DaniKay
Tuesday 5th May 2009 18:29 | That Terrifying Momentum |
LMAO loved the end report. I wouldn't miss an army of the undead either.
Sophie sounds like a good match for Scott haha. And here Scott is trying to give Harry advice about Ginny. Lol.
Amazing
DaniKay
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| Wednesday 6th May 2009 21:06 | That Terrifying Momentum (Author Response) |
| There is some implicit hypocrisy there, it's true. While Scott's situation with Sophie isn't exactly the same, it's similar enough that he probably shouldn't be taking so superior a tone with Harry when it comes to Ginny. And yeah, I don't think many people would miss an army of the undead. |
Linden
Sunday 29th March 2009 11:35 | That Terrifying Momentum |
| I am absolutely fascinated by your tale. Your blending of magic and multiverses is intriguing, and your dialog is fantastic. Well done! Linden |
| Monday 30th March 2009 02:14 | That Terrifying Momentum (Author Response) |
My dialogue is occasionally a small point of pride. Sometimes I think it can be halting, usually when the canon cast are trying to say something and I just can't hear them very well, but when everyone is talking in my head like they should be then it all tends to come out without any pauses. Perhaps my story is a bit dialogue heavy at times. But I think people talk a lot more than they think they do, and it's what they say that really gives you insight into the character. I only use one POV at a time, only one head for the reader to inhabit, so dialogue is necessary to reveal the other character's thought processes.
Thank you very much for the kind words. I hope you continue to enjoy this story in the future. |
deadpool
Thursday 25th December 2008 19:03 | That Terrifying Momentum |
| i am actually in love with you. Sers, i can even get past the fact that Scott is an american lol. |
| Friday 26th December 2008 23:11 | That Terrifying Momentum (Author Response) |
i am actually in love with you
Now that's an interesting way to begin a review. I guess I'll take affection where I can find it.
Sers, i can even get past the fact that Scott is an american lol.
But he isn't. He's pretending to be an American, although at this point in the story it doesn't seem like he's trying too hard at that anymore.
Thanks for reviewing, with a little extra gratitude for your declaration of love. |
Chatmandu
Friday 19th December 2008 07:35 | That Terrifying Momentum |
Odd, the little things that capture ones attention.
I was wondering if Sophie was the woman crying out to Scott in "...And I'm All Out of Gum." Since I have no idea to what extent Kharadjai can change their apperance, I have nothing further to write on that.
I was surprised that none of Harry's friends commented on Sophie's red hair and "crystalline green" eyes (emeralds are crystal too, ya know). That is hardly a common combination (and I am beginning too many words with "com"), and one I personally consider devastatingly attractive.
Scott seemed to confide more of his concerns to Sophie than Lila. Huh. I'm with Eva and Lila in the betting pool on this. |
| Saturday 20th December 2008 01:42 | That Terrifying Momentum (Author Response) |
I was wondering if Sophie was the woman crying out to Scott in "...And I'm All Out of Gum." Since I have no idea to what extent Kharadjai can change their apperance, I have nothing further to write on that.
No, that would be Terra Bradford, of Final Fantasy VI fame. The other man with her is Edgar Figaro, her psuedo-love interest. The entire scene is an extended reference to a classic videogame. Sophie plays no part in it.
I was surprised that none of Harry's friends commented on Sophie's red hair and "crystalline green" eyes (emeralds are crystal too, ya know). That is hardly a common combination (and I am beginning too many words with "com"), and one I personally consider devastatingly attractive.
Sophie's hair is more brown than red, but of course it depends on the light. Out in the bright sun she could pass for a dark redhead at a distance. As for her eyes, emerald green is an excellent way to describe them. She has eyes that are very large and very green. I don't know whether that's a common combination or not, I always sort of thought that auburn hair and green eyes went together pretty often.
As for being devastatingly attractive, I think it would be fun to read this chapter from Scott's POV. He wants her. Real bad.
Scott seemed to confide more of his concerns to Sophie than Lila. Huh. I'm with Eva and Lila in the betting pool on this.
I'd say it's a safe bet. |
aharkins
Thursday 18th December 2008 17:56 | That Terrifying Momentum |
This is a really good story. I like all of your characters. Can't wait to read what's coming up next.
By the way, you mentioned something called forced familiarity several chapters back. I thought it was an interesting concept and have been using it at work. I'm a customer service agent. I;m amazed at how well it works. People come in angry and ready to argue and within just a few minutes of treating them like an old friend, they're smiling and happy. It's amazing. Thank you.
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| Saturday 20th December 2008 01:47 | That Terrifying Momentum (Author Response) |
This is a really good story. I like all of your characters. Can't wait to read what's coming up next.
Thank you. It's always nice to know that people enjoy my original cast.
By the way, you mentioned something called forced familiarity several chapters back. I thought it was an interesting concept and have been using it at work. I'm a customer service agent. I;m amazed at how well it works. People come in angry and ready to argue and within just a few minutes of treating them like an old friend, they're smiling and happy. It's amazing. Thank you.
I invented the term 'forced familiarity' just as an afterthought. I had written that Scott greeted Neville by calling him Nev, but realized that Neville wasn't really known by that nickname. So I decided to add a little bit of expository explanation for what Scott was doing, speeding up the integration process.
I assume that it's based in pretty standard psychology, I think we're all socially conditioned to return familiarity in some degree. I can't say for sure, not being all that well versed in psych.
The fact that it actually works is, frankly, pretty f***ing cool. |
Patches
Monday 15th December 2008 04:42 | That Terrifying Momentum |
| Well Scott rambles on and it was interesting to meet Sophie. I think Scott needed a symathetic ear to his woes at this point. Also Sophie knows his weak point is romantic prime influence. It will be interesting to see how things develope. You didn't mention Ginny being at the party. I guess Harry got to eaves drop on Snape and Malfoy. I look forward to more of this story. Thanks for writing. p |
| Saturday 20th December 2008 01:50 | That Terrifying Momentum (Author Response) |
I didn't mention Ginny because she wasn't there. That's just how things worked out for Scott. As much as he's tried to push her into the picture, Ginny has stubbornly remained peripheral so far. Perhaps that will change.
As for Scott needing a sympathetic ear, I think everyone likes to complain every now and then. We might conjecture that Scott was interested in receiving sympathy from Sophie in particular.
Thanks for reviewing, hope to see you again next chapter. |
LeprechaunJV
Friday 12th December 2008 09:49 | That Terrifying Momentum |
Nice chapter....
Look forward to next update...... |
| Saturday 20th December 2008 01:51 | That Terrifying Momentum (Author Response) |
| And I look forward to your next review. Thanks for reading. |
fuzzybubbles26
Thursday 11th December 2008 22:11 | That Terrifying Momentum |
| God, your story is so fantastic. Keep it coming! |
| Saturday 20th December 2008 01:52 | That Terrifying Momentum (Author Response) |
| Thank you very much. I hope you enjoy the next chapter equally well. |
