ursulabear
Sunday 16th October 2011 09:02 | For Love of Family |
| Why on earth has that criminal killed the forensic team? This alerted the investigators even more... and served no purpose for the criminals whatsoever. The house is lost for them anyway. Why did not the villains abandon it totally? |
| Sunday 16th October 2011 09:42 | For Love of Family (Author Response) |
| The villains have abandoned the house. This criminal is a bit of a rogue, going against his master's orders and doing his own thing just because he can. He's just as twisted as his master. That's why he's killed the forensics team. |
ursulabear
Sunday 16th October 2011 08:44 | For Love of Family |
| Great chapter. I loved your creative expletive "Godric's gonads!" I am curious how the investigation about this house went so wrong in the past... |
| Sunday 16th October 2011 09:45 | For Love of Family (Author Response) |
| The criminals Harry and the Aurors were investigating were always a step ahead of the Aurors. They also were very effective in injuring the Aurors in some way that made some quite sick, others terribly disfigured and still others a combination of both. There will be more on this subject in future chapters. I hope you keep reading. |
The Boss
Monday 11th July 2011 05:42 | For Love of Family |
Another epic ending to this chapter, although this time a bit more deadly than the previous chapter. Please do keep writing your stories, I love reading them and reviewing them for you!
Regards
The Boss |
| Monday 11th July 2011 10:42 | For Love of Family (Author Response) |
| I have quite a few stories I've started and put aside and as long as there are ideas left, I'll keep writing. Thanks for letting me know you liked the chapter even though it's deadlier than the previous one. I look forward to more of your reviews. |
gymnastgal19
Monday 6th June 2011 12:06 | For Love of Family |
woh.. this is intense! What are those people doing... and what did the person doing this to harry mean by "his mentor"
This is very well written and I cant wait to read more! |
| Monday 6th June 2011 12:48 | For Love of Family (Author Response) |
| Keep reading and you'll find out a little more about "his mentor," the person he looks up to, the mastermind behind the torture chamber in the cellar of the house, the cause for all the mysteriously ill/hurt civilians and Aurors, the one who wants revenge on someone in the story. I look forward to your next comments. |
Melindaleo
Wednesday 11th May 2011 17:50 | For Love of Family |
| WOW!! Action packed, exciting chapter! I love all the drama and intrigue. You're doing a fantastic job, Arnel. Of course, now I'm dying to know who that crazy psychopath hit - and who he's working for! I love Healer Stillwell. He's awesome. If I ever have anything seriously wrong, I want him or someone like him to be my doctor! |
| Wednesday 11th May 2011 23:45 | For Love of Family (Author Response) |
Hoorah for Healer Stilwell! He's my image of the dedicated doctor, too, as well as a bit of a sleuth. I think you'll agree with me that Harry's lucky to have him on his side.
If you like crazies, the baddies become more psychopathic with every chapter; you'll get some of your answers in the next chapter. I promise!
I'm so glad you like the story. Thanks for your thoughtful review. |
caesarcaesar
Sunday 8th May 2011 18:03 | For Love of Family |
I loved how this chapter started as intensely as it did. You did a fantastic job with the 'torture' scene and it was a brilliant twist. Its incredibly creative how you have created your own curse for him to use, and for him to develop on Harry to torture him in a way that others won't realise.
I also love the Healers, and how in depth you've gone to describe what they are doing - and how they are so intricately involved in this story. Many authors wouldn't pay much attention to them.
I wish I had got in there as a pre-beta, because waiting until Thursday's is painful! It always takes me ages to post a review, because I read it at work and on my phone, and barely get a free second. But I hope my reviews aren't too long!
Another great chapter, thanks for posting! |
| Monday 9th May 2011 02:37 | For Love of Family (Author Response) |
A thoughtful review such as yours can never be too long. My criminals are devious, evil people with reasons of their own for why they're doing what they're doing. They're also a creative lot whose original intentions have gone seriously awry.
This story wouldn't be what it is without the Healers, especially Healer Stilwell. He's the one who makes all the discoveries even though the A and E Healers play an important role as well. (More on them in future chapters.)
Thank you for taking the time to review my chapter. Until next Thursday... |
raptor red
Friday 6th May 2011 08:06 | For Love of Family |
such a great story! it feels like the exact continuation of the HP world.
excitedly looking forward to the next parts! ^_^ |
| Friday 6th May 2011 08:43 | For Love of Family (Author Response) |
| I'm so glad you think so. The next chapter will be posted next Thursday. See you then... |
potternut190
Thursday 5th May 2011 23:57 | For Love of Family |
| Wow! |
| Friday 6th May 2011 04:14 | For Love of Family (Author Response) |
| I'm glad you like the story. Thanks. |
GoDons
Thursday 5th May 2011 20:04 | For Love of Family |
| Another cliffhanger! Really was rivetted to this chapter and the story is getting better and better. Looking forward to Chapter 6 next Thursday. Well done. |
| Friday 6th May 2011 04:16 | For Love of Family (Author Response) |
| Originally, this chapter didn't have a cliffhanger ending, but the deeper I wrote into the mystery the more I felt one was necessary. More answers are forthcoming next week. I'm glad you like the story and want to tell me you do. |
Patches
Thursday 5th May 2011 14:42 | For Love of Family |
| Wow! A lot more going on. In a way the idiot that was cursing Harry to be in pain was probably wrong to do so. It drew more attention to his condition and the healer will look deeper because of it. Now they have found the needles and are going to remove them. Ron has found residue of the potion used in the needles and that should help the healers as well as the aurors to get more information about who what and why this is happening. The forensic team being killed is unforturnate but it will allert Ron to the fact that the house was being watched even after the attack on Harry. I look forward to next Thursday. This is a great story. Thank you for writing and being so good about regular updates. p |
| Friday 6th May 2011 04:21 | For Love of Family (Author Response) |
The idiot who cursed Harry did so partly on his own and partly on orders from someone else. Whoever it is is definitely watching the Aurors construct their case, they have ego problems, they probably want revenge of some kind because they think they've been wronged, and yes, they have a few more things up their evil sleeves.
I have seven more chapters ready and am working on the eighth, so you have nearly two more months of weekly updates coming. I'm glad you like my story enough to comment on it. |
Grandma Kate
Thursday 5th May 2011 09:39 | For Love of Family |
It has been a long time since I read a chapter with my eyes ready to snap shut when I came across something too horrible for delicate sensibilities me. That's how I watch the movies that dear Oatmeal is so fond of. Usually I can tell when to close my eyes because of the music. You could use little notes to warn people like me.
Poor Harry! It sounds like he is full of injection devices that can be triggered by a spell from a distance.
I loved Ron's use of the Deluminator. You are not only Evil, but Clever. |
| Thursday 5th May 2011 10:44 | For Love of Family (Author Response) |
I'm sorry I've frightened your delicate sensibilities. When I knew I was going to write such a gorey scene I wanted an image that wouldn't be quite so gruesome, so I came up with the Muggle haunted house image. I drew my inspiration from an actual haunted barn my family visits every October; the barn is lit only in black lights, so regular blood/red paint looks black. The creators of the scenes use flourescent paint instead and though it looks a little unusual the effect is quite dramatic.
As for Ron and his Deluminator, I have a feeling he's used it many times in his career as an Auror. And then there's poor Harry... I can't help thinking of him as a human pin cushion at the moment. You are very correct about how the needles were to be used... good sleuthing.
Thanks for the great review,
the clever, evil Arnel |
