AlwaysGinny
Wednesday 3rd December 2008 13:35 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| This is a very good plot, but it is poorly written. |
noylj
Sunday 10th August 2008 18:39 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| Then, after Harry goes back, and Moldie is about to be vanguished, Moldie goes back in time and corrects things so he can win, only Harry then goes back again...... |
| Sunday 10th August 2008 21:35 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake (Author Response) |
| no he won't and no he won't |
HaloStalker
Sunday 20th July 2008 10:34 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
i thought its great i really like this little side story keep up the great work. i found it really easy to read and enjoyable all the way threw.......... cant wait for more i will being checking for more chapters for the future.
goodluck=P |
Bethina
Saturday 19th July 2008 19:30 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| I laughed when you included Intromit's Fate's Debt one fanfic I truly enjoy. This one is off to a good start. |
the_critic
Saturday 19th July 2008 17:42 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| I'm not understanding this very well. A lot of the sentences are formed the same, and awkwardly. I would also recomend putting in more foreshadowing... |
cckeimig
Wednesday 16th July 2008 20:07 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| This story is going great so far. I only recommend you look up the difference between retched and wretched (the first is a verb and the second is the adjective you meant to use to describe Pettigrew). |
LeprechaunJV
Tuesday 15th July 2008 19:54 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
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blue artemis
Tuesday 15th July 2008 15:28 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake |
| That was a good, detailed chapter. They really don't need to have Wormtail around, now do they? |
| Wednesday 16th July 2008 19:28 | Dumbledore's Biggest Mistake (Author Response) |
| no they don't |
