Ladybug
Thursday 15th March 2007 09:33 | Moods |
One thing I am beginning to know is that if I click on a critmo story I will never be disappointed. You writing is always consistently high quality. I really like this chapter, Fleur is awesome (as she should be) and I'm intrigued by the uneasiness with H, R & H.
My favourite part:
Ginny had the feeling she was taking part in some kind of a complicated ballet with a spontaneously developing set of steps. Ron and Hermione drifted about in the obvious attempt to avoid each other, while Harry was passed on from one person to another, all of them set to wrench information on his plans from him.
That's just a perfect picture of awkwardness, so well expressed I can feel it.
Right, I'm on the read the rest. |
| Friday 16th March 2007 10:42 | Moods (Author Response) |
To be never disappointed - phew. That's a review to put a frame around.
Thank you for pointing out this passage. I'm not into ballet, but I like this metaphor. |
Evelyn
Sunday 4th March 2007 04:39 | Moods |
Yes, it does seem very analytic; to me, it looks like there's a great structure, but sometimes, it seemed just a tee too structured to me.
Still, it must be one the most insightful opening chapters I've read in a while (even though personally, I believe that Ginny really understands Harry when he breaks up with her - but of course, there are lots of different possibilities). Great start. |
| Sunday 4th March 2007 09:29 | Moods (Author Response) |
Oops, I never thought of this chapter as being very analytic.
Apart from that: Even if Ginny does understand Harry at the moment he breaks up with her, looking at it from the distance is something else. Without the repeated reassurance that he only breaks up with her for her own safety, all kinds of doubts are simply bound to arise, especially when he lets Ron and Hermione come with him. Most of all because understanding and approving are two very different things. |
Patches
Thursday 22nd February 2007 23:26 | Moods |
| Thank God! I am so glad Fleur talked to Ginny. There is always more to the story and I really like the way you are writing this. Thank you, p |
| Friday 23rd February 2007 10:23 | Moods (Author Response) |
| My pleasure. Fleur was very helpful. |
harry_ginnyphile
Wednesday 21st February 2007 21:09 | Moods |
I can't believe I'm just now sitting down to write my reviews on this fic! Well, yeah, I can believe it ... I've been monstrously busy ... but ... still ... bad beta, bad beta! *smacks my own hands*
I love how you write Ginny ... you're right there, inside her head ... and your Fleur-isms are great to read! It's my pleasure working on these for you. |
| Thursday 22nd February 2007 03:34 | Moods (Author Response) |
I can't believe I'm just now sitting down to write my reviews on this fic! Well, yeah, I can believe it ... I've been monstrously busy ... but ... still ... bad beta, bad beta! *smacks my own hands*
I didn't know it's a beta's duty to review. You've given so much feedback already. Thank you very much! |
lilyp
Thursday 25th January 2007 21:36 | Moods |
I like your other "Mood" stories., but I must admit I don't like your Ginny here. Fleu is right, but don't you think that if Fleur, that knows so little of Harry, had so much more insight about him than Ginny, there would be something really wrong with H/G?
One of the reasons I support H/G is because I think Ginny is the girl that best understands him. Even Harry thinks that. He says they perfectly understood each other in chapter 30 and she acts like someone that has completely understood why he wanted to be apart from her. She didn't complain, she didn't say anything against his decision. Why would she have this reaction afterwards? It doesn't make sense, I think.
She knows he is noble, he will hunt Voldemort, he will save wizarding world and that's one of the reasons why she likes him so much. She knows how he is and she loves his way of being.
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| Friday 26th January 2007 09:05 | Moods (Author Response) |
I don't see the problem, and I'm not doubting what JKR wrote. This is a projection of what could happen next.
Try to see it from Ginny's point of view: being Harry's girl friend is a dream come true, and then he tells her they can't be together anymore. Even if she does understand his motives on a conscious level, she thinks it's a foolish idea. So isn't it reasonable to assume that her subconsciousness does play a few tricks on her, once they have parted and there's no way to ascertain that it wasn't all wrong. Add depression over what happened, stress etc. and doubts are a natural result, especially when he's not doing things alone, but lets R/H come. I'd say it would be unnatural, if she didn't come up with "why not me" thoughts.
Fleur, on the other hand, has the advantage of having insight into a part of Harry's past that Ginny probably knows very little about. As an observer, she also is in a much more neutral position which allows her to point out an essential truth about Harry that Ginny might have ignored for the reasons mentioned above.
Hope that helps you to a more positive view of my poor story. |
Miri
Thursday 25th January 2007 07:57 | Moods |
This is the first of your stories that I've read and I immediately serched out the other "Mood" stories and read them all. They're thoroughly enjoyable stories and you are a fine writer.
As to this one in particular--I loved the conversation between Fleur and Ginny (I don't think Fleur is quite the feather brain she seems to be sometimes in canon-I like your version quite a bit) and the insight it gives both Ginny and the reader into Harry's behavior.
Then we have the hints that something is wrong with the trio...hmm. And finishing off with a romantic cliffie...ahh.. off to read the next chapter!
Long Live the Quartet! |
| Thursday 25th January 2007 09:44 | Moods (Author Response) |
| Thanks for the praise, even while I mourn the reviews you didn't leave ( ). Sorry, I got this to late to warn you that the next chapter wouldn't help you with the cliffie. |
Wolf's Scream
Thursday 25th January 2007 07:25 | Moods |
| As noted via alternative commuhnication channel, I particularly like the insightfulness of Fleur here: I find that much preferable to the portrayal as a ditzy blonde. And it appears that each member of a Certain Couple might be gaining a bit of insight shortly. :-) |
| Thursday 25th January 2007 09:41 | Moods (Author Response) |
| Yes, this description of Fleur seems to be something that a number of people find attractive. |
hp4-sauce
Thursday 18th January 2007 21:53 | Moods |
I liked it a lot. Your Fleur was smart, perceptive and funny. And your portrayals of Harry and Ginny are always on the money. As an appreciative fan of your work, it's really nice to see you back.
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| Friday 19th January 2007 08:41 | Moods (Author Response) |
| Thank you kindly. With this kind of welcome the pleasure is entirely on my side! |
hwimsey
Thursday 18th January 2007 14:28 | Moods |
Well done! You handled Fleur's speech (which is tricky) with ease. I also like the idea of Fleur being a fuller character. Bravo.
Favorite lines:
She could usually read his face like an open book, but it was difficult with half of the text missing.
Gabrielle was barely old enough to have developed an interest in boys, but there were Veelas in her pedigree, and she was obviously determined to use that advantage.
Fleur turned to look at her, and for the first time in her life Ginny felt something wash over her that made her almost understand what the power of a Veela must feel like for a man. Fleur’s gaze had an intensity she had only found with one other person, but that person’s eyes were green.
Sorry to be quoting most of the text!
Looking forward to reading more. Sorry the last year was so butt kicking.
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| Friday 19th January 2007 08:40 | Moods (Author Response) |
Oh, don't worry about last year, this year has the potential to get worse.
Glad you like the idea, and some of those lines would be among my favourites too. |
stardust610
Thursday 18th January 2007 14:14 | Moods |
| I really like this story! I like how it's in Ginny's point of view, and her thoughts on the whole break up were done very well. I hope to see more! |
| Friday 19th January 2007 08:38 | Moods (Author Response) |
| Cheers, I'm working on it ... well, harry_ginnyphile is working on it, and then I'll be working ... Oh, you know what I mean, don't you? |
Jai-kun
Thursday 18th January 2007 12:48 | Moods |
Well, I like it. You've taken a bit of a departure from how most people might write the foursome at this stage in the canon-tale, but that doesn't neccessarily make it unrealistic. If anything, it is possibly more true-to-life than most stories.
I also liked how Fleur turned out to be quite deep in her understanding of Harry. And brave enough to reach out to Ginny, knowing that Ginny doesn't particularly like her.
Very good story, and my favorite of the "moods" so far. |
| Friday 19th January 2007 08:36 | Moods (Author Response) |
Thank you. I'd agree, but you what it's like: you always like the story best you get reviews for at the moment.
I'm glad you appreciate my approach. Hope you'll keep with me. |
GryffindorDragon
Thursday 18th January 2007 12:41 | Moods |
Interesting insight into Ginny's psyche
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amamama
Thursday 18th January 2007 11:21 | Moods |
Oh, my... Quite the angsty adventure, this. If my understanding of what angst is is correct, that is. I absolutely loved Fleur and I want to thank you a thousand times for making her the observant and understanding person she obviously is. I mean,seriously - she was a Triwizard Champion, and she's marrying Bill. Not a dim-witted twitterhead, that one. Quite the effect, having her describe Harry to Ginny, making Ginny see that she knows far from everything concerning Mr. Greeneyes. It might not be a particularly realistic story (but which story containing wand-waving is?), but it is definitely analytic. And thank you so much for that, I loved your analysis. And I loved the end, where he throws his arms around her.
Soooo looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks for sharing!
Cheers!
Berte |
| Friday 19th January 2007 08:34 | Moods (Author Response) |
| My pleasure. I'm glad I could humour your passion for Fleur, even though I'm not wholly convinced that she is not something like a twitterhead after all. |
Grandma Kate
Thursday 18th January 2007 09:10 | Moods |
Fleur does understand Harry- "“‘Ee broke up with you for the same reason. ‘Ee does not want to lose you and so ‘ee leaves you in order to protect you. It’s not logical, because you’re a Weasley and always in danger. And ‘ee still loses you, because ‘ee’s not with you. But ‘Arry’s instincts tell ‘eem that this is the only thing ‘ee can do. And it’s totally against his character not to do something.”
This was a particularily good and clear "Mood". |
| Thursday 18th January 2007 10:10 | Moods (Author Response) |
| Thanks. And, yeah, I think it does come down to that. |
Curren
Thursday 18th January 2007 07:37 | Moods |
| if written well, the analytic stories are one of the most fascinating to read. In other words, i love this story, and the whole series by the way. I know that I've read a lot of stories in the past that have delved into ginny's mind (and some are excellent stories), but this does stand out imo. |
| Thursday 18th January 2007 10:09 | Moods (Author Response) |
| Thank you very much. I'm glad to hear that you're not tired of the issue. |
