
| Sunday 14th May 2006 06:41 | Lost (Author Response) |
Thank you for reviewing.
I'm really curious to see how far the harry/Frankie relationship goes before Harry and Ginny finally meet. That should be interesting.
Very interesting, indeed. |
cckeimig
Thursday 11th May 2006 19:00 | Lost |
| Oh, wow. This is just so intense! I can't wait to read more!!! |
| Sunday 14th May 2006 06:39 | Lost (Author Response) |
| Thank you for reviewing again and more should be up soon. |
parakletos
Thursday 11th May 2006 07:13 | Lost |
And here is number ten .. don't you feel good now
Another good one; perhaps we should swap unpublished chapters? |
| Thursday 11th May 2006 16:15 | Lost (Author Response) |
perhaps we should swap unpublished chapters?
Well you've already seen chapter three, but if you're a good boy, P should be finished with 4 this weekend and I might let you take a look. |
Milygo
Wednesday 10th May 2006 18:16 | Lost |
| I love your firs two chapters. It's so sad though. I hope it won't be long before they discover one another again. |
| Thursday 11th May 2006 16:13 | Lost (Author Response) |
Thank you for reviewing.
I hope it won't be long before they discover one another again.
Hmm, how long is long? |
daniel_r_crazy22
Wednesday 10th May 2006 17:02 | Lost |
i love it. cant wait til you write more.
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| Thursday 11th May 2006 16:11 | Lost (Author Response) |
Thank you fore reviewing.
I should update in just under two weeks, all things going to plan. |
occlumens
Wednesday 10th May 2006 13:41 | Lost |
| Interesting plotline, though I would have expected seeing Ginny to have dragged a bit more out of "Jack's" broken memory. |
| Thursday 11th May 2006 16:10 | Lost (Author Response) |
Thank you for reviewing.
I would have expected seeing Ginny to have dragged a bit more out of "Jack's" broken memory.
But he is only seeing her from a distance. |
Arnel
Wednesday 10th May 2006 11:06 | Lost |
| I absolutely love this chapter. I knew the young man had to be Harry just by how cynical he is about the press and the few bits of memory that keep popping into his head. I love how Ginny handled the press conference; it'll be interesting to find out whether or not she lasts longer than Frankie predicts and how Jack reacts to Ginny once Frankie makes the two come in contact with each other. I really look forward to your next chapter. Update again soon, please. |
| Wednesday 10th May 2006 12:42 | Lost (Author Response) |
Thank you for the review.
I love how Ginny handled the press conference
Ginny just keep hold of her temper is so fun to write.
how Jack reacts to Ginny once Frankie makes the two come in contact with each other.
What make you think that Frankie will let Harry and Ginny anywhere near each other? |
Jorgie
Wednesday 10th May 2006 10:52 | Lost |
| Excellant Chapter I love Harry's (Jack's) reaction to seeing Ginny. It wasn't overdone and came off well. I like how you've protrayed each person keep up the awesome work and speed the next chapter to us we eggerly await. |
| Wednesday 10th May 2006 12:40 | Lost (Author Response) |
Thank you for reviewing.
I love Harry's (Jack's) reaction to seeing Ginny.
I tried to make similar to his reactions to Ginny at the start of HBP, hope that came across. |
juliet
Wednesday 10th May 2006 05:03 | Lost |
Hook, line and sinker! Obviously Harry's facial injuries are such that he isn't recognizable to anyone otherwise he would have been discovered by now. Either that or it is a conspiracy from a very Slytherin behaving Frankie who has the healers continuing to disfigure Harry and place memory charms on him as well.
Okay, enough rambling. This story is good, there is enough tension, the promise of a love triange (or at least some very put out women) and the pacing is great. I so want to read more and find out how Harry will meet Ginny again.
I loved that she was affecting him and his memories.
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| Wednesday 10th May 2006 12:39 | Lost (Author Response) |
Thank you for the review.
Either that or it is a conspiracy from a very Slytherin behaving Frankie who has the healers continuing to disfigure Harry and place memory charms on him as well.
Hmmm, interesting theory.
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thisgrlrox
Tuesday 9th May 2006 23:39 | Lost |
| Oh why couldn't Ginny have seen Harry? I'm glad you decided to have his memories trickle back in instead of coming back the instant he saw her. It feels like that is overplayed so I think you made the right choice. Poor Harry...living in a camp, no memory, no identity...and more scars! Just what he needs. The story has definitely captured my attention and I look forward to reading more. |
| Wednesday 10th May 2006 12:35 | Lost (Author Response) |
Thank you for reviewing.
Oh why couldn't Ginny have seen Harry?
It would have been a very short story if she did.
I'm glad you decided to have his memories trickle back in instead of coming back the instant he saw her. It feels like that is overplayed so I think you made the right choice.
Contact with Ginny will help them come back a bit faster though. |
