Rhymes With Orange
Saturday 5th June 2004 01:23 | Solace |
I... I'm not quite sure what to say. I love it, of course, it's wonderful. But... You killed Ron! And that's just Not Nice.
I started to go back 'cause I wanted to quote bits of it back at you, the places where you did really good. But this review would then be about half the size of the story, and that won't do.
Very sad. I choked up a bit there. The baby!Ginny in the flashback was especially cute. The bit about Harry's heartbeat was very powerful images. The best is just the vibe of it, though. The way you manage to switch from dreams, to reality, to memories, and back into the present, and it feels seemless. I'm a sucker for craftsmanship. The little hints and touches that tell you that this was written by someone that really knows what they're doing. You've got it. |
| Saturday 5th June 2004 01:23 | Solace (Author Response) |
Thank you so much. It's wonderful to read that people love this. I'm glad you liked the part with Harry's heartbeat; I loved writing that. And Ginny as a young girl was so much fun to write.
Well, I'm not sure that I know what I'm doing, but it's nice to see I'm fooling people into thinking I do! Thank you so, so much! |
Arnel
Saturday 5th June 2004 00:26 | Solace |
If I hadn't read your bio, I would have thought you were a parent! You certainly have wonderful insight into what makes Molly tick. She felt so real to me and her flashbacks brought a lump the size of a watermellon to my throat.
I love this chapter and have read it several times. I look forward to more of this story. |
| Saturday 5th June 2004 00:26 | Solace (Author Response) |
Oh, thank you so much. Molly was the hardest for me to write. I wasn't going to include her at all until Susan said she thought I really needed Molly's thoughts on Ron's death. She was actually the most gratifying to write, though. Gave me loads of insight into her character.
The next chapter shouldn't be too long.
Thanks again for the review. |
Lady G
Friday 4th June 2004 19:51 | Solace |
With every new addition to this fic, I just can't help but love it and cry at the same time. You really have a beautiful way of capturing the essence of their feelings. The guilt, the pain, and the intensity of their emotions... It feels so real. I don't want Ron to die.
~Ranee |
| Friday 4th June 2004 19:51 | Solace (Author Response) |
| Ranee, thank you so much for the review; it made me glow. I don't want Ron to die, either (in canon, clearly he's dead in Solace). I don't think Rowling'll kill him. It's much too cruel. Although, you never know with her.... |
Zahri Seb Melitor
Friday 4th June 2004 07:12 | Solace |
Dumbledore isn't exactly the greatest person at judging people's need to heal, and waht will help them, is he? Practicality for safety is all very well, but he must have known that the Weasleys (and Hermione and Harry [i]are[/i] Weasleys in this story, from the way you've written it) needed to go back to where the good memories were.
Soon, in just a few hours, the Burrow will be filled with people trying to celebrate Christmas.
Such a simple description that captures the spirit of the day, and how everyone will try to act (and how they will fail).
Once inside, she starts up the stairs, careful to skip the third step up, which she had charmed to creak when the twins turned eight and took to leaving the house at all hours of the night.
So, so Molly, and so, so the twins. Perfectly in character for both. But did she charm it so that only Arthur or herself could hear it, or so they could all?
Even now, she can remember the sheer terror of watching her children play an impromptu game of Quidditch, ignoring her protests that it was dangerous. What an innocent time that had been, when her biggest worry was her child falling a few feet from a broomstick…
What innocent times indeed, Molly. The memories of the past and the reminiscences spread throughout this story are wonderful snapshots of the Weasley family, expansions on how they all related to each other.
Another wonderful chapter, with a mother's response to her loss.
And you've rendered me near-insensible with tears again... |
| Friday 4th June 2004 07:12 | Solace (Author Response) |
No, you're right about Dumbledore. As much as I love him, he seems not able to differentiate between what will protect and what may cause more hurt. Although, he does so because he loves them all.
Hmm, you know, I never thought about it, but I guess only Molly and Arthur can hear the creak in the step.
Thank you so much for another great review. |
Bomollyok
Friday 4th June 2004 04:03 | Solace |
Jen,
Oh. Dear God.
This is wonderful. I most definately cried in Hermione's chapter. You captured the sense of loss and all the emotions that come with it perfectly. This is the best fic I've read with...er...I suppose Dead!Ron. I loved how Ginny's personality changed just the tiniest bit during the flashbacks. Beautiful, beautifl piece. I love it!
-Molly |
| Friday 4th June 2004 04:03 | Solace (Author Response) |
Thanks, Molly, I'm glad you liked it. I don't suppose there are many dead!Ron fics, but I'm glad this is the best you've read of them. Yes, I had fun writing Ginny as a little girl. A bit of a spitfire, that one. |
z26
Thursday 3rd June 2004 14:50 | Solace |
This story is very well written, but also very sad. I enjoyed reading it so far, I even cried a few times.
Thanks for writing! |
| Thursday 3rd June 2004 14:50 | Solace (Author Response) |
You're welcome.
Thanks for reading, and leaving a lovely review! |
WandlessOne
Thursday 3rd June 2004 13:28 | Solace |
| OK, finished Molly's chapter. Another hanky alert wouldn't have been amiss. Wonderfully written story but I'm still not over the Ron thing. |
| Thursday 3rd June 2004 13:28 | Solace (Author Response) |
Thanks for the review. Maybe the whole story should just come with a hanky alert?
Again, thanks. |
Bart
Thursday 3rd June 2004 13:18 | Solace |
Don't know how I've managed to miss reading this one before...
Just read all the chapters so far, and well... It's a wonderful story, that really does grab your emotions and jumps up and down on them in very big boots, you have captured the heartache felt by all of the characters beautifully, and tempered it perfectly with things like, the shopping trip, Harry and Ginny realising how much they need each other, and Molly already knowing before she opened the door was a really nice touch.
Bart |
| Thursday 3rd June 2004 13:18 | Solace (Author Response) |
| Thanks so much for the lovely words. I'm glad you like it. Harry and Ginny realising their need for one another is one of my favourite parts. There will be more with the two of them, soon. |
Aggiebell
Thursday 3rd June 2004 07:48 | Solace |
Lord, Jen. I was crying by the third paragraph, I think.
This chapter was just beautiful. So, so sad, but so very beautiful. I think you have Molly captured just perfectly. I love Molly's memories of Ron--as he was born, and learning to fly, and learning about love with Hermione.
And these paragraphs at the end: Arthur tenses slightly, pulling back from her to stare at her face, which she is trying unsuccessfully to arrange into an innocent demeanor. He gives a slight nod, and a ghost of a smile forms upon his face. "Of course they are," he says quietly. Molly smiles back at him. She knows no one but him would have the understanding to accept the situation with his daughter and Harry, who he loves as a son. She feels a swell of emotion toward him that is surprising; it's only love, tinged with no grief, for the first time in almost a month.
She stares in slight wonder at him as he asks what he can do to help with the meal today. Understanding forms somewhere in the pit of her stomach, as she points her wand at the old ice-box in the corner of the room, giving him instructions for the roast she plans to prepare. She would miss her youngest son until she was able to join him. She would quite possible grieve for the rest of her life, as would her family. But the grief would not stay as sharp as it is today. They would all survive and learn to live again, and they would help one another do that. Their love for each other would sustain them.
What a beautiful way to show Molly's strength, and Molly and Arthur's love for their family, and each other.
Julie
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| Thursday 3rd June 2004 07:48 | Solace (Author Response) |
Thanks, Julie! I'm so glad you liked it. Moms' stamps of approval on this chapter mean a lot to me.
I'm glad you liked the flashbacks. The Weasley family when they were younger are fast becoming my favourite to write.
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OHGinnyfan
Thursday 3rd June 2004 05:51 | Solace |
Oh mercy, Jen.
I. Love. This. Chapter. Of course, you already know that.
You did a beautiful job protraying Molly and all her emotions and feelings. She is such an intregal part of the Weasley family that you had to include her into this story. I'm so glad you did.
This is such a perfect line:
Holding her newborn child never lost its magic. It was just as breathtaking the sixth time with Ron as it had been the first time, with Bill.
Although, I haven't given birth 6 times, I have 4 times, and I can tell you, it is just as magical the 4th time as it is the 1st.
Also to add...your portrayal of Arthur at the end was just so sweet. You could "tell" that the emotions were warring in him too.
"Morning, love," he says quietly, a small smile not quite reaching his lovely blue eyes.
quote]"Good morning, dear," she replies back as he stands from his seat and starts toward her. "I thought you were going to try and have a lie-in on your day off?"
Molly nods. Her husband stops in front of her, taking both of her hands in his. "Are you doing all right this morning?" he asks quietly, concern colouring his eyes.
You can just tell from these 3 sections that everything is warring inside Arthur too -- concern for his wife, love for her, and the loss of his son.
Well done, well done, well done.
Susan
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| Thursday 3rd June 2004 05:51 | Solace (Author Response) |
Oh, thank you, Susan. I'm so glad you liked the part with Arthur. He is very intimidating for me to write for some reason (he and Snape, odd).
Of course, this chapter would have been very odd had you not offered your wisdom. So thank you for that, as well.
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Katieay
Thursday 3rd June 2004 05:00 | Solace |
Not to self: Do. Not. Read. Solace. At. Work.
Ok, I say that every chapter, and I can't help myself. This was such a beautiful chapter. You managed to make it sad and happy, even though it was a distant kind of happiness. The end was extremely touching... and George and Percy! Oh boy, I'm bawling again. Excellent, excellent chapter |
| Thursday 3rd June 2004 05:00 | Solace (Author Response) |
Oh, thank you for the kind words. I do feel complete when I see I've made people cry...oh, wait that came out wrong....
I'm glad you picked up the distant happiness. They're a strong family. They'll get through.
Thank you so much! |
Jaquelyne
Thursday 3rd June 2004 03:37 | Solace |
Jen,
God Girl... My Puffs box is now lighter. This is a wonderful story. You have written each character beautifully and their grief is so palatible.
Molly and her understanding of her children, and those that have become her children, not by blood, but by love.
To see him relaxed is something she can't bear to end.
She knows that Harry and Ginny need each other so desperately to get through this. So will allow it to happen.
So, who's next?
~J~ |
| Thursday 3rd June 2004 03:37 | Solace (Author Response) |
Thank you for the review.
I totally agree, of course, that Molly does think of Harry as her own, and to some extent, Hermione as well.
As for who's next...it's a suprise. {{evil laughter}}
Thanks again.
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