chit.94
Tuesday 14th December 2010 02:05 | The Final Five |
| That was lovely. :'( |
Hihavaniceda
Saturday 26th December 2009 03:15 | The Final Five |
ooooohhhhhh that was so good but sooo sad ! |
snuggle the muggle
Sunday 14th December 2008 20:28 | The Final Five |
I just wanted to let you know that I have rec’d your story and posted a link to it in the new HP LJ community Harry Potter Missing Moments. Your story fits nicely into canon and makes a nice addition to our archives. Please feel free to come over and take a look at what we are doing and your entry (posted under "New-Found Family"). We are a small group at the moment, but we hope to get your story some new readers and some new reviews as we grow.
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Hihavaniceda
Saturday 6th December 2008 03:42 | The Final Five |
| yes ..... that was good ...... mmm have you written more ? I will look. |
tom marvolo riddle
Sunday 16th November 2008 15:27 | The Final Five |
| awsome man really good |
hmrpotter
Wednesday 12th November 2008 09:56 | The Final Five |
| So cute, until the end...then I want to start crying at the sheer unfairness of it all. But without that end, how would we have had our story? Great story. |
noa_potter
Wednesday 5th November 2008 09:58 | The Final Five |
Wow, your story is marvelous!
I want to hear more!
You write beautifully...
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noa_potter
Wednesday 5th November 2008 09:56 | The Final Five |
Wow, your story is marvelous!
You write beautifully...
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RIPHedwig
Friday 17th October 2008 14:00 | The Final Five |
This was really fantastic I'm gutted it didn't win, I voted several times using my different user names!
I see you haven't written anything else, which makes me sad! Definitely write some more stories, this one was brillaint! So sad, yet satisfying in a way, too... Kinda filled me up, nice to see some snapshots of the happy life Lily and James had before their tragic ending (though I never really think of it as an ending considering how much they crop up in the books, and how their names were passed on. A lovely touch for the end of DH, I thought.)
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| Friday 17th October 2008 17:05 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
Hey, thanks for your lovely review and your votes! I'm glad you enjoyed reading the story. I'm certainly of the opinion that from the little we know about Lily and James, they deserved some happiness together ehile they had the chance. It was very therapeutic to write this, and it's good to hear it had the same effect being read.
I've got a stack of other fics lined up ready to go, but as I submitted this as a new author, I need to wait for a regular submission period for the others...
Thanks again for your kinds words : ) |
Neli P
Sunday 12th October 2008 21:37 | The Final Five |
Very beautiful and original! Stories about James and Lily's last moments ALWAYS make me cry ...
Best of luck for the Challenge, OK? |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 07:32 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
| Thank you very much for your kind review! I'm with you about Lily and James and their final moments - it was an interesting therapy to write this. |
ladybug
Friday 10th October 2008 22:45 | The Final Five |
| Oh, goodness, that was a very clever use of tension - as James became more and more relaxed through the story I couldn't help but feel more and more anxious - which is I'm sure what you were striving for. Very nicely done, thank you for a good story. |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 07:27 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
It's been really interesting to hear how people have responded to this story. Some have felt the tension lessen as it does for the Potters, while others have felt it increase knowing what was to come - my goal was to show that both happened, and because of the other (if that makes sense...)
Thank you for your review! |
lety77_7
Thursday 9th October 2008 02:25 | The Final Five |
| Tragic. James and Lily even thinking of expanding their family, only to be betrayed by one of their best friends. I love angst. |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 07:09 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
I'm glad you enjoyed it - I appreciate your review.
One of the things that bothered me the most about Harry losing his parents how and when he did was that it deprived him the possibility of having younger siblings, so I wanted to show that had they been given the opportunity Lily and James would have made Harry part of a very large and loving family. I even considered having Lily reveal she was already expecting another baby, but that was just a bit too much for me... |
harry_ginnyfan
Tuesday 7th October 2008 20:13 | The Final Five |
Very nice story, just sad that it ends like that.
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| Thursday 16th October 2008 06:59 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
Thanks : )
It certainly is a shame that it had to end the way it did, but I hope what happened in the lead-up to that was worth reading. |
aurora luminis
Saturday 4th October 2008 05:49 | The Final Five |
| Well, I just cast my vote for this story. It took courage to write something that doesn't have an 'all is well' ending. One has to accept that it just won't be that popular. I know! Yet beauty will always win in the end: you sow seeds of beauty with this piece, so well written, so human. |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 06:56 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
Wow! Thank you so much for your review (and your vote). I don't know about courage - if I could have given this a happy ending, I would have, but unfortunately my hands were tied on that one. It was for that reason that the events beforehand were all the more important to me. You're very generous with your praise, and it's certainly made me feel like I've achieved what I wanted to - bring some joy and happiness where previously we knew only death and destruction.
Thanks again! |
Dad
Friday 3rd October 2008 12:34 | The Final Five |
| That was the opposite of whatever fluff is. A bit too sad for me. |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 06:49 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
| Thank you for your review. I agree that it's too sad - I like nothing better than a good happy ending, but in this case that just wasn't meant to be. That's partly why I wanted to write thas fic - to balance out the ultimate sadness with some lighter, more positive moments. |
Arnel
Friday 3rd October 2008 07:29 | The Final Five |
This is a fantastic story. The tension at the beginning is palpable and I can feel it draining away as the story progresses. I also like the evoluation of James' complacency towards his wand as he begins to trust that the Fidelius Charm really is hiding him and his family. You've done a really great job translating Voldemort's memories to James' perspective and I therefore give your story .
Good luck with the contest. |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 06:35 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
Thank you for the review - I really appreciate it.
I found it interesting that you felt the tension lessening as the story progressed. That's how it felt to me, but I know that others who have read it felt the tension increasing, knowing what would eventually happen. It's interesting to note different readers' varying perspectives.
Developing James' complacency was an interesting challenge, because I really didn't want to show him just getting sloppy. I wanted to show his family to be the dominant force in his life, and when Lily and Harry were tense and upset, he could not relax, and was constantly on edge. However, once Lily and Harry began to settle, so did he, and on some (I imagine subconcious) level - as you say - finally trust the Fidelius Charm.
Thanks again for the review - I was so excited to hear from on of my favourite authors!! |
lilystar
Wednesday 1st October 2008 23:58 | The Final Five |
| I like this story a lot despite the familiar sad ending. i like how you led up to that final day with James' effort to calm Harry before he went to bed and forgetting his wand. Now I realize why he didn't have it with him in the end. Great insight of what Harry was like with his parents. great story and good luck. |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 06:08 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
Thank you for the review. This fic came about because I felt like I needed some sort of justification about why James didn't have his wand on him when he needed it most, and I also like to hypothesise about what could of been when Harry had his parents with him.
Thanks again : ) |
rich.sanidad
Tuesday 30th September 2008 21:54 | The Final Five |
| Fantastic story! You captured several aspects of parenthood very well. The appearances of the number five were smoothly worked into the story and were barely noticeable. Thanks for the great read and good luck with the competition! |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 05:58 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
Thanks for the review.
I have a bit of a love-hate relationship with writing about parenthood, so I'm glad it came off okay.
I started writing this fic before the Anniversary Challenge was announced, so once it was fun to try and be a bit crafty about weaving in some references to 'five'. I'm glad you picked them up! Honestly though, as well as 'seven' being a number of significance in the HP universe, it's also my favourite number, and I always try to weave it into my writing (HP or otherwise), so in this case, wherever there's a reference to 'five' there's also a second part making it a reference to 'seven'... |
SeaNymph
Tuesday 30th September 2008 21:31 | The Final Five |
| This is an excellent piece of writing. I loved how you expressed James's frustration, and how he soon got over it, unfortunately leading him to be caught off guard by Voldemort. This one had a lot of hidden emotion behind it for me, as well. There's so much we don't know about Lily and James, and how they felt during this time, you portrayed it beautifully...Thanks for writing! |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 05:36 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
Thank you for the review - I really appreciate it. It was inevitable that the Potters' final days were extremely emotional, but in attempting to fill in some of the gaps of what we know we know about Lily and James, I really wanted there to be some positive emotion there as well as those less pleasant.
I'm glad it was something you were able to appreciate : ) |
gymnastgal19
Tuesday 30th September 2008 16:01 | The Final Five |
omg! thats so sad!! i loved reading about them hiding behind the charm from this POV. very nice to read...
thanks for writing!
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| Thursday 16th October 2008 05:28 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
| Thanks for the review - Lily and James' lives, especially the last few years before their deaths, has always been a big point of interest for me. It is a shame that this ultimately had to have a sad ending, but at least they got to enjoy some happier moments : ) |
Astrid
Tuesday 30th September 2008 09:30 | The Final Five |
| It's so everyday, calm, peaceful...but I know what's going to happen, and I can sense the stirring beneath the surface. Good work. |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 05:22 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
Thanks!
I wrote this because I couldn't stand the thought that Lily and James spent their final days as anything less than a happy family. Being in hiding as they were could only have been stressful, and while we can feel the tension rising as the end approaches, I like to think that for the Potters the tension dissipated as they adjusted to their circumstances, and that until the absolute last moment before the end, their final moments were just as you described... everyday, calm and peaceful. |
Grandma Kate
Monday 29th September 2008 13:27 | The Final Five |
| This is full of foreshadowing and increasing tension but is also a delightful look at the young Potters and their attempts to console or distract a fussy toddler. |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 05:06 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
| Thanks for your review. I've always been intrigued by Lily and James' life together, and I figured they deserved to overcome some obstacles, given the one that eventually gets the better of them. |
Capramagus
Monday 29th September 2008 12:24 | The Final Five |
| Chilling. The tension is palpable. The sense of impending doom makes the sweetness and hope all the more precious. |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 04:52 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
| Thanks for the review! I like to think that Lily and James' last days were happy ones, not because they knew they were in danger and were trying to make the most of whatever time they might have, but because they were living their lives like a regular family and enjoying all the ups and downs of parenthood. |
Zeta_one
Monday 29th September 2008 11:35 | The Final Five |
| Good, but sad. |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 04:42 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
| Thanks. I would have liked a happier ending too, but this as my attempt to show that even though their deaths were tragic, Lily and James (with Harry, of course) were able to enjoy some happiness together as a family while they had the time. |
AwesomeGryffindor
Monday 29th September 2008 11:30 | The Final Five |
| How utterly beautiful and heartbreaking at the same time. This is a lovely glimpse into the lives of James, Lily and Harry those last few days. I love stories with baby Harry and James trying to entertain him and learning new magic tricks was adorable. Nice recurring theme with James having to have his wand with him at every moment, only to not have it the time he'd need it most. Beautiful story! |
| Thursday 16th October 2008 04:38 | The Final Five (Author Response) |
Thanks for your review!
When I read DH and found out more about what happened on that infamous Halloween night, straight away it struck me as unusual that James was caught so off-guard, so I wondered what circumstances might have led to that happening. With James and Lily being such loving and devoted parents, I thought that the only thing that could have distracted them from the threat of Voldemort was Harry and their efforts to ensure his happiness. I could see that if something was wrong with Harry, then that would become their main concern over anything else, and as he became more relaxed and contented, so would they... |
