kash2210
Monday 22nd September 2008 06:30 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
Once again your disclaimer had me laughing!!!
Nice touch with the Androdeda story. I read your notes at the bottom about the flirting and totally agree with your way of thinking, Tonks seemed like that, cheeky and upfront, and Harry, well he's had a fairly sheltered upbringing in some respects, especially social interaction with the oposite sex, so sometimes innocense can come across as an attractive trait!
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gymnastgal19
Monday 22nd October 2007 21:22 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
wow! this is interesting! I thought that someone broke through the wards or something lol.
I think that something did happen between harry and kyla... lol
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Wolf\\\'s Scream
Wednesday 18th July 2007 15:25 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
Err... Just a bit before the stuff about "you-know-what," Hermione says "You started experimenting; when we were hunting for the Horcruxes, you said something...." So the dreaded term's been mentioned in Tonks' presence already....
The discussion of the effective power of Harry's wandless spells is interesting and
all, but I don't see the reason to measure the radius in miles the first time, then
kilometers the second. (What next? Furlongs?) That said, Tonks' admonishment to Harry ("Stop messing with the weather,you're scaring the Muggles.") was rather cute. :-)
[As far as the "partial catharsis" from last chapter, I think I was thinking of
Harry, there; Ginny's wound pretty tight at the close of that chapter. And I think
many of us have some understanding of what can happen to an over-wound spring. :-/]
Harry being (slightly) evasive about what he was observing in the night sky -- and Hermione's decidedly sisterly reaction thereto -- was cute. :-)
I'm rather relieved that -- so far, at least -- it seems that nothing regrettable
happened between Harry & Kyla. :-} Which plays into your second note,and I can see Harry being a tad naive about such things.
Re: you note on Tonks -- yeah, I see that. Works for me.
And yeah, I've done beta work (though not on this story): I definitely appreciate what they do. |
| Thursday 19th July 2007 13:19 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Hey Wolf's Scream. Where've you been!
Yes well that was the point of the whole conversation with Tonks was that it was already blown when they started arguing about whether or not she should be allowed to hear it.
The measurement thing...it got changed, and changed and changed..and ended up getting mangled. One of these days I'll get my beta to go sort that out...i should have given them all in furlongs, that would have been awesome.
Yes my slinky came to overwound spring syndrome.
Yes, Harry is quite naive about many things, and Tonks is not but Tonks would be a lot of fun to hang out with!
Thanks for taking the time to go back and review each chapter. It's very nice of ya! |
Wolf\\\'s Scream
Wednesday 18th July 2007 15:08 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
Err... Just a bit before the stuff about "you-know-what," Hermione says "You started experimenting; when we were hunting for the Horcruxes, you said something...." So the dreaded term's been mentioned in Tonks' presence already....
The discussion of the effective power of Harry's wandless spells is interesting and
all, but I don't see the reason to measure the radius in miles the first time, then
kilometers the second. (What next? Furlongs?) That said, Tonks' admonishment to Harry ("Stop messing with the weather,you're scaring the Muggles.") was rather cute. :-)
[As far as the "partial catharsis" from last chapter, I think I was thinking of
Harry, there; Ginny's wound pretty tight at the close of that chapter. And I think
many of us have some understanding of what can happen to an over-wound spring. :-/]
Harry being (slightly) evasive about what he was observing in the night sky -- and Hermione's decidedly sisterly reaction thereto -- was cute. :-)
I'm rather relieved that -- so far, at least -- it seems that nothing regrettable
happened between Harry & Kyla. :-} Which plays into your second note,and I can see Harry being a tad naive about such things.
Re: you note on Tonks -- yeah, I see that. Works for me.
And yeah, I've done beta work (though not on this story): I definitely appreciate what they do. |
regdc
Thursday 14th June 2007 01:09 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
Tonks is pure Brit and as such all of her comments on distance would be in kilometers not miles.
As a Brit, I just had to respond to this.
The British use miles, we do not use kilometers like the mainland europeans (we do not consider ourselves European anyway). We also use pints, acres, stones and pounds as well.
The metric system is taught in schools; but I am old enough to remember being taught in imperial measurements; I also remember pounds shillings and pence (where there were 240 pennies to the pound and 12 pennies to the shilling and 20 shillings to the pound).
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| Thursday 14th June 2007 09:01 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Well thanks for your input I appreciate it.
I have wondered for a long time, given that Wizards do not use any of the Muggle school system if they would even use any Muggle units of measure. If they do use Muggle units of measure I would think it more likely that they would use Imperial units more than anything else, but it's difficult to know for sure. These things are typically learned at such a young age, and we just don't have much insight into what wizards learn before they leave for Hogwarts. For example I would find it highly unlikely that most potions are given in Imperial or Metric units, but temperature must be measured in some form unless all potions are heated to the same temperature.
Mostly I tried not to get too bogged down in it. Hopefully the underlying story is still enjoyable even if there are glaring items that are very non British. Like the word figure. It took me forever to figure out an alterantive to having characters figure things out. I always figured that British people must figure things, but no, they work out, they suss, they consider, but never figure, go figure.
Thanks for reading!
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lindaleeann
Wednesday 13th June 2007 14:54 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
| Tonks is pure Brit and as such all of her comments on distance would be in kilometers not miles. |
| Wednesday 13th June 2007 19:50 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Uh oh you've caught me and learned my horrible secret. I'm not British. Oh and apparently not good with standard units of measurment. I'd be a horrible Brit anyway, i hate tea.
Thanks for reading!
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GryffindorDragon
Sunday 27th May 2007 16:01 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
Nice bit with the snow .
'According to official Ministry records it’s impossible for and adult wizard to perform magic without a wand.' -- aside from the typo ('an adult wizard'), I was under the impression that Dumbledore and Voldemort performed wandless magic in canon (cf. HP Lexicon, which refers to JKR's chat at ComicRelief -- 'You can do unfocused and uncontrolled magic without a wand (for instance when Harry blows up Aunt Marge) but to do really good spells, yes, you need a wand.' [http://w w w.accio-quote.org/articles/2001/0301-comicrelief-staff.htm].
I like the bit about Andromeda and the worn picture of Ginny; Harry obviously cares for her alot.
Kyla is an interesting interlude, but in a way a bit disturbing. Harry can feel so comfortable with this family and get on fabulously with the daughter, but can't return to his real family. A bit melancholy, eh?
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| Sunday 27th May 2007 16:54 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Yes wandless magic is currently thought to be "impossible" by the ministry establishment. However in this particular book, Harry has no respect for what is and is not possible. Magic of course makes the impossible possible all the time.
Little annoying for Hermione, but Harry's not good a following rules, even the rules of magic.
Thanks, Thanks so much for the encouragment. Glad you liked the bit about Andromeda, I thought it was cute.
Harry's time with the Bryson's comes fairly late in his estrangement from his real family. Time does start to heal wounds eventually, and while he wasn't quite ready yet to face Ginny, I think he finally had broken through his despair enough start feeling positive emotions again, even if he wasn't quite ready to process them well. |
eaglesnest
Saturday 5th May 2007 08:57 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
| I commend you on the pace of your story and your willingness to spend the time required to properly describe his step by step recovery. Tonks was hilarious. I love the older woman who can tease and flirt mercilessly with Harry, yet at the same time know that she is not trying to seduce him or put a move on him. Their true friendship comes through and I'd like to think that JKR would approve. I wonder if that dark memory will have some later significance? The story with Kyla is interesting. I presume at the time that Ginny was still in his heart, yet no mention is made in Harry's thoughts or Hermione's questions in the pensieve. |
| Saturday 5th May 2007 22:51 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Thanks I'm a little worried about dragging the therapy thing a little too far, but right now it's the focus of Harry's life, so you get a large dose of it. And it's a great opportunity to tell some of the interesting things that happened to Harry during his time away. That said, not every day of his self imposed exile was interesting, so we'll probably be skipping much of it.
I've always been a bit facinated by Tonks, and I she's an important character in this story. Her self appointed role as 'person who embarrases Harry' if fun, and she does it well. However you'll see the love she has for th man who saved her unborn child come out as the story progressses. |
Patches
Saturday 5th May 2007 05:24 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
| These are pretty good memories for Harry to start with. The dark memory is a little scary. I imagine we will learn more about that latter. The scene with Kyla is understandable. Young girl full of dreams of romance with a handsome stranger. Harry sure fits the bill. At least he was the one to suggest that they go inside. Thanks for writing I look forward to more stories. p |
| Saturday 5th May 2007 22:54 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Don't be scared, the dark memory is more of a mystery than anything insidius, it doesnt get explained for a while.
Yes Harry is quite the mysterious stranger and Kyla is smitten. They are a good match, it's too bad Harry has so much baggage. |
cckeimig
Tuesday 10th April 2007 14:39 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
| Don't worry. Your less-than-brief chapters are all worth the wait. This was fantastic. |
| Tuesday 10th April 2007 15:07 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Well thank you. I'm glad you liked it!
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Soul_Blade.ville
Thursday 5th April 2007 00:15 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
| you would think that spending time with other people and seeing himself getting better that harry would relaise he was better off with his friends, but obviously he still isnt the brightest cookie |
| Thursday 5th April 2007 08:57 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Well you'd think that Harry would never doubt Ginny's love for him, but he he does it anyway. Silly hero.
It's too bad nobody posted a note with while Harry was there, she could have pecked some sense into him. |
whimsy
Friday 30th March 2007 18:56 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
So did you hear the one about the wizard and the farmer's daughter? JavaScript:smiley('');
I was completely unprepared for this chapter. Good. And I look forward with anticipation to the next one.
I also doubt that Harry had a fling with Kyla. There is nothing in his behavior to indicate that he had what likely would have been a pleasant and healing relationship unless it ended very badly which may be what occurred.
A point of terminology. "Spy" would be an odd term to describe what the Brysons think Harry was. "Commando" or "Special Forces" would be more likely. |
| Friday 30th March 2007 23:03 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Possibly, but Harry would have likely been able to talk about the fact that he was a Commando or Special forces operative, just not specifically about the missions he was one. Working as a true intelligence operative, the key is for nobody to really know, and even after it's over people aren't supposed to know that you used to be a spy.
I have some of my own acquantences that given their past histories, and particular skills it's likely that they would have been, but they have better cover stories than Harry. That's the part that makes it unlikely that Harry is a spy, as spy would have a very exact explination for exactly what they did during the previous few years. Some of it would even be true. However the Brysons are a rather simple and backwards family. They don't own a television, or even have a phone. They're only regular access to the outside world is by an old radio. That is how they choose to live in their corner of rural Scotland. It's not entirely meant to be realistic, but it's meant to be someplace where Harry wouldn't be likely to be found.
They are good people though, and quite fond of our hero.
I am glad that it surprised you and yet you still like it.
Thanks for the review and your thoughts, I appreciate them! And that is quite a collection of winking smiley's I might have to try and corner the market. |
ilyhp102
Friday 30th March 2007 10:01 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
| really good story cant wait till ginny see's harry again |
| Friday 30th March 2007 22:55 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Well I hope you'll wait.
Thanks for the review! |
Arnel
Thursday 29th March 2007 23:46 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
This chapter was well worth the wait...and fifteen pages is not an incrediblely huge chapter. (I wish I could contain my own chapters to this short length!) The longer format allows the writer to express himself/herself in more detail, thus making for a richer text and a better experience overall for the reader.
That said, I really enjoyed the glimpses into Harry's memories. I felt sad when all they saw was darkness, understanding this memory personified Harry's demeanor at that particular moment in time. The fluffy side of me was really touched with his story of Andromeda/Ginny and when the family took Harry in I nearly heaved a sigh of relief. The fact that Harry surruptitiously used magic to get his work done made me smile as did his time under the stars with Kyla.
All in all, this is a very satisfying and gratifying chapter. Keep them coming because I'm enjoying this story immensely. |
| Friday 30th March 2007 06:23 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Hi Arnel!
Thanks for reading and once again reviewing. I'm going to have to catch up on New Year, New hope. I'm a little behind. I'm not sure what font size your reading at, but if you squeezed this into fifteen pages, you must have excellent eyes! LOL! I really do try to make the experience as rich as possible without over doing the wordiness, but as I cuised over the 200,000 word mark somewhere prior to half way throught the story I realized that it will probably be longer than OOTP, scary.
However, if I can keep all of you interested it will be well worth it. As long as my fingers don't wear out ,as i try to finish this before July.
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rose
Thursday 29th March 2007 22:44 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
| I enjoyed this chapter. You should always take as much time as needed to put out a chapter that is well written and without many grammatical errors. I find this makes stories so much more enjoyable to read. I'm looking forward to your next chapter and hope to see some Harry/Ginny interaction soon. Hint! Hint! |
| Friday 30th March 2007 06:08 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Hi Rose, welcome to PS!
Well I'm always sure to make plenty of grammatical errors, that way my proofreader Emily has work to do...Well maybe they are unintentional and she just saves my story, but it is a chore for all my helpers to sort them all out. It all seems so clear when I'm writing, but it comes out kind of jumbled. I must have a messy mind.
Hmm well when Harry met Ginny, again, is comming soon, but you have a couple more chapters to go until that happens. Hopefully it will be worth all this build up.
Thanks for reading and thanks so much for leaving a review! |
HiJane_2
Thursday 29th March 2007 22:29 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
| Yay! Another chapter! I forgive you for the wait, because it was well worth it! The chapter is so long! I love your story so much, and I like this take on going through Harry's thoughts and memories! It's very exciting to read about, but what's with the black memory? I suppose that you'll be answering that eventually, but I thought I'd ask you anyway. Loved it and I LOVE Tonks! Great work you've done! ~HiJane_2 |
| Friday 30th March 2007 06:02 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Hi Jane!
Well I can't tell you what the black memory is yet, because Harry doesn't know and he hasn't told me yet. We'll just all have to work that out together.
I'm glad your enjoying story. Thank you for letting me know, I really appreciate it!
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lantis222
Thursday 29th March 2007 20:41 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
| That was so sad, I really feel bad for Harry. I wonder what the black memory was that he doesn't want to remember bad enough that he would black it out. Anyway that was a wonderful chapter, I can't wait til the next. |
| Friday 30th March 2007 05:58 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
Ah the good old black memory... I beginning to wonder what that is too. Someone should really tell the author to get back to that.
Thanks for reading and reviewing. |
Wolfric
Thursday 29th March 2007 20:40 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
| I enjoyed the chapter a great deal. I didn't think Tonks was out of character, I think your comment in the note was spot on. If Harry has an affair with Kyla(which I doubt) it would make Ginny crazy. Your concept of the therapy technique that Hermione is using is quite ingenious; if it were possible it might well be effective. I look forward to future installments. Thank you for your efforts. W |
| Friday 30th March 2007 05:48 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
An affair? They broke up seven and a half years previously and he's only seen her a handful of times since. Your level of commitment to your ex's is truly remarkable. Hermione's actually trying to find out if anyone might be waiting for Harry to come home after she kidnapped him...and someone might just be.
Thanks for reading and thanks Wulfric, my most loyal reviewer for the review as always it's appreciated. I'm glad your enjoying it.
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Elvenlaughter
Thursday 29th March 2007 19:49 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny |
| So... was Harry the fox? Animagus and all that? I am simply loving this story. It's so fascinating, the idea of him viewing his own memories for the first time in a way. When's the next chapter due? |
| Thursday 29th March 2007 20:20 | Harry Potter and the Toll of Destiny (Author Response) |
That would be telling!
Thank you for the review it's always appreciated. Harry's not completely viewing them for the first time exactly. It's more a tremendous sense of Deja vu. He has an insiders perspective on what's happening. As he gets more and more of the memories the pieces of the puzzle fit together and he can start to anticipate what's in the memories. That's part of why Hermione skips around so much.
The next chapter will be out when the beta's have finished beating it into submission. They have it, and it's had some working over, so hopefully soon.
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