kopfsalat2000
Sunday 14th October 2012 19:28 | Vis Insita |
| This is a good story, you are a good writer. You'll find it in you to rewrite your stuff. Get over it! I have complete faith in you |
| Monday 15th October 2012 18:08 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
| I'm trying. I finally managed to finish up what I lost, and now am working on new stuff. It's slow going, but I seem to have recovered a modicum of inspiration. |
The Pharaoh
Monday 23rd July 2012 03:53 | Vis Insita |
Also, this other review is true for me as well:
Even though I don't review every chapter, I read them. I'm usually just lazy and don't feel like typing one out. But that said, I really hope you continue with this story, as there are few good ones left out there these days, in the lag of "After -Series". Yours is good, whether you believe it or not.
So, good luck, and sorry for reading and not reviewing when I do that. It's a bad thing, I know. Reviews are the author's food, and I need to do it more often. I hope you continue with the writing, even if it takes a while.
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| Saturday 25th August 2012 01:53 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
| I understand. It's not easy to review. We read these things for entertainment: being expected to give feedback afterwards is like having to take a survey or when the teacher asks you to write an essay on the fun movie you just watched. |
The Pharaoh
Monday 23rd July 2012 03:45 | Vis Insita |
| ...excuse me, *please allow my excitement and anticipation to nourish your inner writer and bring the story back out of not-discontinued-but-not-quite-hiatus |
| Saturday 25th August 2012 01:52 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
| I really hope my muse comes back for a return engagement. I miss writing. |
The Pharaoh
Monday 23rd July 2012 03:42 | Vis Insita |
*groan*
I saw your summary that said it was the continuation of TTM, and I was really excited. Then I saw "hiatus" and I was brought crashing down again. My reactions were slightly less intense than I've portrayed them here, but those were the first words that came to mind, and re-reading your Author's Note chapter inspired me to just go with it and explain all of this in a stream of consciousness rather than search for other words and end up overthinking it. (Is that technically a run-on sentence?) I really hope you regain your 6000 words and/or your motivation. In the meantime, I'm going to go re-read That Terrifying Momentum, mostly for Scott's witty dialogue but also for the general excellence of writing to be found there.
On to the story:
- At first I thought Harry changing his mind was you realigning things to canon, but that was soon disproven. I think I was pleased and then disappointed respectively, but once other big changes happened I got used to it. Now I'm looking forward to seeing how her going along plays out.
- Something else to consider that I just thought of: Ginny was a huge leader for the "good" students at Hogwarts. How would her not being at Hogwarts affect the situation there? I think Neville came into his own as a leader there at least partly following Ginny's lead.
- While Ginny's... boldness is certainly in-character for her, and at the time seemed right, looking back I feel like it may have been overdone a bit. Then again, maybe not. (That's not helpful, I know.)
- I can't remember where it was and am too lazy to check (sorry ), but there was a grammar mistake in chapter 2 or 3 that glared at me, b/c you're usually very good about that. If I recall correctly, it was a your/you're-type thing (don't hold me to that, though).
- In chapter 4, you refer to the Weasleys' "garage", whereas (to my understanding, at least) Britpicking dictates that it's called a "shed".
- I'm looking forward to seeing this continued, please allow my excitement |
| Saturday 25th August 2012 01:50 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
*groan* I saw your summary that said it was the continuation of TTM, and I was really excited. Then I saw "hiatus" and I was brought crashing down again. My reactions were slightly less intense than I've portrayed them here, but those were the first words that came to mind, and re-reading your Author's Note chapter inspired me to just go with it and explain all of this in a stream of consciousness rather than search for other words and end up overthinking it. (Is that technically a run-on sentence?) I really hope you regain your 6000 words and/or your motivation. In the meantime, I'm going to go re-read That Terrifying Momentum, mostly for Scott's witty dialogue but also for the general excellence of writing to be found there
Sometimes I groan when I go back and read Scott's 'witty' dialogue. Not that all of it has lost its luster in hindsight, but some of it...
Again, I'm missing the point, of course. Scott isn't always funny. He's not supposed to always be funny, even when he thinks he is.
- At first I thought Harry changing his mind was you realigning things to canon, but that was soon disproven. I think I was pleased and then disappointed respectively, but once other big changes happened I got used to it. Now I'm looking forward to seeing how her going along plays out.
Harry changing his mind was just Harry being himself. He desperately wants to keep Ginny out of danger, but, rationally, he knows that if something happens to her because he left her behind it's just as bad, if not worse. Scott's adamant stance on the subject definitely didn't help calming him on the subject. Harry might have been afraid that Scott would take Ginny along even if Scott didn't.
Interesting you were briefly disappointed that I didn't align to canon again. Most readers seem to want greater divergence from the books.
- Something else to consider that I just thought of: Ginny was a huge leader for the "good" students at Hogwarts. How would her not being at Hogwarts affect the situation there? I think Neville came into his own as a leader there at least partly following Ginny's lead.
Neville may also be better prepared now, before the fact. Luna is also closely attached to him. But to be honest, I'm not all that interested in what happens at Hogwarts once the majority of the Primes leave. Not yet, anyway.
- While Ginny's... boldness is certainly in-character for her, and at the time seemed right, looking back I feel like it may have been overdone a bit. Then again, maybe not. (That's not helpful, I know.)
Perhaps I overcompensated. I was so frustrated in trying to reconcile her canon character with her meek response to Harry's presumptuous, chauvinistic and frankly insulting demand. He didn't even ask if she would stay behind so he wouldn't be distracted, he straight up dumped her. And she just took it.
I attempted to ignore my own reaction to that scene (and Scott's reaction as well) when planning out my version of it. I wanted to first ascertain how Ginny's response in the book fit her character and actions up to that point before I altered it to account for the differences in TTM and Scott's influence. I'll tell you: pretty much right up until I wrote that out, her status as to whether she was staying or going was up in the air. I hadn't really decided one way or the other. I liked the idea of breaking with the book a bit more, but not the extent of having to break the character.
I'm not quite egotistical enough to state that it was Rowling who broke the character in that scene and I had to fix it. But I will say that I was ultimately unable to justify her behavior based on my own perspective of her canon character. That didn't mean she would absolutely go with Harry, but it did mean that, as I understood her and as I had written her up to that point, she couldn't react the same way she did in the book.
I guess you felt her fury was disproportionate. I wrote it coming from the angle that she was an already short-tempered, often volatile teenage girl who was crazy in love with this guy, and that guy just told her that she had to stay behind while he ran off to fight evil and quite possible die in the process. The implications in what Harry wants her to do, the implication that she would draw from it, are that he thinks she can't take care of herself and that he can take care of himself. Both these suppositions have proven false in the past. Also, she was surrounded by older brothers her whole life in a very close-knit family. When Harry tells her she can't come with, she takes it about the same way as if he'd told her to get back in the kitchen.
I mean, there's a lot going on there: I didn't even touch on her innate stubbornness, her desire to prove herself worthy of Harry's love and attention, (she may see him for who he is now, but part of who he is is still a Dark Wizard fighting, famous bad ) and the fact that Harry can't get on a broom without winding up in the hospital wing.
Anyway, I put a lot of thought into everything she did and said. Maybe too much thought. But I appreciate your perspective on it and I hope you appreciate or at least understand mine. Get back to me and let me know what you think about my train of thought.
- In chapter 4, you refer to the Weasleys' "garage", whereas (to my understanding, at least) Britpicking dictates that it's called a "shed".
They do say garage, actually, although it's not pronounced the same.
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sylvelle
Thursday 19th July 2012 15:55 | Vis Insita |
I am very sorry to here this. I hope you can get everything together including your writing muse and finish. I shall miss Scott,k Lila, and the others
Smile..
Tricia |
| Saturday 25th August 2012 01:28 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
| The crushing blow to the ol' muse is really the crux of the issue, to be sure. |
lizzypotter14
Monday 11th June 2012 20:09 | Vis Insita |
| Sorry to hear about your laptop. Hopefully you can get your inspiration back. I will hate to see this work incomplete. |
| Saturday 25th August 2012 01:27 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
| yeah, me too. |
Dad
Monday 11th June 2012 08:42 | Vis Insita |
I will not say anything about backups because I know you are hurting already.
Do you have to have a laptop? Even second hand laptops tend to be quite dear. Old desk top computers are dirt cheap. I could easily give you one. I hope you come back on line because you have such great style and unique story lines.
Also you seem to be one of a very few people who are now(were) using this site. |
| Saturday 25th August 2012 01:27 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
I did have backups, of almost everything... except for the latest chapter. Well, not everything I guess. All the completed chapters and some of my documents full of fragmented ideas are on google docs.
I have my brother's desktop and an older desktop I can use to write. I know they're cheap, I could build one myself for a few hundred bucks. The laptop is actually crucial though, believe it or not. Something about laying on my back in my room, surrounded by handwritten notes and scribbled ideas and\or poems seems the most conducive to writing. I wrote almost the entirety of TTM that way.
I don't know what kind of traffic Phoenixsong gets. All I know is my previous story did well here, and was treated well here. |
No Idea Why I Smile
Monday 11th June 2012 00:34 | Vis Insita |
Sincerely sorry to hear about the loss of the writing. I have been there before, where I have come up with brilliant stuff, only to have a computer crash and me lose all of it.
Back ups are a writer's best friend! I learned that the very very hard way.
Even though I don't review every chapter, I read them. I'm usually just lazy and don't feel like typing one out. But that said, I really hope you continue with this story, as there are few good ones left out there these days, in the lag of "After - Series". Yours is good, whether you believe it or not.
So, good luck, and sorry for reading and not reviewing when I do that. It's a bad thing, I know. Reviews are the author's food, and I need to do it more often. I hope you continue with the writing, even if it takes a while.
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| Saturday 25th August 2012 01:24 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
| I'm getting to the point where I'm going to try and cobble some sort of laptop together and get writing again, even if I do have to start over. Writing is a compulsion. I can ignore it for a time, but not forever. |
