The Boss
Wednesday 19th May 2010 05:53 | Precipice |
It is good to see that Lily might be allowing James some slack due to his past requests to go out.Well looks like Wormtail has a few questions to answer following that incident. And I particularly like that Lily is going to help out James and Sirius with the fledglings . Looking forward to the next chapter!
The Boss |
St Margarets
Tuesday 10th November 2009 16:59 | Precipice |
Boys and their bravado! I like the description of hitting that cold water - I was there and didn't have to risk my neck.
I like how you kept everyone in character as they confronted the falcon.
The foreshadowing of watching out for orphan chicks gave me shivers. James/Lily is just so poignant.
Great job! |
| Tuesday 10th November 2009 20:26 | Precipice (Author Response) |
Writing about the cliff dive was fun for me, but can I tell you how happy I am to have that falcon action scene out of the way? Phew. I'm glad to hear everyone came across in character at least.
Fortunately these orphan chicks don't have to live with Petunia, Vernon, and Dudley! And the chicks and James and Lily take center stage coming up.
Thanks for your feedback on what stood out!
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honourary_weasley
Sunday 1st November 2009 01:23 | Precipice |
This looks cute! I'm looking forwards to reading more. I like the way you've just leaped straight into it, and you've obviously got a good idea of the way the characters interact. It's sweet! But are you sure the setting is post-DH?
More please! |
| Sunday 1st November 2009 10:51 | Precipice (Author Response) |
I like the way you've just leaped straight into it
Quite literally, with that dive into the lake.
and you've obviously got a good idea of the way the characters interact
Why, thanks!
But are you sure the setting is post-DH?
I'm a newbie here at PS, so I'm not quite sure how to answer this one. *headscratch* I just assumed it meant it was written after the release of DH, even though the story is set prior to SS. I'll have to inquire with my beta, who kindly posted this and filled that info in. Thanks for pointing it out.
More please!
More is on the way. Thanks for your review! |
Dad
Saturday 31st October 2009 10:29 | Precipice |
| It seems like there is a lot of potential in this story. I can only wait for the next instalment. |
| Saturday 31st October 2009 12:03 | Precipice (Author Response) |
That is such a nice compliment to receive. Thank you.
(And it's on the way!) |
Patches
Saturday 31st October 2009 03:56 | Precipice |
| Ahhhhh! Things are looking up for James, His good deeds might help him with Lily. This is quite a little story. The falcon was a good idea. I'm sorry it had to die. I hope Lily will give James a chance now. Thanks for writing. I look forward to more of this story. p |
| Saturday 31st October 2009 10:02 | Precipice (Author Response) |
I hope Lily will give James a chance now.
Lily and James feature very prominently in the next chapter, so I think you'll get your answer. Many thanks for your comments! |
elvenlaughter
Wednesday 7th October 2009 19:49 | Precipice |
| I'm really enjoying this. It's completely original, and very well characterized. I hope you'll update it soon. |
| Thursday 8th October 2009 08:43 | Precipice (Author Response) |
| Oh, thank you! Characterizations are important to me and I really wanted a plot which showed Lily softening toward James before the usual Head Girl-encounters-Head Boy in 7th year. And I wanted to include his friends. Many thanks for your review. |
saulick
Thursday 24th September 2009 08:56 | Precipice |
| This is really good. I am not a big fan of James/Lilly stories in general, but I am really enjoying this one. |
| Thursday 24th September 2009 16:43 | Precipice (Author Response) |
You're my first ever Phoenix Song review. Thank you! *grins*
I'm really glad to hear you're liking it, especially since it's not your usual choice of pairing.
More on the way... |
