gymnastgal19 Saturday 13th October 2007 14:24 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future |
huh interesting story! |
Sunday 14th October 2007 06:32 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future (Author Response) |
Thanks for reading and reviewing my stories, I'm glad you enjoyed them. |
jeanne Sunday 25th March 2007 18:19 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future |
Exciting, fun, well written, dramatic, a bit fluffy, and loads more I cannot find words for. Altogether a wonderfully delightful read. Jeanne. |
Sunday 14th October 2007 06:31 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future (Author Response) |
I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for reading! |
Narumi Saturday 3rd February 2007 01:16 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future |
I'm glad he didn't actually find and fight Voldemort- that would have been a little cheesy! Well done- nice bit of fluff! |
Tuesday 6th February 2007 15:32 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future (Author Response) |
Thanks for reading, I'm thrilled that it was so well received! |
mrsmeggiepotter Thursday 1st February 2007 16:36 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future |
This was absolutely amazing. I loved it! |
Tuesday 6th February 2007 15:31 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future (Author Response) |
I'm so glad you liked it, give me about 8 months and I may have an update! |
Bryher Monday 29th January 2007 17:42 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future |
I enjoyed this story - it was exciting, fluffy and didn't turn out like I expected - I was sure there'd be Death Eaters there. Thanks |
Tuesday 6th February 2007 15:30 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future (Author Response) |
Thanks for reading I'm glad you enjoyed it! |
DADAGinny Tuesday 14th December 2004 00:50 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future |
OK, now I see why those who read your stories get mad at you. You
leave so much open-ended (evil GM that you are) and get a new plot
bunny to follow. I really think you could do a lot with this
story line.
Great job honey!
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Jelsemium Tuesday 7th December 2004 16:21 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future |
Review, Part Two!
I really liked this story. (I'd've made it into two or more chapters, but that's just me.)
I'm BACK! Did you miss me? (Did you even launch that sunfish? *shudders*)
By the way, I liked that Ginny has a roommate named "Jill."
Heh, so now Luna and Neville are in on the act. Them Death Eaters don't stand a chance! (Well, Harry doesn't stand a chance of keeping his friends out of danger!)
If I were one of Harry's friends, I'd knock him out and drag him back to Hogwarts. Obviously, "Survival Instinct" isn't a strong suit of any of them.
"this room was an anti-chamber to another" – Actually, that should be ante-chamber
Red caps… nice touch, they tend to haunt areas where there was violent death. (I wonder if any Death Eaters ran afoul of them. Even if they're scared of wizards, they may have tried ambushing a few.)
"Hello, I'm ready to see the Dark Lord!" -- :Goggle: I love it! What chutzpah!
Hee! Wrong Dark Lord. Good description of the fight that killed all those wizards. (Looks like that vault was booby trapped. I would have guessed that, myself, but it looks like this bunch wasn't very bright.)
I don't think that jumping in after Neville was very bright, either. ;/
Wow, that's one well-equipped broom! I'll take one!
Gunpowder?! Nicely set up, with the sulfur and stuff. Good work! (However, I don't think that a Bluebell flame would set it off.) Love the idea, of them using gunpowder to blast their way out.
Oops, a hundred points apiece? Ouch. Ouch. Ouch. Sorry, Harry, this wasn't one of your better ideas.
Heh, trust Dumbledore to find a way to take the sting out of that! (The mansion will be opened so the public can enjoy all that death? Ick. Better to have it be an educational experience.)
And now they're all rich! Boy that would have been worth losing all those points over!
Good job! |
Jelsemium Monday 6th December 2004 17:12 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future |
Nag, nag, nag!
Ahem, is this thing on? Good. Let's begin…
I suggest you change your settings to accept anonymous reviews.
I really like the little ghosties at the top of the story. ;)
On to the actual story...
I like how you introduce the Problem du Jour. Newspaper articles are a good way to introduce a lot of information without getting preachy. You also add enough "business" (like Hermione chewing on her hair) to keep the explanation from getting tedious.
Sigh. You've just hit one of my pet Peeves (no relation). " 'Mione" Rowling has never had Ron or Harry shorten her name. The only person who has was Grawp and Hermione didn't like it.
So I'm growing in a haunted mine, am I? Thanks… I think. ;)
Nice interaction between Luna and Hermione, and between Harry and Ginny.
Harry's pretty quick on the draw here. I thought the dates were rather obvious, nice that Harry thought so, too.
Heh, so Harry immediately starts plotting how to get himself into deep doo-doo… How, Harry-like!
Awww… Neville asking Luna to the ball was sweet! ** I got a chuckle out of Ron's not-so-romantic method, but, hey, it worked.
Oops, Harry's blown his cover! Now Ginny's plotting. Heh, the Plot Thickens! (Nice!)
Ginny's subtle hints work! Sweet!
Ummm… I'm confused, why did Hermione get mad enough at Ron that she had to blurt out the interesting possibility of Voldy-wart being at Hogsmeade?
Gee, Harry's getting all dolled up. How subtle… NOT! (Hee! Just like a teenager.)
My goodness, Hermione and Ginny are going even more overboard than Harry! (I bet if Molly saw Ginny's outfit, Ginevra would wind up in a Convent School for Chaste-Whether-They-Want-To-Be-Or-Not Witches.)
Wow! Harry's going to let his friends help him! (If I were there, I'd be checking his breath to see if it smelled like Polyjuice Potion.) ((G'head, Ginny, check his breath. I dare you. ;) ))
Wow! again. Ginny and Hermione sound like fashion models! (I like the jewelry!)
Darn, nothing's bad happened to Draco at the Ball. (That we've seen.)
Well, lunch is over, so this review is… To Be Continued!
Bwa-ha-ha! (It's your own fault for writing such a lovely long story!) |
Tuesday 7th December 2004 09:22 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future (Author Response) |
Nag, nag, nag!
Ahem, is this thing on? Good. Let's begin…
I suggest you change your settings to accept anonymous reviews.
I really like the little ghosties at the top of the story. ;)
On to the actual story...
I like how you introduce the Problem du Jour. Newspaper articles are a good way to introduce a lot of information without getting preachy. You also add enough "business" (like Hermione chewing on her hair) to keep the explanation from getting tedious.
Sigh. You've just hit one of my pet Peeves (no relation). " 'Mione" Rowling has never had Ron or Harry shorten her name. The only person who has was Grawp and Hermione didn't like it.
So I'm growing in a haunted mine, am I? Thanks… I think. ;)
Nice interaction between Luna and Hermione, and between Harry and Ginny.
Harry's pretty quick on the draw here. I thought the dates were rather obvious, nice that Harry thought so, too.
Heh, so Harry immediately starts plotting how to get himself into deep doo-doo… How, Harry-like!
Awww… Neville asking Luna to the ball was sweet! ** I got a chuckle out of Ron's not-so-romantic method, but, hey, it worked.
Oops, Harry's blown his cover! Now Ginny's plotting. Heh, the Plot Thickens! (Nice!)
Ginny's subtle hints work! Sweet!
Ummm… I'm confused, why did Hermione get mad enough at Ron that she had to blurt out the interesting possibility of Voldy-wart being at Hogsmeade?
Gee, Harry's getting all dolled up. How subtle… NOT! (Hee! Just like a teenager.)
My goodness, Hermione and Ginny are going even more overboard than Harry! (I bet if Molly saw Ginny's outfit, Ginevra would wind up in a Convent School for Chaste-Whether-They-Want-To-Be-Or-Not Witches.)
Wow! Harry's going to let his friends help him! (If I were there, I'd be checking his breath to see if it smelled like Polyjuice Potion.) ((G'head, Ginny, check his breath. I dare you. ;) ))
Wow! again. Ginny and Hermione sound like fashion models! (I like the jewelry!)
Darn, nothing's bad happened to Draco at the Ball. (That we've seen.)
Well, lunch is over, so this review is… To Be Continued!
Bwa-ha-ha! (It's your own fault for writing such a lovely long story!)
Thanks for reveiwing Jels!
your review is very important to us please hold for the next available Jedione story to review, until then I suggest you finish your review for this one
On a more serious note I do appreciate your reviewing this story, but not just your review everyone's how else can we grow as writers without constructive criticism to tell us how we may improve. And encouragement to keep doing what we're doing. Thank you all for your time in reading my stories and in taking the time to review them. I appreciate it. |
jabarber69 Thursday 2nd December 2004 03:46 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future |
that story was also very good. you have a wonderful imagination. I enjoy reading about hp,gw and rw,hg and I like it when they arent moping and seem to not be afraid of voldie. |
Bart Tuesday 9th November 2004 11:55 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future |
An entertaining little fic, a nice mix of action, fluff and an original plot line to boot very nice
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p0tterfan Wednesday 3rd November 2004 19:53 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future |
Your story started off really well but I felt you rushed it towards the
end ... perhaps to post it in time for Halloween? Promising
start, story wise the ending was good too - just too rushed I felt.
Some of the dialogues near the end seemed rushed as well. Overall, a good story - that could have been great :)
Looking forward to more stories from you.
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Wednesday 3rd November 2004 19:53 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future (Author Response) |
Your story started off really well but I felt you rushed it
towards the end ... perhaps to post it in time for Halloween?
Promising start, story wise the ending was good too - just too rushed I
felt. Some of the dialogues near the end seemed rushed as well. Overall, a good story - that could have been great :) Looking forward to more stories from you.
Thanks
for your comments and you were correct, I unfortunately did rush the
end a little to get it done before Halloween. Both of my stories
thus far have been a little rushed I know. The problem was both
of these were challenges and I was trying to meet a deadline in both
cases. In the future I hope my stories will be a bit more
developed. I have another one complete that I hope will be a bit
better. It will have about 5 or 6 parts when it's all said and
done. They are pure fluff, but I hope they will be
enjoyable. I have a sequel to Pulse in the wings and two other
stories that I have been working on also. So far they are turning
out to be quite long. One of them I can't post here as it is a
crossover, but they other should be okay. I just have to find the
time to get it done. The short ones of course are easier to turn
out, and I hope as I improve my style and technique that they will
improve as well. I'm glad you liked it and thanks for your
comments once again.
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Kelleypen Sunday 31st October 2004 18:11 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future |
It looks good. The final changes polished it nicely. Good fic, Tony. |
Bring and Fly Sunday 31st October 2004 15:17 | Echoes of the Past: Visions of the Future |
I liked it the first time and I'm very happy to see it posted! (Thanks to Mr Intel)
Action and fluff-what more could one desire?
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