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Sunday 23rd January 2011 06:49 | Harry Potter: Sacrifice | I really am enjoying your storyline; this is fantastic!
You keep mixing in a good amount of activity with the group at Hogwarts along with Adam & Ginny's exploits that help paint a larger picture of everything going on. The scene with Ron, Neville and Luna, her already realizing the boys had something else going on, was great!
I really liked the way you ended the chapter. Not only for Adam(Harry) to ease Mr. Weasley's mind and give him something to report back to the family; but for Adam's moment of reflextion after the reunion. We all have moments of 'What if...' and I thought that was a great way to close the chapter, by adding one more aspect we may have forgotten about over the course of your tale.
Nicely done! | gymnastgal19
Friday 14th January 2011 14:33 | Harry Potter: Sacrifice | huh interesting... lol i always seem to say that
For a moment there i thought that harry was gonna say that he was adam.
How many more chapters do you have planned?
| | Friday 14th January 2011 14:57 | Harry Potter: Sacrifice (Author Response) | Thanks! We're about halfway through Sacrifice at the moment.
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Wednesday 12th January 2011 21:15 | Harry Potter: Sacrifice | | duuude! "He only asked us to look for things in Hogwarts, and the diadem hasn't been at Hogwarts for years." tell me they will say this to Harry and Ginny! pleaaase... and that's how they're gonna try to take something from Snape's office.. nice... Next chapter preparations o Askaban? or the trip already? can't wait | | Thursday 13th January 2011 05:26 | Harry Potter: Sacrifice (Author Response) | | Thanks! | Patches
Tuesday 11th January 2011 03:01 | Harry Potter: Sacrifice | | This is a good chapter but a little frustrating. Ron and Neville of course don't know the significance of Hufflepuff's cup or Ravenclaw's diadem. Ron blurting out his question was bad. I hope Harry can communicate with the Grey Lady. She certainly won't tell them anything with Ron there. Harry and Ginny's plan to talk to Mr. Weaseley was very good. I'm glad Harry told Mr. Weaseley who held him up at the gate to the Burrow. That was a good piece of work on Ginny's part. I hope they discover where the diadem is. Is the cup in the Lestrange vault as it was in cannon? I look forward to more of this story. Thanks for writing. p | | Wednesday 12th January 2011 16:21 | Harry Potter: Sacrifice (Author Response) | | Thanks! It is awfully frustrating, but then I think that's part of the problem. Harry/Ginny are keeping a lot to themselves and that could come back to bite them. |
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