bleeblahblee
Friday 9th April 2010 11:44 | Conditioning |
| For your authors note: I saw nothing wrong My personal opinion was that this story was perfect and hilarious |
majolie
Monday 7th January 2008 20:10 | Conditioning |
| Love the hormones. Some of the back and forth between humor and angst was kind of abrupt, but heym life can be that way. |
gymnastgal19
Tuesday 2nd October 2007 16:29 | Conditioning |
| nice story |
pyromain
Friday 24th August 2007 13:42 | Conditioning |
| loved her tease would have enjoyed it if yould could have made the story a bit longer. More because I enjoyed it than that it needed it. |
attridge
Wednesday 21st March 2007 00:31 | Conditioning |
That was really greatJ Thank you for the thoughtful read. Very well doneJ
Eileen a.k.a. mrs weasely |
| Friday 20th July 2007 09:03 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
| Thanks! As I piece of craftsmanship, I've always liked this story. |
Novera
Thursday 29th June 2006 23:12 | Conditioning |
| Poor Poor HARRY |
| Monday 17th July 2006 06:36 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
That's a smiley/word ratio of almost 4:1; dont' you think that's a little high?
Still, thanks for reviewing! |
Ashley06
Friday 30th December 2005 02:37 | Conditioning |
| Cute... |
| Tuesday 7th February 2006 13:44 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
We'll just pass over the fact that I was trying to write an angst-heavy story and pretend I meant it to be cute.
Thanks! |
Sarcasmo
Saturday 25th June 2005 19:12 | Conditioning |
I enjoyed this. I love that in every segment you start with the 'ah, relief from the heat'. Very clever.
I must say that I don't find your characters convincing, though I did find them very entertaining. I don't think Ginny would be that forward or do such shocking things, but I did find Ron's reactions funny to these. Bravo with that. The other example of a character being OOC is Fred... him and George wouldn't be arguing and he wouldn't be defending his dad... they would certainly be joking about it, of course.
Still, as I said, this was very entertaining! Thanks again
~Sarcasmo |
| Wednesday 27th July 2005 10:57 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
Actually, I thought F&G were very much in character, but that's a matter of opinion.
Especially after reading HBP (especially the very, very END of HBP) I'm having a harder time than ever getting a handle on Ginny. I think I understand where she wants to go, but I'm not sure how she'll get there. |
amulder
Wednesday 2nd February 2005 11:52 | Conditioning |
Sure there's a problem. It ended!!
I guess one issue is when Ginny says "we're only going out".
That seems rather abrupt and out of nowhere. If this were a
humour piece I'd think this was an example of aggressive!Ginny not
giving Harry a chance about dating her. In this more
introspective piece it comes across... I dunno, a bit strange.
Still, well done.
thanks for sharing
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| Wednesday 2nd February 2005 12:34 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
| Well, I was stuck with the way the line was worded in the challenge (I'd already decided to include all of them), a deadline, and constant attempts to get it angstier. I may do a re-write of this one at some point that focuses on the humor. |
bluejeanphoenix
Wednesday 1st December 2004 00:21 | Conditioning |
The balance of angst and humor in this is extremely Rowling-esque.
it.
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| Wednesday 1st December 2004 12:20 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
| I can think of few higher compliments for a fanfic writer. I thank you. :-) |
MagnoliaMama
Sunday 21st November 2004 17:30 | Conditioning |
| I really enjoyed this. You've got a nice balance of angst, fluff and humor, which, though it might not have been what you were aiming for, nevertheless produced a nice one-shot. My favorite parts were the bit with Arthur and the twins dicussing his previous mishaps with Muggle devices and the conversation between Ginny and Harry at the end. Really, it's an enjoyable fic overall. Good job! |
| Sunday 21st November 2004 18:42 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
Unintentional success certainly beats failure. :-}
Every so often, the twins drop by and write scenes for me. It is very nice of them, but I wish they'd come by more often. |
mary-v
Wednesday 27th October 2004 18:21 | Conditioning |
honestly, the are no bad parts to this story. It was all brilliant! I really liked how you characterized Gin\ny, and harry's reaction to her lol, but I would have like maybe just one small kiss between them. lol
~Maria~ |
| Wednesday 27th October 2004 18:21 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
| This Ginny is much more playful than my usual portrayal - and I couldn't write a kiss that wasn't dripping in fluff. :-( |
hermionegreen
Monday 27th September 2004 00:08 | Conditioning |
Loved the Fluff... I'm off to read your many chaptered fics now...
HermioneGreen |
| Monday 27th September 2004 00:08 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
You consider that fluff?!? I hope you just mean the fluffy bits...
Wow. I really can't write angst. :-( |
saugart
Friday 10th September 2004 08:54 | Conditioning |
I enjoyed this story. I liked the portrayal of the characters. I also liked how Ginny , although willing to listen, was also able to decide she'd had enough. It's so often in the fan stories that she tells Harry that she'll listen to him and then he suddenly dumps everything out.
This is a very good story. |
| Friday 10th September 2004 08:54 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
| I think there's only so much you can take in one sitting, and Ginny realized both she and Harry were at that point. Thanks for reviewing! |
stardust8791
Thursday 8th July 2004 18:14 | Conditioning |
| i absolutely love how ginny goes from being so kind and gentle to a huge flirt. what a wonderful story! |
| Thursday 8th July 2004 18:14 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
| Ginny really spoke to me writing this, as she has in one or two other spots. Oddly, I generally feel that I don't write her that well overall. Glad you liked it. :-) |
Pooca
Wednesday 30th June 2004 16:48 | Conditioning |
| Oh, I liked the reoccuring "Ah! Relief from the heat!"--it was a nice motif for the story. |
| Wednesday 30th June 2004 16:48 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
| What can I say? I like catch phrases. |
parakletos
Tuesday 29th June 2004 17:08 | Conditioning |
I enjoyed this, I think you have the twins down to a 'T'. I also think you made some very good observations on the experiences of Harry and Ginny. OK not too much fluff but it made me smile a lot and laugh out loud.
Well done |
| Tuesday 29th June 2004 17:08 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
| The twins came by and wrote that back-and-forth about Arthur's previous efforts. I take no credit for it, and its one of the few bits that survived from the first draft I did of this story (which was VERY different). |
Velvethope
Sunday 27th June 2004 10:36 | Conditioning |
| Hello! Very well written- the humor and the twins especially, were done very well. I think a bit more at the end would have helped it a bit. It seemed to end too soon, espcially with Ginny saying they were 'going' out and Harry not reacting to it. Sort of leaves the reader confused. Or maybe that's me. Still, I think it's a very well done piece! |
| Sunday 27th June 2004 10:36 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
| Yeah, I kindof ran out of steam, and was anxious to meet what I thought the deadline was. Oh well. No story is perfect. Maybe after Bond and Price of Freedom are done I can come back to this; though hopefully Half Blood Prince will be out by then... |
p0tterfan
Sunday 27th June 2004 02:44 | Conditioning |
Ginny teasing .... good. Varying shots of people at different points, seems like an effective technique but seemed extraneous here.
Hope that helped. |
| Sunday 27th June 2004 02:44 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
| I tend to be choppy - and my efforts to keep this an entirely Harry-POV story probably didn't help. I try to avoid it but I guess I didn't this time. |
arios
Saturday 26th June 2004 23:41 | Conditioning |
| Ansgt might not be your force but this really was a good story! |
| Saturday 26th June 2004 23:41 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
Ah, but was it a really good angst story?
Well, I'm glad you thought it was good. :-) |
Lady Chi
Saturday 26th June 2004 21:48 | Conditioning |
Good news first, eh? I really enjoyed the story. Honestly. Your Ginny was totally IC and a few of her moments made me laugh. Particularly with the bikini and asking Harry if her bottom looked big in it. (Green's a good color for redheads, though...)
Bad news? You've said it. Angst isn't really your strong suit, and I can see that. It didn't really ever sink to total melodrama, but it never really got angsty, if you understand what I'm saying.
As for your concerns with Harry's POV, I think it was just fine. His complete inability to handle his feelings for Ginny was great.
I'm really sort of looking forward to finding out who's writing all these stories!
Chi |
| Saturday 26th June 2004 21:48 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
I think you hit it right on - I don't do angst, I do drama. Action. Wands and rifles. Ah well, a wise man knows his weaknesses.
Oh, and TAA-DAA! Its me! |
Cera
Saturday 26th June 2004 14:59 | Conditioning |
I really like how you wrote the twins in this story, very canon to me.
I could have used more angst (only because I was expecting more with the contest), but it's hard to put it in without being over-the-top.
That said, I did really like it. Did you get all the lines in there? I like how you started each section with the same phrase. |
| Saturday 26th June 2004 14:59 | Conditioning (Author Response) |
I did get all the lines in there - I'm rather proud of that. I think you may be the only one who noticed. :-(
The twin came by and wrote their bits for me. It was rather nice of them, though the Canary Cream in my soup was over the top. |
