hermione&ginny
Sunday 21st August 2011 19:22 | Master of Life |
| Oooh! Who's this???? |
harry_ginnyfan
Sunday 2nd November 2008 07:19 | Master of Life |
| great chapter |
knightsbridge
Saturday 25th October 2008 04:56 | Master of Life |
Welcome back to writing. You have been missed, and while I started this story on your Website, the print size reverted to the smallest possible. I hoped you would post in another place, as Migrain headaches are not on the top of my list of things to deal with.
Thank you for sharing your talent once again.
Darian |
TangoCharlie
Sunday 28th September 2008 22:05 | Master of Life |
FANTASTIC CHAPTER!!
I love the first sentence - the construct is terrific. The rest of the chpater met this high standard.
The scene in the pub with ron and Hermione was great, very in character. The issues in the Ministry are something different from other fics I've read set around the same time as yours. I'm fascinated to see how things turn out, given that the immediate future of the Ministry isn't the perfect solution I guess so many of us assumed it would be.
I'm glad we're getting some glimpses into the lives of Lily and James, because this is an area that really interests me, and the scenes at Gringotts were well done.
I must say I was pleased, given you've introduced the Hallows as a plot point, that you've provided a very logical and in-character reason for it. It makes a lot of sense that after recently being pestered about the Hallows, Xenophilius' interest in them would be given a renewed vigour.
And the end of the chapter - a great cliffhangar! |
kash2210
Tuesday 23rd September 2008 14:17 | Master of Life |
The story's continuing at a nice pace.
Nice to see that you haven't tried to make the wizarding world all sweetness & light, now that Riddle is dead. In all cases where a dictator has gone it takes a long time for the good to get a real foothold in changing the country, and it's nice to see you've added that touch of realism into your story. Keep it up! |
ngayonatkailanman
Friday 12th September 2008 11:02 | Master of Life |
| Oh for the love of Merlin! Hasn't Harry earned his "normal" life? This is getting more exciting by the minute. |
Prongs739
Thursday 21st August 2008 13:52 | Master of Life |
No' again! I HATE CLIFFIES!
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The Boss
Monday 18th August 2008 04:05 | Master of Life |
Lovely progressing of this story. Its great to have you writing such wonderful work that people such as myslef enjoy
Just one query.In Book 7, I believe that JKR said that the Invisibility Cloak could not be Summoned. Have you changed that for the purposes of this story? Anyhow, on to the next chapter.Loving this story.
The Boss |
| Monday 18th August 2008 07:00 | Master of Life (Author Response) |
| Now that you mention it, I seem to recall that the cloak couldn't be summoned. But perhaps the Elder Wand (another Hallow) could summon it? |
toskin
Thursday 14th August 2008 19:59 | Master of Life |
| No! Who has cornered them? Don't make us wait too long to find out. |
GinnySavesHarry1998
Thursday 14th August 2008 04:47 | Master of Life |
Ah, what? Please update soon. :-)
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GhostWriter
Wednesday 13th August 2008 22:53 | Master of Life |
I really liked the interaction between Harry and Ginny, particularly the bit where she agrees to accompany him to Gringotts.
Nice comedy with the eavesdropping on and !
And ooooh! An evil cliffie! |
ngayonatkailanman
Monday 11th August 2008 18:46 | Master of Life |
Merlin! How gripping! And you left us, poor readers, with a cliffie? Oh, no! Not agiain!
Excellent storyline. I think politics is an . What is the Ministry thinking? |
TaylorErvick
Monday 11th August 2008 17:41 | Master of Life |
| Great, keep writing |
summer daisy
Monday 11th August 2008 17:06 | Master of Life |
Eeee exciting
Apparently I need to reread DH, because I've forgotten stuff...
Looking forward to more anyway |
SarahW
Monday 11th August 2008 12:53 | Master of Life |
I was really enjoying the story, until I got to the last bit.
Were you actually talking about snogging? Or is there a comedy suprise solution? I hope so, otherwise Hermione was strident and unsympathetic enough to make a boy even less confident about himself then he already is.
However, after Lavender, it's totally unbelievable that Ron doesn't know exactly what he's doing when he's snogging, when that's all they ever did for months on end. Plus, are we to understand that Hermione spent all of 4th year refining her technique with Krum - is that why she's so much more experienced and fussy?
Sorry, but I've just watched the video of Azkaban, and Hollywood constantly ruin the characters, to use Ron as useless comic relief and Hermione as 'The Heroine' which is what's happening here, sadly. It makes Hermione sound like a cow and Ron a fool. (Ginny's cattiness is in character, if unattractive, so no complaints there!)
Sorry, I know it's not the main gist of the story, which I liked, and apologies if they weren't talking about snogging and you just wanted us to think they were. It just distracted me, and reminded me of the below average films! |
| Monday 11th August 2008 13:10 | Master of Life (Author Response) |
Sarah,
Thank you for taking time to write such a detailed review and to tell me how my story made you feel. Ron's sole kissing experience has been with Lavender. This automatically makes him a bad kisser, IMO. Combine that with the fact that Ron has been consistently characterized as thick and slow on the uptake with regards to relationships, I think that this scene (which did portray kissing) was in character with the books. One of the complaints I have with the books, however, is that Ron and Hermione's relationship is not on solid footing, so I'm portraying them as starting off out of sorts.
I also tend to agree that the movies were sub standard, but try very hard not to base my writings on anything the movies portrayed that wasn't in the books.
As for Hermione being "the Heroine", it's precisely because she wasn't the heroine in the books, that she is coming to her own in this story. She won't be the main protagonist, but she certainly will play a part in the resolution of the plot (as she did in the books).
I hope that the problems you saw in my story won't detract you from reading the rest. I have a few chapters already written and would love to know how you interpret them as well.
Thanks again for reviewing,
Mr.Intel |
jakjakattk
Monday 11th August 2008 12:39 | Master of Life |
| You have done very well with this so fare. I look forward to seeing what comes next and how this story will flow. |
jovelyn_mark
Monday 11th August 2008 10:50 | Master of Life |
| Looking forward to read the next chapter! This is one nice story. Keep writing. |
IHateSnakes
Monday 11th August 2008 09:20 | Master of Life |
| Very good story, and nicely written. I look forward to more. ihs |
