angelmorph
Wednesday 7th October 2015 09:23 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
After reading your entire story, I must say this is my favourite chapter.
I found your characterisation of Petunia spot on and particularly enjoyed the glimpses at her thought process. The attention to detail (Petunia's as well as your own) was great.
Petunia's resorting to sherry to calm herself added a humorous note to the chapter.
Last but not least, I loved the line you ended with. |
gymnastgal19
Saturday 10th January 2009 16:20 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| sounds interesting! |
gioia
Sunday 4th January 2009 22:00 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
I'm just stopping by to let you know I loved the story and left you a rec over at Know-It-Alls!
Thank you for all your hard work on this story!
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| Thursday 8th January 2009 17:19 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
Wow, thanks so much! I've never heard of this site, but I'm very honored and looking forward to checking out the other stories posted there.
I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. |
BlueSkye
Tuesday 30th December 2008 09:58 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| You paint a wonderful, clear picture of a woman who lies to herself even more than to the outside world. You have a rare talent to write a whole chapter about one character that is so interesting that I read it several times to find all the details. I wonder what Petunia will learn this Christmas!i |
Avanelle
Sunday 21st December 2008 09:08 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| What a brilliant idea! I am so totally hooked on this. |
Joan Glover
Sunday 14th December 2008 08:40 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
Dear Melindaleo,
What a grand idea! I look forward to the rest of the story -- it has much potential.
Joan Glover |
Felix Felicis
Saturday 13th December 2008 19:58 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| Very good start, you've got me hooked. Is Petunia really seeing ghosts or is there something else going on? And why didn't Vernon wake at the sound? I love your writing style and I look forward to more of this. It's been a while since we've seen a new story from you, so this is double exciting! |
Shannon
Friday 12th December 2008 07:07 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| I love this concept! Great job getting into the mind of Petunia Dursley. Quite the scary place to be! I'm curious about the "save her family" part of the story description. Will that be literally, in a physical sense, or more of an emotional sense? Of course you can't answer, but I'll be reading to find out! |
bbnaz
Thursday 11th December 2008 14:09 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| Well you have my attention! I am looking forward to some tasty story telling from you! |
hedwig5221
Wednesday 10th December 2008 11:16 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
I\'ve been MIA from here for so long! I logged in today and saw this and just squeed!!!!!
You\'ve done a great job depicting Petunia\'s POV...she is definitely one of my least favorite people and you have done much to continue my aversion to her! Wonderful job and I look forward to the next chapter!
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majolie
Monday 8th December 2008 19:49 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| Ooh - great start. I was excited to see a new story posted from you. Can't wait to read more! |
shimotsuki
Monday 8th December 2008 13:15 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
Intriguing! Petunia certainly has a lot to rethink, heh.
Nice job with the small hints about big changes or problems, like Dudley being interested in Harry's situation, and the throw-away references to Petunia's sherry and Vernon's weight.
I look forward to seeing where this is going. |
| Monday 8th December 2008 15:02 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
Petunia is a mystery, is 't she? For the life of me, I can't understand how she could treat her sister's child the way she did, but it's a topic that never ceases to intrigue me.
I hope you enjoy the rest. |
nundu
Monday 8th December 2008 09:39 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| This is off to a great start! I love the tiny details that make it a rich story. Can't wait for the next chapter! |
| Monday 8th December 2008 14:57 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks! The next one is almost ready with some Petunia and Lily action. It's funny to write a story where Petunia is the main character. |
rhetor
Sunday 7th December 2008 22:20 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
Lily as the Ghost of Christmas Past? This should be amusing.
You've got Petunia nailed, all right. Interesting to see what comes of this...
Ken |
| Monday 8th December 2008 14:55 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Hey! There's a blast from the past! Nice to hear from you. Yes, Lily's up next, and that chapter is close... |
PhoenixFeathers
Sunday 7th December 2008 18:42 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| ...................................................................................................................................................... hmm..... nice lead. very attention-grabbing and spirited (pun intended) ...................................................................................................................................... |
| Monday 8th December 2008 14:54 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| I hope you enjoy the rest! |
lantis222
Sunday 7th December 2008 16:28 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| You're back!!!!!! YAY!!!!!!! I like the beginning. Keep it coming and update soon! |
| Monday 8th December 2008 14:54 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks! This one should move quickly. |
ibelieveintruelove
Sunday 7th December 2008 14:57 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| Ah no way!!! That's so cool!! This is an awesome idea, I can't wait to see how this whole thing plays out. I already know you're an amazing writer so this is going to be great! |
| Monday 8th December 2008 14:52 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks much! I hope you enjoy the rest. |
Baby Boomer
Sunday 7th December 2008 10:40 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| I can't wait to read more. |
| Monday 8th December 2008 14:51 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| More's on the way. |
The Seeker
Saturday 6th December 2008 17:57 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
Hi Melinda,
Among all the spot-on emotions you have depicted in this opening chapter, Petunia ability to delude herself stands out. Her thoughts about Harry are ones we are acquainted with, but you bring us so many more: the hussy, whom Petunia has never met, who is obviously after her brilliant boy. Vernon immediately demanding dinner two step into their entry. Lily always causing messes she had to clean up. But the most telling were the lifeless pecks on the cheek exchanged by Vernon and Petunia, and her rationalization about their lack of anything to talk about during dinner.
In addition to setting up the rest of the story, you've constructed a wonderful look into Petunia's life and the length's she goes to misinterpret it.
Marvelous job, Melinda! Looking forward to the next!
Best, Jim |
| Sunday 7th December 2008 08:03 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
Aww, thanks, Jim! You know this story wouldn't be anywhere without you. I'll be sure to acknowlege that before it's out.
You know I've never cared for Petunia, and I think that woman could rationalize away just about anything. Let's see how she does with ghosts in her bedroom. |
freshwater
Saturday 6th December 2008 10:30 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| One more note....for the Ghost of Christmas Present: Severus? and for Christmas future: Fred Weasley? I'm probably way off.....but their interactions with Pet could be fun! |
| Sunday 7th December 2008 08:00 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| I love seeing everyone's guesses - and I'll be eager to hear what you think as they're revealed. |
freshwater
Saturday 6th December 2008 10:26 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
Evil cliffie....remember, Santa knows if you've been naughty or if you've been nice.
Your tongue-in-cheek statements about Petunia's POV and her motivations are very amusing....looking forward to your version of this classic tale. |
| Sunday 7th December 2008 07:59 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks! I'll make sure I'm on Santa's good list then! Lily is the first visitor, and I'm working on that chapter right now. |
krimzzen
Friday 5th December 2008 20:37 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
Wonderful writing as always! I am hooked already and can't wait to read the next part.
Thanks for sharing...
Krim |
| Sunday 7th December 2008 07:58 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks! I hope to get it all posted quickly. |
Chatmandu
Friday 5th December 2008 18:47 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
Oh yes! Clapping my hands with holiday glee! A new story from Melindalee (o)
(This is why I don't write fanfic poetry)
Actually you are creeping me out with the Petunia POV. Oh lordy that character is a piece of work and you have captured her bourgeois little mind SO well. If you will excuse me, I need to get some egg nog and await the rest of your loverly tale! |
| Sunday 7th December 2008 07:56 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying it. Petunia is something, isn't she? Well, her perfectly normal life is about to get shaken up a bit. |
She Who Must Be Obeyed
Friday 5th December 2008 16:26 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
How excited was I when I realised that you had started to write something new? This excited! Fab start, can't wait to read more. |
| Friday 5th December 2008 16:42 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks much! This is a short one, but I hope you enjoy it. |
Ocean Dream
Friday 5th December 2008 15:23 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| Great timing! And of course the beginning of the story seems promising. Hope it'll continue soon. :-) |
| Friday 5th December 2008 16:41 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| I hope to keep the updates quick and regular. Thanks! |
Grandma Kate
Friday 5th December 2008 14:44 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
Oh! Delicious!
What a treat to read one of your stories again. Lily is very appropriate for Christmas Past. I guess Sirius for Christmas Present and Dumbledore for what will come to pass if she doesn\'t change.
I picture Petunia finishing off the sherry bottle every other day and chewing cloves to get rid of the smell. |
| Friday 5th December 2008 16:40 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
Thanks! This one is a short one, but I'm working on something longer. I'm not going to tell you the identities of the other two ghosts yet.
Lily will get her chance to speak her mind next chapter. |
hagridsheart
Friday 5th December 2008 14:31 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
outstanding chapter, do we have a start to another great Melindaleo saga?
i hope so
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| Friday 5th December 2008 16:38 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks! This one is just a short, Christmas story - 5 chapters in all. I hope you enjoy it, though. |
snds
Friday 5th December 2008 13:28 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| it was so nice to be reading something written by you again, as always your doing an amazing job so far and can't wait for the rest of it!!! |
| Friday 5th December 2008 13:46 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks so much! I hope you enjoy the rest. |
tinabell
Friday 5th December 2008 11:53 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
Squee!!!
I've so been looking forward to this, but this first chapter is a big tease! You have Petnunia down-pat! I'm glad to see that you've carried forward Dudley's parting "kinship" towards Harry and Petunia's displeasure with it. You convey very well how boringly normal Petunia and Vernon are. I can only hope that Lily is going to give her sister what-for and look forward to the next chapter!
Tina |
| Friday 5th December 2008 13:48 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
Heh - she is boring, isn't she? You know how I feel about the Dursleys, so the ghosts won't go easy on her.
I promise all 5 chapters will be posted fairly quickly. |
angeli
Friday 5th December 2008 10:24 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| wow... this is ...something!! hope you update soon!! |
| Friday 5th December 2008 10:50 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| I hope you mean something good! The next chapter is in the works. |
Dad
Friday 5th December 2008 10:11 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
Good start, but be warned. Christmas stories that are not finished beforwe Christmas gets heare mean Father Christmas will not be coming down your chimney on Christmas Eve.
Yours Festively,
The soulmate of Eebenezer Scrouge |
| Friday 5th December 2008 10:49 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| LOL - I'll be sure it's done by Christmas, then. This one is 5 chapters, and I hope to post them fairly quickly. I hope you enjoy. |
gbtso
Friday 5th December 2008 09:43 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
I thought I would pull my hair out waiting for this to post... and I wasn't disappointed!
You do have such a lovely way of telling a story... I cannot wait for the next installment! Good work, as usual, Melinda!
Smoochie kisses and Christmas lurves,
Jen2 |
| Friday 5th December 2008 10:48 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks! Sorry about your hair. I've been eager to get this one up, too. It's also posted over at PFW, but it was quiet over there, so I thought it bombed, lol. |
BabyRuth
Friday 5th December 2008 09:34 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| Yay!! A new Melindaleo story. |
| Friday 5th December 2008 10:46 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| I hope you enjoy it! This will be a short one - 5 chapters. |
hank
Friday 5th December 2008 08:58 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| This looks like fun!!! I hope Lily gives Petunia a piece of her mind. Speaking of which, is Petunia losing hers a bit? I'm hooked! Can't wait to see what's next! Good job! |
| Friday 5th December 2008 09:34 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Heh - I think Petunia must have always had a part of her mind missing to treat Harry the way she did. Lily's up next chapter. |
GhostWriter
Friday 5th December 2008 07:49 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
Well done, as always, Melinda!
Looking forward to the next chapter. |
| Friday 5th December 2008 09:33 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks, George! I wouldn't have got here without you. |
aharkins
Friday 5th December 2008 06:25 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
Excellent first chapter. I can't wait to see what comes next. I hpe the time you spent away from PS was because you were writing some original fiction. You are an amazingly talented and imaginative author and you really ought to be paid for your work.
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| Friday 5th December 2008 09:32 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
Sigh - I wish I could say you're right, but... I do have an original that I toy with, I just can't seem to pull it all together.
Thanks for the high praise though, and I hope you enjoy this little short story, anyway. |
curren
Friday 5th December 2008 06:04 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| welcome back, it's been too long. Looks a great start, but i guess i'm used to top-notch quality stories from you. Looking forward to what comes next. |
| Friday 5th December 2008 09:30 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Oh, thanks much. It's nice to be back. This story just wouldn't leave my head no matter what I did. It started last Christmas, actuallly, but I just couldn't get it done in time. |
Wolf\\\'s Scream
Friday 5th December 2008 06:01 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| Oh, what fun! Excellent start; I look forward to seeing what's next. :-) |
| Friday 5th December 2008 09:29 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks! There are 5 chapters, and I hope to post them fairly quickly over the next couple weeks. |
oliversgal
Friday 5th December 2008 05:53 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| What a great start to the story. I didn't realize that I was interested in the Dursley's life after Tom's fall until I started to read this. Can't wait for the next chapter! |
| Friday 5th December 2008 09:04 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks! The Dursleys are always a sticking point with me, and I think Petunia certainly fits a "Scrooge" personality. |
Patches
Friday 5th December 2008 05:27 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| Petunia has a \"ghost\" of a conscience. Hm! Things have to be perfect for her Dudley but he can\'t have a girl in his life!?! Sounds like Petunia is going to have a rude awakening and now Lily\'s ghost has come to make a visit. I look forward to more of this story. Thanks for writing. p |
| Friday 5th December 2008 09:02 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Petunia is in for several rude awakenings before this story is over. I've always felt Lily deserved the chance to take her sister to task for the way she treated Harry. And, no, Petunia isn't thrilled at all with the idea of Dudley's girlfriend. |
Amamama
Friday 5th December 2008 01:15 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| Wee-hee! Oh, it's good to be back. *big grin* Haven't been on PS in ages (I spend all my time on LJ), and now this comes along a a Christmas treat. Woot! Wonderful setup, I'm really looking forward to the next part. So Lily will be the Ghost of Christmases Past? (Or whatever it's called). Wonderful way to start the day, thanks a bunch, Melinda! |
| Friday 5th December 2008 09:00 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Well then, welcome back to both of us! Yes, Lily is the Ghost of Christmas Past. Any guesses on who the other two might be? |
TreyFury97
Friday 5th December 2008 00:26 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
Wow...it's good to see you back Medlindaleo. Can't wait to see what you have in store for us.
Trey |
| Friday 5th December 2008 08:59 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks! It's good to be back. This little bunny bit me and just wouldn't let go. There are five chapters in all. |
snoopym27
Thursday 4th December 2008 22:29 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol |
| very nice, can't wait for the next chapter! |
| Friday 5th December 2008 08:57 | A Potterverse Christmas Carol (Author Response) |
| Thanks! I hope to post all 5 chapters fairly quickly. |
