I have thoroughly enjoyed this collection of vignettes. You've let us get to know the more minor characters who have the supporting roles in a way that doesn't detract from the original story.
In this particular chapter, you've let us be angry at Percy's stupidly blind following of the Ministry's hard line of thinking, happy at Fleur hooking up with Bill and sad at Charlie's departure for Romania. While there is hope firmly attached to two of the stories, the third portends the dark days of Order of the Phoenix. I'm glad that Charlie made the decision to leave with a happy memory because he just might need it in the coming months.
Nicely done. I really liked the scene between Percy and Bill, and Percy's realization that he would lose Penelope, too. And yet he stuck to his path. The division amongst the Jones' family, as well, rang very true. The Weasleys couldn't have been the only family that became divided over all this. I really loved Bill calling Percy out for referring to Harry as "the boy." So Durleyish. Made me want to kick him!
Author by Night Thursday 8th October 2015 10:49
16: What Would Come Would Come (Author Response)
I knew you'd react to the way Percy was talking about Harry. I didn't think of it as being Dursleyish, but you're absolutely right.
I'm glad that the division of the Jones family rang true, particularly as they're not exactly canon. I wasn't actually sure how well that would fit.
You write a very good Umbridge and I hear her words delivered by Imelda Staunton's cadences. Between the two, I wanted to throw something at my monitor!
My heart goes out to Megan and the other Hufflepuffs who are facing a Minister for Magic who is in denial and classmates who just might follow their parents into Voldemort's service. I also feel sorry for Viktor Krum because it seems he is having trouble coping with his role in Voldemort's return.
You get for making me comment on Umbridge first!
Author by Night Thursday 8th October 2015 10:40
15: What the Ministry Doesn't Want You to Know (Author Response)
Thank you! I'm glad it sounded like a feasible Umbridge.
Yeah, the Hufflepuffs really got the short stick here. My poor house. (Because I'm definitely a Hufflepuff.)
This was a powerful, emotional chapter, and I thought you did a great job with it. I loved that Remus commented on teaching Cedric, and Bill offering Charlie the broom. I'm still desperately looking for tidbits from the other characters on their thoughts about Harry during all this. I so wanted to hug him at the end of this book.
Author by Night Sunday 4th October 2015 00:44
13: Fog (Author Response)
Thanks for the review!
You'll get some tidbits on the other characters in the last two installments.
I felt sorry for Harry in the book, too. Especially when you re-read OoTP and realize how much all this has really hurt him.
I didn't need a tissue for this one, but I came close. You've done a marvelous job of conveying everyone's reactions to Cedric's death; I actually reached for that tissue while reading Helga's section. Well done.
Oh, so sad! I've always wondered why Cedric agreed to the compromise of taking the Cup with Harry and you've given some very good logic for why he did. The rest of the crowd's reaction to Harry bringing his body back just makes the scene all the more poignant from points of view other than just Harry's upset and frightened one. I didn't need tissues, but I came close. Well done.
It was nice to get a glimpse of the goings-on in the Hufflepuff common room before the third task, especially Megan's perception of Cedric. Her jealousy of Cho made me smile.
Poor Remus. It must be awkward for him to be back at the castle and not really have an official position or reason for being there, except to please his father. It seems to me that had he really wanted to share the day with Harry he could have, even if Bill and Mrs. Weasley were keeping Harry company. I think they would have welcomed him into their group.
As for Tonks and Fleur, they both made me smile. Fleur seems to be impressed with Bill because he isn't like other men in that he didn't react to her being part Veela. To a young woman, things like that make a big impression. It's interesting that Tonks was at the castle as part of Dumbledore's Order detail, even though we won't meet her officially until the next book. It makes me wonder why she only talked to Sirius and not to Remus.
All in all, an enjoyable chapter that starts building towards the book's climax. Well done.
Author by Night Tuesday 22nd September 2015 12:02
11: Preparations and Diversions (Author Response)
Yes, Remus I think Remus would have been welcome, and it's a pity he didn't join. It always bothered me, actually, that he never showed up in GoF! Or that he didn't write, at the very least. "Dear Harry: Stay careful. Lupin." Alas.
Since I've read each of the books nine times, I do know that it was Crouch Jr. who was Polyjuiced as Moody. To make myself a bit clearer, I thought it suspect that Moody was trying to get more information from Remus than he was willing to give out. That made me wonder if Tonks felt the same way about her interview with Moody (that the man was asking questions he shouldn't.) Well done... you've made me think about your story a little more than I normally think about fan fiction stories.
Author by Night Wednesday 16th September 2015 23:07
10: Madness (Author Response)
I thought so, since I know you've been in the fandom for so long (which I'd think would involve *some* re-reading) - but it's also an earlier book, so I thought I would double check!
Oh dear, something's very fishy about how Professor Moody was trying to get information out of Remus during their visit. It makes me wonder what Tonks' conversation with Moody was like. As it is, I don't think her conversation with Alice and Frank went all that well, either. Frank certainly remembers something to have reacted that way, so that's something. I just wish he'd been able to control his actions just a bit longer in order to give Tonks the clues she sought. I had to smile at her concluding thoughts about Agatha Christie. Well done.
Author by Night Wednesday 16th September 2015 12:48
10: Madness (Author Response)
(You remember in the book that Crouch Jr. was posing as Moody, right? Couldn't tell if you meant it was fishy on Remus's end or if you found it fishy.)
Since we don't really know much about Andromeda and Narcissa's relationship as adults, this conversation is quite believable. I imagine that in Andromeda's case it's a case of knowing your enemies better than your sisters, especially when those enemies are her sisters. This is a nice bit of foreshadowing of things to come from the other side of the story. Well done.
Author by Night Wednesday 16th September 2015 23:18
I really enjoyed this. It was nice to see some bonding. Fleur invites Viktor to her wedding, so there must have been some. I felt bad that Harry was left out, but this was enjoyable.
One thing that always intrigued me about GoF was when Cedric came back to get Harry for the family visit. I wondered if he did that on his own or someone sent him. I wonder if the other candidates had any idea how left out he was feeling.
I don't know if you're going to cover that, but it makes me curios. Good job!
Author by Night Wednesday 9th September 2015 12:13
7: Enough Book Reading (Author Response)
Thanks for review! I always liked the idea of Fleur and Viktor being friends.
I actually hadn't even thought of covering Cedric getting Harry, though it's definitely something I noticed! I am covering the family visit, though.
I'm finally beginning to understand the relationship between Fleur and Gabrielle. I was never that close to my sister growing up--she's just too independent--so I've always thought Fleur was being ridiculously silly in her concern over Gabrielle's fate during the second task.
The fact that Bill takes on the role of the eldest brother and needs to know where his siblings are and what's going on with them seems like a huge burden. However, Bill seems to have taken to it naturally. It's nice to know that he's the one to run after a wayward brother or sister and is the one there in the middle of the night to give the comforting hug and hand out handkerchiefs. You're rounding out his personality quite nicely and I'm enjoying the glimpse into his psyche immensely.
Author by Night Wednesday 9th September 2015 09:33
8: What You'll Sorely Miss (Author Response)
Thanks for the review! I'm glad you're enjoying the glimpse into Bill's psyche.
You've very skillfully touched on a rather sticky subject in this chapter and have done it justice, I think. Your backstories for some of my favorite characters are quite interesting and true to canon and while one will still wonder exactly what JKR wanted their backgrounds to be, your are quite believable. Well done.
Author by Night Tuesday 1st September 2015 23:28
6: All Creatures Great and Small (Author Response)
Of the four vignettes, the ones with Megan and Cedric spoke to me best. That Cedric would be so kind to her, someone three years younger than he is, shows why the Goblet chose him as Champion; he has all the qualities of Gryffindor and Hufflepuff rolled into one, making him someone worthy of the title. At seventeen, I'm not sure how many boys would make sure a younger housemate had a good end to the ball. Well done.
Author by Night Tuesday 1st September 2015 23:27
5: Yule (Author Response)
Thank you! I was actually concerned Megan's sections might come across as trite, so I'm very glad they worked.