butterbeer101
Sunday 26th April 2009 03:57 | Yes |
| That was really great! |
Sheepie_101
Saturday 3rd January 2009 01:57 | Yes |
great!!! Everything it shud b.
alot of pple hoo rite about lily and james make lily all sweet and cute and stuff, but u made her really awsome. |
GinevraMollyWeasley
Sunday 28th December 2008 09:44 | Yes |
| All right, that one was good, I loved how you captured James and Lily's attitudes! |
Thorn
Sunday 7th December 2008 22:16 | Yes |
| i love this pleas do more |
gymnastgal19
Monday 1st September 2008 21:54 | Yes |
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chiantiqueen
Wednesday 9th January 2008 08:11 | Yes |
Excellent stuff! I loved the fact that you got to see different sides to James, his fun and mischievious side with Sirius, his insecurities, his sweetnes and his romantic side with Lily.
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gymnastgal19
Tuesday 2nd October 2007 21:41 | Yes |
| love it! not that many lily and james out there! good job! |
MysterySilkRules_lol
Thursday 19th October 2006 16:04 | Yes |
| Aw, this is sweet! |
| Thursday 19th October 2006 20:13 | Yes (Author Response) |
| Thanks! |
sweety_sorbey
Wednesday 18th October 2006 05:13 | Yes |
| Aww - I loved it! All your characterisations seemed spot-on - and it was just so sweet. Lily’s attitude was perfect; she was easily recognisable as both the girl we saw in the pensieve in OotP, and as the woman who ended up marrying James. I loved it. |
| Thursday 19th October 2006 20:14 | Yes (Author Response) |
| Thank you sweety, your comments mean a lot to me. I worked hard on getting Lily just right; making sure that she wasn't made out to be a shrill, obnoxious shrew as I see her made out to be so often in the fandom. Great to see you again! |
raindownonme
Thursday 28th September 2006 19:57 | Yes |
I LOVE IT.
just about exactly how i imagine them getting together.
this is your first fic? you seem like a pro!!!!!
congrats on an awesome story!!
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| Sunday 15th October 2006 18:18 | Yes (Author Response) |
| Aww, thanks so much! It is so wonderful to receive such positive feedback on my first fic ... makes me itch to write more! |
Aggiebell
Tuesday 26th September 2006 20:26 | Yes |
We're beta-sisters, did you know? OHGinnyfan's my awesome beta, too!
This was so much fun! I really like this characterization of James, and I think you've got Sirius down, too! And Lily! (I feel like I'm squeeing all over the place here.)
I love this line: She looked at him… really looked at him… for the very first time. He was handsome, there was no doubt about that, and blimey, he was sexy. He had eyes a girl could just drown in, and those glasses, Merlin, they just made him so completely edible. But beyond that, she saw something else, something she hadn’t seen in him before: heart. Heart and soul and an honesty that was, quite honestly, refreshing.
And, while I've got you here, I need to thank you for reccing The Proposal! *glomps you* I think it's my favorite of all the things I've written so far, and it always floors me to see someone rec it. But I really wanted to thank you because I went back and re-read it after I finished this (I haven't read it in a long time), and I got inspired for a sequel. So Yay! And thanks!
Julie (who seems to be abusing !!! tonight) |
| Wednesday 27th September 2006 21:45 | Yes (Author Response) |
*is glomped ... and loves it*
Julie! *dances* ... I have a beta sister! I'm one lucky girl!
Thank you so much for your great review ... coming from someone who has an amazing J/L fic out there (that I read regularly, btw) ... it means a lot. Every time I read "The Proposal," that first line just gets me right where it hurts ...... ad nauseum...
And YAYAYAYAYAYYYY for the sequel! *squeeeage* Can't wait to read it! |
MysterySilkRules_lol
Tuesday 26th September 2006 17:16 | Yes |
Mmm.
awesome |
| Tuesday 26th September 2006 17:26 | Yes (Author Response) |
| Right on, dude! |
LauraGene
Tuesday 26th September 2006 09:26 | Yes |
Well Done! And I like that you kept it from being too sugary with the bet at the end.
I look forward to reading more of your James and Lily stories. |
| Tuesday 26th September 2006 17:25 | Yes (Author Response) |
| Thank you! I loved the bet too ... it just seemed *so* James and Sirius to me ... can't you just see Sirius saying to James ... "A Galleon mate, a whole Galleon that you can't get Evans to even look at you by Christmas." .... *giggles* Stay tuned for more! |
occlumens
Monday 25th September 2006 19:49 | Yes |
Congrats, Mari! I still love it! It's wonderful to see it here on Phoenixsong where it belongs.
You did a wonderful job in your characterizations. Lily is perfect. Her reasoning for pushing James away for so long makes sense.
I also love how James could switch from playful to serious in a heartbeat. That's always how I imagined him, because he had to be serious to join the Order, but he's still a marauder at heart.
I love this fic. Great job! |
| Tuesday 26th September 2006 17:24 | Yes (Author Response) |
| Occlumens, thank you so much. You're such an awesome author, having these compliments come from you means a lot to me, hon (and I don't just say that because I get to beta your great work, either! ) For some reason, writing Lily comes easy to me ... maybe I identify with her ... who knows. Now I just need to nail down a good version of Sirius ..... Thank you again hon! *snugs* |
GryffindorDragon
Monday 25th September 2006 15:56 | Yes |
Cute story ... but I think Lily was just a little too easy.
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| Monday 25th September 2006 18:51 | Yes (Author Response) |
| Ahhh, so many theories, so many thoughts, so many ideas about Lily revolve in this fandom. I personally can't stand the fics where Lily is nothing but a miserable shrew to James for ages and ages and ages, and then suddenly turns on a dime (a Sickle? hehe) into the loving sweet girlfriend of his dreams. I tried to have a slow buildup of changing emotions here, which I think I did a pretty good job of. Thanks so much for your review, I'm glad you enjoyed it! |
Evelyn
Monday 25th September 2006 15:18 | Yes |
I felt like squeeing when I finished this story. It's just so adorably fluffy, happy, tender and funny and I simply love the way you showed how Lily slowly changed her mind.
Really, really lovely. |
| Monday 25th September 2006 18:49 | Yes (Author Response) |
| Aww, thanks so much Evelyn. I tend to write lots of fluff and romance: I don't think there is enough fluff and romance in the world. I'm so glad that you enjoyed it! Writing Lily is one of my favourite things to do. Thank you so much for the review! |
Tinabell
Monday 25th September 2006 15:10 | Yes |
Yeah! I love James/Lily stories but there are so few GOOD ones out there! I'd love to see more from you!
Do you have any fav's you could recommend? |
| Monday 25th September 2006 18:47 | Yes (Author Response) |
Hiya! Stay tuned, because I do have more up my sleeve, not just for J/L, but for MWPP in general!
I do have a couple of fics I would recommend .. here are a couple of links for you:
Where Toads Could Be Vampires
Wizarding Betrothal -- This one is AU, but I still enjoyed it
The Proposal
jandjsalmon's Rec List -- This is a list of rec'd fics from LJ user jandjsalmon. Some great stuff in there!
Hope you enjoy the fics! |
crazydaisy
Monday 25th September 2006 13:54 | Yes |
| Sorry to post twice, but I've just read the other reviews and agree wholeheartedly with OHGinnyfan - I want to meet Sirius and James. They sound hot! |
crazydaisy
Monday 25th September 2006 13:52 | Yes |
| Yaay! This is great!! I love the way you've portrayed L+J; they're believable characters and the way they get together is so NICE!! I got squiggles in my tummy Also, I cannot believe this is your first fic!! it's FANTASTIC! keep them coming! xx |
| Monday 25th September 2006 18:37 | Yes (Author Response) |
| It is the ultimate compliment to hear that people think my James and Sirius sound "hot." I had a hard time characterising Sirius, and was worried that he wouldn't come off with the proper amount of rebel/badboy/good friend that I wanted him to. I'm glad the fluffy story made you happy! Don't worry, I'll be back! |
meddymo
Monday 25th September 2006 13:38 | Yes |
| Wow, that was so sweet. I really liked it a lot. Some people go way overboard trying to make every little detail feel authentic and it just ends up sounding fussy and forced. This was a perfect balance of accuracy and originality. Great, great job--especially for your first time out! |
| Monday 25th September 2006 18:35 | Yes (Author Response) |
| Oh, thank you so much! That is a wonderful comment, especially to a first time writer. I try very hard to make my fics believable ... sometimes it is easy, as it was with this fic; and sometimes it is harder than hard. I hope you visit again with my other fics! |
Mira Miracle
Monday 25th September 2006 12:47 | Yes |
| As I already told you, it's very, very good, and you've even improved it! I don't really know how there could be a better version than the one I read, but, well, somehow you've managed it. I love how you characterise Lily; I can never believe these fics that let her fall head over heals for James after six years of neglect and hate. You've described her feelings very well and very realistically. The last sentence is especially beautiful; rounds forgotten…but a life together begun . I look forward to reading more of your fics! |
| Monday 25th September 2006 18:34 | Yes (Author Response) |
| Ah Mira, thank you so much sweetie. Your reviews mean the world to me ... coming from such an amazing author as yourself. Writing this fic was really easy for me, believe it or not. I guess I just sort of "hear" Lily in my head ... maybe it's because I adore her so much. Or maybe it's because I lust after James ... hehehee .... thanks again hon. |
mary-v
Monday 25th September 2006 11:58 | Yes |
You're telling me this is your first fanfic? I don't believe. his was just so mindblowingly GOOD and wonderful and sweet and just everything perfect, and everything a story needs so that it really becomes a wonderful story!
Wonderful!
~Maria~ |
| Monday 25th September 2006 18:31 | Yes (Author Response) |
| Hi Maria! Yep, this was my very first fanfic ever ... thank you so much for the compliments! They were wonderful to read, and really warmed me. I loved writing this fic, and will most likely write much more about J/L and the rest of the MWPP era in the future. I hope you stick around to read more! |
OHGinnyfan
Monday 25th September 2006 11:40 | Yes |
I get to review first! I get to review first!
I absolutely adore this story, and I am so glad you are sharing it with us here at PhoenixSong! It is such a delightful James/Lily tale, and I think you are spot on in your "voice" with them. I can't wait to read your other stuff!
I love the fact that Lily is trying to figure out James, but more importantly, she's trying to figure out herself along the way. What a fun journey, and I do hope you'll continue to write this couple in addition to the others.
And you do make James and Sirius very, very sexy and drool-worthy. *swoon* I do hope you'll eventually grace us with your version of Remus, too, so we can see how drool-worthy he is.
*hugs* |
| Monday 25th September 2006 18:30 | Yes (Author Response) |
Ohhhh, OHGinnyfan, you just rock my world, you know that? You took what I thought was an already perfect story and made it ten times better. I was leery of having a beta of my own ... but I really struck gold with you! Thank you so much for your hard work on this with me .... and for your amazing comments. They truly touched me.
And don't you worry ... you'll get to see drool-worthy Remus soon enough! |
