Patches
Monday 12th November 2007 05:07 | Curse Breakers: The Maya |
| This is really complicated. You are writing a really good story here. It has a lot of side stories that flow into the main story. I like these flash backs. They help to fill in "the rest of the story"! I look forward to more of this story. Thanks for writing. p |
| Tuesday 13th November 2007 17:09 | Curse Breakers: The Maya (Author Response) |
This was actually a bit of an experiment on my part. Although I've read stories where the past is shown through flashbacks, I'd never seen one where the past and the present really played off each other. So, i thought, I can do this, and gave it a go. I think it adds a uniqueness to the story and a depth for the reader that is difficult without a lot of exposition, which i don't like.
thanks,
Jonathan |
narumi
Friday 9th November 2007 07:50 | Curse Breakers: The Maya |
| Wow, very powerful chapter, crazy ending! I usually don't like a lot of flashbacks, but this works. I'm glad to see that you're writing is back in it's element, this chapter was great. |
| Sunday 11th November 2007 14:55 | Curse Breakers: The Maya (Author Response) |
| Thanks. This is actually the first story I've written that uses flashbacks so extensively. However, it really helps with the overall flow of the story. |
critmo
Sunday 3rd June 2007 05:37 | Curse Breakers: The Maya |
I may have said so before, but: I've written stories with less words. Which is meant to express my undiluted admiration.
We've learned a few things concerning G/H's relationship, but I still don't get it really. So I'm looking forward to the net chapter. |
| Thursday 21st June 2007 17:59 | Curse Breakers: The Maya (Author Response) |
| It will take a while to get through G/H's relationship and what is happening. Most of it is tied up in Ginny's desire not to think about it and avoid it and deny it. Thanks for reading and reviewing. |
crucio
Wednesday 30th May 2007 10:59 | Curse Breakers: The Maya |
That was a nice setup for a Ginny Croft and Harriana Jones tale.
[Voice of the guy who speaks in blockbuster trailers on]
Lots of backstory, flashbacks a-plenty, smashing OC's (why I have the feeling that the Wendal guy is screaming DBTA?), sexual tension, exotic imagery, prophetic dreams... a swashbuckling epic tale of exotic perils that stand menacingly between our adventurous couple and the fulfillment of their torrid passion...
[Voice of the guy who speaks in blockbuster trailers off]
The scenery and focus in curse breaking reminds me a lot of JBern's "Bungle in the jungle", but similarities seem to end there.
On the positive side, I like a lot the descriptions of the locations, the Maya myths touches, or the fact that the war has taken its toll of the Light side and created scars that will drive your characters.
On the negative side, there are a lot of cliches going on to my taste, but I guess they come with the genre and that is probably what you are after. Be careful on how you use prophetic devices. Sometimes they can be more a spoiler than an "impending doom" creation device. KEDme's SoS is a clear example.
Anyway I am looking forward to read more of this story and see how it develops. Thanks a lot for sharing.
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| Saturday 2nd June 2007 08:31 | Curse Breakers: The Maya (Author Response) |
LOL. I have a film degree and movie imagery and setups tend to filter into my writing easily. I always have had an Indian Jones feel as the goal for the story.
I've never read "Bungle in the Jungle" and unfortunately, I think I'll avoid it until I'm complete with this story. Although, i will keep it on my list of to reads.
As for cliches, well, the genre in and of itself leads to some very standard cliches, such as the gathered team, the apprentice/mentor relationship, the struggle against another group. Some are probably unintentional, but without a huge discussion on each one, i doubt we will ever truly know.
Thanks for the warning on the prophetic devices, but I am being very careful with it. I hate prophecies in stories as such. You know, the actual vague and ambiguous phrases of future action and people like the one in canon? However, prophetic dreams, or dreams in general, I enjoy as a device for the simple fact that they are pure imagery and thus are not constrained by any ingrained meaning of language. As such, to be safe, i have not given the reader enough information to interpret the dream beyond what Ginny interprets it as. Hopefully it will work out correctly and not backfire on me,.
Thanks for the reviews and the criticism. I appreciate it. |
MrRobertsIII
Wednesday 30th May 2007 06:53 | Curse Breakers: The Maya |
I can only guess that the unusual title is responsible for the low number of reviews. It can`t be the story itself as that is first rate.
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| Wednesday 30th May 2007 07:37 | Curse Breakers: The Maya (Author Response) |
That might be a good assumption. Titles are a tricky animal, and a really bad one can destroy a good story. I had several other title ideas for a time. Beginnings was one, which i disliked. Simply The Curse Breakers. Another was Ginny Weasley and the Mayan Tombs. But none of them really auth my eye, so I settled on Curse Breakers: The Maya.
I would rather have a simple descriptive title than a flashy one. I trust my writing will give the story some good word of mouth to other readers.
Anyway, thanks for compliment and for reading and reviewing. |
