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Reviews For Consequences of the Mind by Mr. Intel

Prongs739
Thursday 28th August 2008 19:57
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That was a little interesting with the minor amnesia.
ImmortalPhoenix
Monday 17th April 2006 22:55
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Ginny rolled her eyes in a way that reminded him strongly of Hermione. "You were too busy looking at my neck, if I remember correctly. Honestly, you need to learn to control yourself around me, Harry."

Instantly contrite, Harry shrugged and said, "Sorry. I can't help it if you're dead sexy."

When a pleasant shade of crimson graced her cheeks, Harry smiled and kicked off to finish practicing.

Aww lol SO cute!

Again I love the A/N. I dont know why so please dont ask but its time to go to bed before I get into too much trouble for going to bed at 12 after being on the computer ALL day. lol
Great Job as usual!!
Kortnee
sonicdale
Thursday 10th March 2005 21:35
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Sneaky.

You had me going about the lost memories.

I was despairing for a bit, but now I'm happy. I hope Harry's not just channeling Dumbledore and his skills are his own. Or maybe his own skills are being enhanced. Are we going to see him excel in Potions as well?

Mariposa
Sunday 16th January 2005 00:58
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The spell was a really great idea but a hell of a way to get Dumbledore out of the picture. I loved it when Harry called Ginny "dead sexy" even though it did put thoughts of Fat +blocked+ from the Austin Powers movie in my head. *ugh* .

I hadn't even noticed at the end of the "Harry waking up from the spell scene" that he didn't remember that he wore glasses. I just thought it was an odd comment until later I smacked my head and said "doh!"

When Ginny forgot what Harry was to her it broke my heart! And he was crying! I really do think you have a very sadistic streak in you but it does help make the story more interesting.

Ginny let out a shuddering breath. "The only thing I know for sure is that I hurt inside – I don't hate you anymore, Harry, I just hurt."

So could Ginny continually feel all the pain he was going through for the next couple of days? I was so relieved when Harry shared thier memories, lucky they have that link eh?

Things had gone past the 'interesting' stage and were now into the 'dangerous' phase. Harry couldn't contain his desire for Ginny and was intent on showing Ginny just how much he had missed her, how much he needed her. For her part, Ginny was just as anxious and soon had Harry pinned underneath her.

All of a sudden, a huge wave of water engulfed them and Ginny screeched in shock.

So funny! I needed a giant squid when I was in high school too!

So why does McTierny where sunglasses?

Kokopelli - good work I loved your TLOS did you help with the H/G scenes?

Great chapter people!

Cera
Thursday 25th November 2004 20:43
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This was a busy, busy chapter, I have to say.  To be honest, I was confused for a great deal of it.  Since you've left out the reason for Ginny's loss of memories, I'm going to assume that I was supposed to feel that way.  It was an interesting twist, Ginny forgetting the summer, but it went by really quickly.  I think it would have been interesting to see it prolongued for a longer time.

The new professor is looking to be an interesting sort.  You've kept him mostly a mystery, which adds some suspense to the story.  I'm curious to read more about him, and these lessons that he'll be teaching Harry.  I think that Harry would ask more questions of him, so I hope that he does in the near future. 

Ron's confession surprised me, since you told us that he knew Hermione was in the bushes.  Did he want Harry to know, or did it slip out?  Why does Hermione want to keep it a secret?

Dumbledore's in the picture for awhile I guess.  I think he must be laid up, possibly in that coma state he was refering to.  It's interesting that Harry hasn't asked about him yet.

I'm not sure if I've mentioned this in any of my reviews yet, but I wanted to say that I really enjoy your style of writing.  It's not too wordy, yet you've got description that really adds to the story.

Oh, and nice job Kokopelli, for your 3-5%.

Friday 26th November 2004 17:49Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
Thanks for the blushingly nice review. 

One of the most difficult problems with writing fanfiction, I've found, is that you are pressured to compartmentalize all your chapters - make them complete in and of themselves to reduce reader confusion.  If J/K did that, we'd likely revolt!  I have to have some feeling of connectedness, and included in that is some element of mystery, between chapters.  Your questions are answered in chapter four and five, so if you get a chance, read chapter four and hopefully, you won't be so in the dark!

On Ron and Hermione, again, chapter four should reveal the answeres you seek.

Your praise is flattering - thank you for reading my little story.
Bring and Fly
Wednesday 17th November 2004 05:20
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 I didn't see it was a set-up. What does that make me?

Another splendiferous chapter! I'm a bit concerned that Harry is turning into Dumbledore though; and now I really want to know why the bond was blocked and how. I'm guessing the spell Albus performed had something to do with it.

The grandfather clock with all the student hands on it was inspired!

Still loving this (and that includes Kokopelli's 5%!)

Cara     Baffy

Zaptor
Tuesday 16th November 2004 03:49
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Good chapter. I'm sorry, I'm to tired to write more, but trust me, the writting's much appreciated.
Katieay
Monday 15th November 2004 17:36
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 That's so funny with Ron and Hermione! And perfect  Though should we be wondering why Hermione wants to keep it a secret, is that important?

I loved this chapter... I can't believe how much you (and Kokopelli) packed in there. There's lots to absorb, and I especially loved the scene in the courtyard, with Harry crying and being a mess and Ron's no nonsense attitude. It was both heartwrenching and dead funny! I loved it.

I think this is your best chapter so far... I'm intrigued by Professer McTierney and the fact that Harry's forgotten he needed glasses. I hope Dumbledore recovers... he seemed pretty sure he would, but I wouldn't put it past him to do that just for Harry's comfort.

Looking forward to more M!

- Katie

Monday 15th November 2004 17:47Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
You're the first one to comment on my first OC.  I hope he turns out as well as I hope for him.  Look for anwers and a few new questions in chapter four!
Bart
Monday 15th November 2004 07:08
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Well, that was quite the eventful chapter 

Really felt for Harry. when Ginny and himself first came round from their sleep, you worked his confusion in wonderfully.

I don't think anybody has addressed this question in their reviews yet, but if the spell has affected Harry and Ginny in the ways it has, how has it affected Dumbledore other that the obvious tiredness from performing the spell.
Monday 15th November 2004 08:03Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
Ah, Bart.  Good questions.  Dumbledore answers part of that himself in this chapter, but we seen him again in what is now chapter six.  You'll see what effects the spell has on him then.  Suffice it to say that copying thoughts is much different than having thoughts implantes in your head!
p0tterfan
Sunday 14th November 2004 22:28
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Good thing you didn't let that Harry Ginny fight go on for too long.  I always find it too cliched when they start fighting only to get back together again.

Why did Ginny forget the summer?  Something to do with the spell.  It seems Dumbledore may have transferred more than just occlumency to Harry and Ginny.  Or did he only transfer part of it?  Lots of questions - I guess they'll all be answered in time.

So when did R/H get together?  Hmm ... I hope I didn't missed that previously ... that's what happens when you read too many stories.

Good work - Kokopelli too - he hasn't updated his story in a while though.  Maybe you can bug him.

Excellent job as always - looking forward to the next chapter.
Sunday 14th November 2004 22:44Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
Yes, Ginny *and* Harry have forgotten things because of the spell.  More in chapter four.

Hermione and Ron are together, see the A/N for chapter two and the upcoming chapter four.

Kokopelli recently finished chapter twenty of TLOS.  I've read it, it's over 25,000 words long and is the single best chapter he's written bar none.  He's also started on chapter twenty-one.  Look for twenty this week, depending on when his hard working beta can get it picked through.
blinieldar
Sunday 14th November 2004 19:24
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Oh this is getting good. you had me worried that Ginny would not regain her memories until the end of the chapter. I expected one heck of a cliffie. Not that I'm complaining mind. Great job all around.
Sunday 14th November 2004 22:45Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
Glad you weren't dissapointed.  I hate cliff hangers as much as the next guy, but I can't promise a true cliffie won't appear in this story.  However, I promise to have written the next chapter before posting a cliffie.  Deal?
Neely61
Sunday 14th November 2004 18:36
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  Talk about a wild ride!  lovin' it so far.    I don't understand why Ginny would lose her memories of the summer but Harry wouldn't.  Also, (and maybe this will come in later) I don't think D'dore explained the effects of the spell to them as well he should have considering Harry's reaction to being mis-informed (i.e. lied to) the previous year.  Myself?  I would have had a very upset Harry dragging D'dore out of his "sick bed" to demanding that he fix it as soon as he realised what had happened but that's just how I see it and I ain't you so I'll stop the rant and move on.     So anyway, it seems the big D. has given Harry much more than occlumency skills in the transfer.  Will this follow to Ginny now that she seems to remember? 

Ok, done with my rant/review for now so I'll close with "Where's chapter 4?  I want it NOW!!!"  Ahem, sorry bout that   Looking forward to more so update soonest!

Sunday 14th November 2004 22:49Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
The Learning Spell, as you will learn in chapter four, involves messing directly with one's mind.  That kind of tinkering results in all sorts of secondary effects.  Memory loss is one of the most common.  For more details (including what Harry forgot) see chapter four. 

Dumbledore didn't hold back, he didn't lie, and he isn't hiding anything from Harry.  Dumbledore has only performed this spell once before (any guesses as to who?) and is the first since Merlin to do it.  He's not exactly sure what all will happen as each instance is different.  However, what little work has been done on the subject is found by our favorite bookworm in...you guessed it, chapter four. 

BTW, I've already started writing it, but it'll be at least a week until it's written, so be patient with this humble writer of fluff.  This serious stuff is hard to write!
ninkenate
Sunday 14th November 2004 16:52
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There for a moment, I thought you had done some damage to Harry and Ginny's relationship. I felt so sorry for both of them. For Harry because of his heartbreak and Ginny because she was having to miss something that she had worked hard to get and deserved to keep it. I can't wait to see what kind of extra training they're getting.

Is Dumbledore still out? It never told what kind of story the students were fed for Harry's, Ginny's, and Dumbledore's disappearances. Was it something that Dumbledore did that made Ginny forget everything about her relationship with Harry?

I don't understand why Hermione is mad at Ron for telling their secret. They weren't happy when Harry kept secrets from them. She better not be ashamed of him. I feel like Hermione has something going on that we aren't seeing beside the broom closet incidents.

It's all very interesting. I can't wait to see your next chapter.
Sunday 14th November 2004 18:28Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
I'm sorry for the ambiguity with Dumbledore and his situation.  Everyone actually goes to visit Dumbledore in a later chapter (either five or six, I haven't decided yet).  The cover story isn't a big factor to the plot, but it's mentioned in chapter four (at least, it is as of right now).

You'll get the full story on Ron and Hermione in chapter four.  Hermione explains her reasoning then.  I just hope its good enough for you ravenous R/Hr fans.
emmamoonpotter
Sunday 14th November 2004 13:08
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Whew!  You had me worried for the majority of this chapter!  I thought Ginny was going to never remember her time with Harry!  Great job!  I thought the part where Harry fell on a certain part of Cho's (hem hem) anatonomy was hilarious!  
Sunday 14th November 2004 18:25Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
I'm glad you liked that little bit with Cho.  It's a nod to a chapter in another of my stories, Coming of Age.  
mary-v
Sunday 14th November 2004 12:44
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loll, but technically, ron didnt say to harry that he and hermione where together! so hermione cant be angry. I mean, she cant expect best friends-almost brothers- not tell each other a thing. And why do I have the feeling that Harry doesnt remember anything before he came to Hogwarts? And in all honesty, when Ginny didn't remember anything about Harry, I cried. And Kokopelli-*nod* lol, wonderful work! And of course, Mr.Intel, you dont really need to be told that you are brilliant! Or that you should please update soon? lol

~Maria~

Sunday 14th November 2004 18:24Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
Sure...technically.  But I'm not going to get that complicated with things.  You'll find out Hermione's reasoning in chapter four.

Thanks for reading.
trustnlove
Sunday 14th November 2004 11:40
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I"ve just finished reading through the 1st 3 chapters - loved it!!  Kudos to you and kopelli! I loved the way you got Ginny to remember her bond with Harry. I get the feeling that both Harry and Ginny have  somewhat "matured" since Dumbledore cast the spell over them. Can't wait to read what happens next!!!

Sunday 14th November 2004 12:20Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
Harry and Ginny have had certain biological effects take hold of them, yes.  Hermione answers most questions regarding the learning spell in chapter four.  I hope you enjoy the next installment!
parakletos
Sunday 14th November 2004 10:18
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As always a pleasure to read and thanks to John for his contribution.
Sunday 14th November 2004 11:27Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
I'm glad you liked it. 
Antonia East
Sunday 14th November 2004 07:43
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Oh, poor Ron.  I don't see why Hermione was so mad.  This was a really intense chapter, but I loved the humorous touch of the squid 'extinguishing' couples.
Sunday 14th November 2004 11:27Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
Thanks.  The squid was my idea, but John had Ginny verbalizing what happened, so kudos to him.

You'll see why Hermione was mad in chapter four, but for some hints, read my replies to other reviewers!
wvchemteach
Sunday 14th November 2004 01:43
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OK I'm relieved that we made it through the 1st "Bump" in the road. I can see Harry and Ginny having spats, but I can't see them letting something erupt to the point that it splits them up after what it took to put them together.

However, having her forget the entire events of Consequences of the Heart short of their little duel would definately put an end to the relationship fast.  I think Harry's reaction is dead on.  He's finally found love and experienced it, and now without her he is absolutely going to pieces. It's even worse because he could feel the hatred and animosity bleeding off of Ginny towards him through the bond.

I'm going to go out on a limb and predict that Parvati will try to make herself one of those "bumps" that Harry and Ginny will have to overcome.

I'm also curious as to why Hermione wanted to keep her relationship with Ron a secret? Is she ashamed of him, or is she afraid of the attention?

I'm also going to go out on a limb and guess that Dumbledore transfered much more than his memories of Occulemncy to Harry and Ginny.  I believe the fact that he seems to be understanding his classes faster and easier is because when he has the lessons the memories that Dumbledore transfered are jogged to the front.

I think the make-up scence was brilliant although IMHO I don't think Ginny would be pulling her bra off like that at this point of the relationship. (I do have to admint that it was funny). I've always been of the opinion that Arthur and Molly have raised Ginny to not be so quick to move into that kind of physical relationship. Of course I guess one would assume that they would try to raise their boys to be gentlmen towards women as well, but if they did apparently that didn't take very well with Ron and especially the twins.  (Some of the comments the twins make at times are borderline anti-women). Percy seems to be more sensible in this area (he's a git in many others). And we've had so little interaction with Bill and Charlie to see how they behave.

Then again I guess her pulling her bra off like that while still wearing her clothes and robes over-top  is a lot less racy than what I've seen in other fics. And I guess I can see the two them allowing themselves to get swept up. I'm always of the opinion that because Harry has had so little physical affection in his life that once he really gets into a serious relationship he is going to crave physical contact like hugging, snuggling, holding hands and the like because it is all new to him and I can see how a 16 year old boy can easily let himself get carried away, but I think he would restrain himself out of respect for Ginny and her family, and out of fear that he doesn't know what he's doing.  Ginny I think would be a cooler head than Harry about keeping things under control, but then again this is Harry (whom she's had strong feelings about in some way or another at least since she was 10). And I imagine that growing up in Molly Weasley's household she is no stranger to and quite comfortable with physical affection.

Ok I started out with a review and turned it into a character analysis...sorry!

 (looks around embarassed)

All in all I thought the chapter was brilliant and has set the stage for the two of them to become everything they can be together and you did the break up in a way that was well done without betraying the characters natures and you had them make up within the same chapter so that your readers don't have to lanquish for a week or more in agony. (Sorry I've been craving some   and  lately because it seems most of the new fics coming out recently, mostly on other sites, have been of the torturous angst/tragedy variety.)

Look forward to the next installment (hope you will be able to keep to your 1 chapter a week schedule, but will understand if you can't.)

Just another note: this means that someone such as Ferret boy could really do some damage to their relationship with a well placed obliviate spell.

Sunday 14th November 2004 11:18Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
Whew!  That was quite the review, there!  My smile is so big, I think my wife may be a little worried for my sanity. 

I'll try to address some of your points in this reply, but will mostly just say that it's all going to be resolved in the chapters to follow this one. 

1) Parvati certainly has designs on Harry, but Hermione has been doing some behind the scenes interferance to keep her busy.  She'll be back,
2) Hermione and Ron: Sigh.  I really want to let chapter four answer that, but I'll say this much....Hermione does want their relationship a secret, but it's not what you think.  She's *not* ashamed of Ron, though that thought has certainly occured to her.  It's why Ron is taking things in stride.  He knows the reason she's upset, and he's willing to let her come 'round - which she will, in chapter four.
3) Effects of the learning spell: This is a spell that only a few wizards could ever cast in the first place. Dumbledore and perhaps Voldemort could cast the spell (assuming Tommy boy knew about it).  Because it's complicated and requires enormous magical talent and power, it is also unwieldly.  Dumbledore knew that in order to *make sure* that the shield was installed in both Harry and Ginny, he would have to transfer a little bit more than just the shield.  Furthermore, he was doing it to two people, instead of one, something which has *never* been done.  So yes, Harry and Ginny will be quite a bit smarter in class for the next little while, but most of the spell's effects will be short-lived.  The memory-loss (which effects Harry more than Ginny, BTW) the extra knowledge, and the physical effects will all fade with time.  What won't fade is the shield itself and what they've learned while they've had the extra knowledge.  Hermione explains it much better than I in the next chapter.
4) The bra:  If you look hard enough, there are hints through the chapter that Dumbledore's spell affected both Harry and Ginny physically.  Harry's beard, the glasses, Ginny's blouse being too small and her subsequent frustration with a bra that just doesn't fit right.  Again, Hermione will explain it all in chapter four, but those are some of the hints.
5) Harry and Ginny's physical relationship.  They are two teens very much in love, who had been apart because of Ginny's memory-loss.  They had an excuse to get a little steamed up in their 'making up'.  Needless to say, their relationship will be physical from time to time, but their mutual respect and love will always win out over their hormones.  They're responsible and cognisant of where the boundaries are.

Malfoy will feature in future chapters, but he won't have the gumption (or the intelligence) to interfere with Harry and Ginny's relationship like that.  Contrary to other fanfics, Malfoy is a follower, not a leader, completely lacking in any original thought.  Like his father, he's a high-society bully with money and swagger, but no brains and no chance for independant success.

Drop me an e-mail if you have any more questions regarding my 'answers'.
Kinsfire
Sunday 14th November 2004 01:35
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So when does Ron get her to admit that she wants it to be a secret because she's secretly ashamed of him?

That's how I see it, at least.  She knows everyone will pick on her for not choosing someone better, and she agrees with them, even if it's subconsciously.  Either that or she's afraid of letting the school know that she actually has emotions, and wants to be thought of as a cold fish.

Might do her well to have Ron break up with her for a while after she's willing to speak to him again.

On to other parts of the story - the return of her memories struck me as more than a little rushed, and maybe it's just my take on it, but I think Dumbledore knew quite well that it would happen to Ginny.  His excuse will be that it all worked out for the best, but I think the man knows the pain he causes Harry, and some small part of him enjoys his ability to let his House out to play occasionally.  (Be honest - anyone with THAT may plots running at one time HAS to have been a Slytherin.)
Sunday 14th November 2004 11:25Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
Never.  Because that's not it at all.  Hermione does want to keep it a secert, but that's not the reason.  Look for resolution to Ron and Hermione's problems in chapter four.

If you thought Ginny getting her memories back was rushed, you should have seen the original version!  I had Harry forcing his memories into her head from the off, and she melted into a quivering pile of Harry love less than a day and less a thousand words later.  Here at least, there's a couple of days and a few scenes of angst in between.  Suffice it to say that Harry and Ginny *need* each other and I need them to be together for my plot to work.  Had this been more H/G-centric, instead of having an actual plot, I could have had more freedom to explore the 'Ginny hates Harry again because she can't remember what it means to love him' angle and done a smashing job with it.  But alas, the plot demands to be written and this little bunny can't keep it from coming.  Sorry!

Dumbledore did indeed know that the spell would affect memories (as it's a giant mind meld, essentially).  But, he didn't know *how* precisely that would work out.  So blame Dumbledore if you want, he certainly wasn't planning on Harry and Ginny breaking up over it - on the contrary, he very much wants them together.  It's the whole point to CotH!

Keep reading, Dumbledore makes further in-roads into the plot, but this was his last 'big' moment in CotM.
Kelleypen
Sunday 14th November 2004 00:33
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Well done again.  I don't understand about the beard.  Does it mean they were out longer than a week, or is it something else he picked up from Dumbledore, like the no glasses? Why did the spell affect Harry and Ginny so differently?  And I'm waiting to see why Hermione is ticked off . . . she ought to be delighted. And the sunglasses and refusing to pick a side by the new DADA teacher. You've certainly left lots of clues and questions. More please.  Kelley
Sunday 14th November 2004 00:41Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
The disadvantage to posting one chapter at a time is that some things will be left unanswered while others are addressed immediately.  There many changes as a result of the learning spell.  When Hermione gets over herself, she'll let us know all about them. 

DADA teacher is my first real OC.  We'll see how it goes.
XiaoXiao
Sunday 14th November 2004 00:22
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Well, well, well.  They can share more than just thoughts, apparently.  Did the "good eyes" come from Ginny?  V. interesting situation--the missing memories.  Will we get more of an explanation for it later? 

Glad you didn't make Harry suffer too long there!

Sunday 14th November 2004 00:39Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
The nature of Harry and Ginny's bond is a mystery to even them.  There's been no know record of an Egretic bond in the last 1000 years.

Missing memories and other questions will be answered in later chapters.
Kokopelli
Sunday 14th November 2004 00:14
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No, no, no, it should read "the best three to five percent of the text in this chapter came from Kokopelli's mind."

HAH!

Glad to see this making the light of day - it's a sweet story, well written.

Keep it coming.

JEC
Sunday 14th November 2004 00:38Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
Uh huh.  You certainly punched up certain scenes, but I'd like to think I had a tiny hand in making this thing work. 

Chapter four sees answers to some questions and yet more questions.
Iris
Saturday 13th November 2004 23:51
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Instantly contrite, Harry shrugged and said, "Sorry. I can't help it if you're dead sexy."

another great chapter, as usual. can't wait for the next one... I wonder how Dumbledore fared...

~Iris
Sunday 14th November 2004 00:36Consequences of the Mind (Author Response)
Thanks for reading.  You'll see re: Dumbledore later in the story.  Can't say too much now.