Enjoying this story so far. One small contradiction in this chapter though. Early it's said that, "all their other neighbours were elderly wizarding couples." But in this chapter Lily argues that, "We're in the middle of a Muggle neighbourhood. There isn't another wizarding family in the whole town."
Since I don't know how the story will develop it's hard to say if this is just a small detail or whether wizarding neighbors (or not) play a larger role later on.
Overall, I'm enjoying the concept and looking forward to reading the rest of this story.
angelmorph Thursday 22nd June 2006 16:21
Eight (Author Response)
Oops. I had completely forgotten about the comment regarding the neighbors being wizarding couples. Thank you for pointing it out; I'll have to fix that. They most definitely live in a Muggle neigbourhood, which while not a big detail does come to play in future chapters.
I'm glad you're enjoying the story. Thank you for reviewing,
Lilly is SO like Hermione! Thats adorable. And i have to agree, i never quite got Guy Fawkes Day either ... apart from the fact that i live in australia ... a very nice chapter. I hope there won't be too many arguments over Neville going to Guy Fawkes day?
angelmorph Tuesday 16th May 2006 03:42
Sixteen (Author Response)
Thank you for your review. There shouldn't really be any argument over Neville going out. Augusta's already agreed that Lily can take him out to Muggle places, so I wouldn't worry about that.
Thanks, first of all, for the chapter dedication! I sure didn't expect that!
Anyhow, thanks for the info on Guy Fawkes/Bonfire Night. I never bothered to look it up to assuage my curiosity.
I enjoyed having the chapter be about the adults for once. Makes for a more well-rounded story.
angelmorph Monday 15th May 2006 15:51
Sixteen (Author Response)
I'm glad you didn't expect it. If you had that would have been a little egocentric. Seriously, it was my way of saying thank you for all the reviews.
As for the info on Guy Fawkes, I hadn't heard of the holiday myself till a British penpal of mine brought it up as an alternative after informing that the Brits don't really celebrate Halloween, so I figured a little explanation was probably necessary.
Too sombre? Not at all. It was lovely and appropriate. This Boy Who Lived will certainly be much different from the angsty, suffering one we're accustomed to. Maybe that's why you fret there's not enough action? Of course there will be conflict--Voldie's still coming back, after all. But this will be sooooo different!
Very cool so far. Now that I'm all caught up, I have to wait with the rest for the next update. I hope it's not long!
angelmorph Friday 12th May 2006 04:05
Fifteen (Author Response)
I'm glad you like it. Yes, the main difference is that Neville is growing up loved. Ah, but Voldemort is a long way off. The next update should be in a few days. After that, I'm not sure. I'm unfortunately not the most regular of updaters.
I laughed through most of the chapter, except for that last paragraph that might have been better left out (did that make sense?). She didn't need to carry through on the threat of repercussions...or maybe not so horribly. I just can't see her locking anyone in a room under a curse and feeding and watering them like a prisoner. Too much like Petunia D to my mind...
angelmorph Friday 12th May 2006 04:01
Fourteen (Author Response)
I'm glad you liked it. That was actually one of my concerns about the chapter. It wasn't me intention to make Lily come across as cruel. There's a fine line between acceptable and unacceptable behavior. This time Lily crossed it. Perhaps I was a little too extreme...
I think this chapter was great fun! Maybe because my son is five, so I can relate to the way you have the boys thinking. This isn't a story where Voldemort is coming along any second--at least it isn't yet!--so since they're young children at this point, they need to be allowed to act as such.
angelmorph Friday 12th May 2006 03:53
Ten (Author Response)
Thank you for your review. I'm glad you liked it. I've been getting a lot of comments like that from mothers of young children. I certainly hope Voldemort won't be making an early apperance... but then again stories have a tendancy to take on a life of thier own.
I think this chapter was important, because the questions the boys ask really emphasize how vital it is for kids to have a variety of experiences and NOT be locked up in one house all the time. What a developmental disaster for them to never have left the front yard before kindergarten!
angelmorph Friday 12th May 2006 03:49
Nine (Author Response)
Thank you. That is exactly what Lily is trying to prove to Augusta. Unfortunately the lather is blinded by her overprotectiveness... As for kindergarden, Augusta is still set on having Neville homeschooled before Hogwarts? But there's still time for Lily to change her mind...
Okay, you answered quite clearly one of my earlier questions.
And don't worry so much about whether or not there's too much arguing going on. As a mother myself, I assure you that there's not. Not at all.
This story is going super well. I'm off to read more...
angelmorph Friday 12th May 2006 03:44
Eight (Author Response)
Oh? What question was that? Thanks for the reassurance about the arguing and thank you for your review.