Oh my merlin. Never have I been so mesmerized over anything as this chapter,especially H/G as Dragons. Absolutely a breathtaking kind of writing. I,m beside myself and not making a ,d bit of sense, but you are a fantastic writer.Simply flabbergasted!!!!!!! WOW!

o my goodness!

i can't believe you willingly let us hanging like this.  your story is incredible!

This chapter was SO COOL!!! I loved Harry and Ginny's transformation into the Dragons .

I'm really excited about the next chapter! Update soon!

Hello,  Kokopelli

I have to admit the first time I saw your story I really did not go that far enough into it. And I gave up on it. Well, now I went and gave it a secone chance and have read the story all the way through chp 20, Boy!! Was I way off. Congratulations!!! You have a well-written, highly imagenative Harry and Ginny that has entered my personal top 10. I love the two intermissions w/h Ginny between you and Aibhinn. It's good for a fanfic author to come up with some new ideas and write them in a way that they come almost canon fact.  Since I'm a newbie to your story, I've got a couple of questions for you. So now what have you got planned after this story? Any plans for Harry to become an animagus like Ginny? How come I get the feeling that Harry's mentor is not going to be with us for much longer? And if that happens, How bad or good will that impact Harry and Ginny's relationship? Is Cho gonna be a problem to H/G  as well? Mabey you could cover summer between year 6/7, since rumors of HBP are coming more frequent. Well thanks for taking the time to write this tale for all of us H/G  and HP fans. Thanks to you, for keeping me occupied until I have HBP in My hands.

many thanks and keep up the good work

harrypotterfan777777

ps I think that you would do JKR very proud.

Awesome fight, I like the Snow Dragons and the Pair fighting back very much.

Really well written story, great reading. It's nice to see a good amount of magic, also some new magic. I also liked you introducing new, interesting characters.

Has Jasmine softened during the story? She does not appear so creepy and deadly as when first introduced. I'm surprised that none of the males at the birthday party had a go at her as she's very atrractive. Some bold guy getting a nasty surprise could be funny. I'd also like to see her in a real fight.

i cant help but read this chapter again... and, both camps in my head are sharpening their blades, ready to skin each other. here's why:

seeing in your replies to the reviews that you'll most probably not write a sequel, one side of me doesn't want you to update the next chapter(ducks swords and axes from the opposite camp *smiles*). the other side of me, however, craves for it.

you've given me mind's equavalant of heroin, Mr. Cornell, and i love you for it. wait, no, i'm straight, so no guys for me...

Bloody brilliant. ron would have a lot to answer for from the 'dragon' couple. the 'dragon' couple, on the other hand, would have alot to answer for from the family.

and, say, have ever thought of adding the "The Caboose" part from your sketchbook to your fanfics? it's going to look cute in the story.

WOWZERS.  Another (Best in my opion) Chapter.  Not sure how you plan to top this one, but my best to you.

Ron's in a bit (Bite)  of trouble, No?

Poor Hermione.  She just converted him too.

Will there be another meeting of the Real Snow Dragons?

Will they have the ability to change into Dragons still?  You mentioned that it wasn't Animagi forms.  Could it be a Gift from Dragon Kind to the Servant and his Krulach?  That would be wicked.  And apropreate.  Give their connection with them.

I find it interesting that Ginny had so much faith in Tk'lch, given his feelings towards her and her revulsion to being controled.  I wonder if he will see it that way?

Can't wait for more.

You rule dude.

LOL

CM

Hi Kokopelli,

I have been reading your story for almost a year now and have enjoyed it immensely.  I have not done any fanfic reviews before but felt that I had to add my review before you are done with this story.  This story ranks very highly in my list of  favourite  post-ootp/6th year stories.    

I love the way you write Harry, and the way you show his increasing   maturity after the events his 5th year.  I  really hope that in canon he recovers from his depression and angst  as quickly as he does in your story.   But I fear JKR is  not going to let him off so easily.

I liked the ever-present humour and especially loved the pranks.  The latest chapter showed that you can write great action scenes too .  Especially the scene with the Hydra  .  

Of course,  I love the dragons and Abelard and Jasmine.  You write very interesting original characters and the concept of snow dragons and pyrgs was very original and captivating.  

 Being from India,  it was very entertaining to read Indian names and references.( "Suffering Shiva" indeed ).  ( I wonder where you got the name 'Snik Paprikash' from.  The closest Indian name I can recall  is a news reader by the name of  'Snigdha Prakash' on  npr radio.) 

I feasted on all the yummy H/G action in the last two chapters (did not mind  the no-snogging thing  -  they have progressed much further than my initial  expectation).  I appreciate that you took your time to develop their relationship, even though the time frame of your fic ( 2 months of summer ) might make it seem quicker.

I did not have any problem with the church-visits (fyi - I was raised as and consider myself  a Hindu ).  Of course I am very limited in my knowledge of  the history between witchcraft and Christianity.

Another thing I appreciated in your story was the colourful and drool-inducing description of food, cooking and eating.   Do you like to cook too ? 

Looking forward to the  (hopefully huge) last chapter. 

Anantha

this is such a great story! i love the your characterization of ginny and i'm looking forward to the next chapter. I also like the dragons, how they carry themselves, because they know that they are the superior beings.  I have one question though, is St. Simon's a catholic church? because the rites described seemed familiar, i do know that catholics take the communion, i'm just curious is all.

WOW! When I came back to this story and realized you had updated, I started reading it from the beginning again to get back into the story. FAN-BLOODY-TASTIC!!! I knew, after Harry's conversation with Mm'lau in this last chapter, he was going to "mark" Ginny - it just had to be. Again, many praises on another well written, very entertaining story. I'll be back for the end!!!

I've spent the majority of time while not at work or college to read this story, and I must say I'm immensly impressed.  This story is one of the best I've ever read.

Probablly the best line at the end there was when "dragon-Harry" says "I'm going hunting."

So now that Harry's marked Ginny they can kiss right?  *prods the government worker with finger* Right?

   'nough said!

I can't believe another cliffie, how horrid, how could you do this?  ha ha, you know if you say that you don't want complaints of cliffies, of course I am going to complain.  What can I say, I am an ornery old fart.

Enough teasing though, I have really liked this story and your back ground with the Dragons is amazing.  However, I do believe that you have outdone yourself on this chapter.  It was incredible.

I don't really have time for more,  I am at work, however, you are the master of fanfics, at least in my book.

Angie

John,

Have I told you before that you're brilliant? If not, consider yourself told as this is an excellent, excellent chapter. I spent the better part of 2 1/2 hours over two nights reading it and enjoyed every word.

Now, I've been impressed with the creativity of the Potterverse you've built up through the whole of this stories. The special training, the wandless magic, and especially the dragon magic and its influence on Harry, Ginny and their feelings for each other -- all are uniquely yours. I even thought you had presented them well symbolically through Harry and Ginny's dreams, their 'technical difficulties' and other subtle devices like Jasmine's relationship with Harry.

But this chapter -- and especially the ending -- blew everything that had come before out of the water. To actually see Harry and Ginny fighting side-by-side as dragons, and then Harry marking Ginny adds so much dynamism and closure to what was already a compelling story line. I don't know how else to describe the battle scene but as the perfect culmination of all that had come before. It brought the plotlines together and it did so in a clever manner I didn't expect. For all the evidence to the contrary, I never thought you'd actually make Harry and Ginny dragons.

Now, this was a long chapter (itself a positive feature) and I liked a lot more of it than just the ending (though, it was the ending that especially blew me away). In no particular order some other things that especially struck me:

Anyway, I've run out of things to ramble about, but as I'm sure you can tell, I think you did a marvelous job with this chapter. In my opinion, it moves your story from a very good one to one of the absolutely elite of the fandom.

-KC

John,

Have I told you before that you're brilliant? If not, consider yourself told as this is an excellent, excellent chapter. I spent the better part of 2 1/2 hours over two nights reading it and enjoyed every word.

I'm glad that I can provide such pleasure.

Now, I've been impressed with the creativity of the Potterverse you've built up through the whole of this stories. The special training, the wandless magic, and especially the dragon magic and its influence on Harry, Ginny and their feelings for each other -- all are uniquely yours. I even thought you had presented them well symbolically through Harry and Ginny's dreams, their 'technical difficulties' and other subtle devices like Jasmine's relationship with Harry.

But this chapter -- and especially the ending -- blew everything that had come before out of the water. To actually see Harry and Ginny fighting side-by-side as dragons, and then Harry marking Ginny adds so much dynamism and closure to what was already a compelling story line. I don't know how else to describe the battle scene but as the perfect culmination of all that had come before. It brought the plotlines together and it did so in a clever manner I didn't expect. For all the evidence to the contrary, I never thought you'd actually make Harry and Ginny dragons.

As I've said, time and again, everything in TLOS is foreshadowed.  I'm glad the ending worked for you.

Now, this was a long chapter (itself a positive feature) and I liked a lot more of it than just the ending (though, it was the ending that especially blew me away). In no particular order some other things that especially struck me:

The points of view: I can't exactly say the transitions were seemless because there were so many of them, but I thought the timeline of one perspective per day kept things well structured through everything that was going on (and there was certainly a lot!). I also like the way you shifted writing techniques -- letters, diary entries, narration, what I suppose could be called internal monologue with the dragons -- to keep things from becoming static. And I was very impressed with how true to the characters each of the perspectives was. Ginny's diary articles came across as particularly natural to me.This is an area where I've had some disagreement with authors and betas.  The Prologue of TLOS has  POV shift that drove Aibhinn nuts, but I needed it to be there, and very few readers have complained that they didn't know what was going on.  POV is a lovely servant, but a terrible taskmaster.  Prior chapters covered a day or less, so POV changes were a bit easier - this chapter covers almost a month, so the POV shifts (which were necessary) were more apparent.
Harry/Ginny relationship (pre-dragon biting): You've certainly got your own unique take. It's quite odd to read a fic where Harry and Ginny are proclaiming their love for each other and not snogging each other senseless, to steal the fanfic cliche. But considering the reasoning I think that makes sense, and I also think it makes their relationship a bit more believable in relation to canon. By bringing them closer, having them connect, without them being overly physical about it, I think you stay a bit truer to everything they've had to overcome both in canon and in your universe and counteract the fast pace in which you bring them together. As you well know by now, in part, this story is an attempt to smash a whole truckload of fan-fic cliches.  Boy meets girl, boy lusts after girl, boy kisses girl, end of story - not my cup of tea.  I tried to show the stop and start of a real relationship, however, compressing it into less than a month and less than 300 pages. 
Humor: I just love how you take the emotional peak of the story, Harry's marking Ginny, and you twist it around to a light finish by having Ron hex dragon!Harry. And the more I think about it, the more I realize that fits the general tone of the chapter. There's a good bit of wit and sarcasm in this chapter spread all through this chapter. A lot of that is based on your characterization and the proponderence of writing from her perspective but there the pranks also had me chuckling and Harry's self-deprecation works well too. Together, I think all this nicely kept this from, again with all it's bulk, from becoming too serious and heavy Ron gets some great lines in next chapter too.  He digs his way out of this one, but just barely.

Anyway, I've run out of things to ramble about, but as I'm sure you can tell, I think you did a marvelous job with this chapter. In my opinion, it moves your story from a very good one to one of the absolutely elite of the fandom.

-KC

You have no idea how much I cherish feedback from other writers, especially those I respect and admire.

JEC

YOU'RE AWESOME!  COMPLETELY, TOTALLY, AND THOROUGHLY AWESOME!

So worth the wait.  I'll be pacing the floor until the last chapter comes out.  I must say, this is one of the best fics I've ever read (only beaten by After the End, which I'm sure everyone knows at this point).

I bow to you and your genius.

(clapping the regal exit from the building).  Thank you for this very interesting chapter, I was soooo bored at work (something very rare... yeah, right).  I'm going to be fired someday if I keep reading fiction instead of working.  I just love the ending of this chapter, typical Ron, not understanding the intensity of the moment that Harry and Ginny had just live, of course they needed to released all that tension, and what better way to do it!

 Just want to say I love this storynd I can't wait for the next update!

And although I'm very impatient because you're leaving us with a horrible cliffy  , I must say think you for how long this chapter was... I had to read it in 2 sittings. haha

Thank you and keep up the good work...

~Rebecca

Wow.

Another wonderful chapter that was worth waiting for.

I wonder how Harry is going to explain marking Ginny to Ron & the rest of the family.  Now, is Ginny going to "hex the pants off" of Harry for marking her, like she threatened in her diary?

JOHN; I just finished the chapter. I'm crying like a toddler and all I can say is WOW. OUTSTANDING, I'm baffled, I just can't string a coherent rewiew just now. I had not been this transfixed since AtE. WOW

WOW! 

Ann-Frances

long time waiting for the chapter update ... but definitely worth the wait

and i don't think i need say that i am anticipating the next one

I personally don't have the slightest problem with the references to religion, despite being pretty much an atheist myself.  It's not OOC for Harry, I think.  Even though JKR hasn't said that he *is* religious, she also hasn't said that he *isn't*, to my knowledge, and nothing in his character in the books tells me that he'd reject it completely.

That said, I think I can understand some of the backlash you're getting from it, especially from USAian readers.  It's a big hot-button right now.

I really like the story, and I'm very much looking forward to the next chapter (he says, carefully avoiding mention of the cliffhanger).

I jumped a little when you said there were a thousand Dementors, but that was mostly because I had them tagged in my head as more powerful than you've made them in your story, and therefore less common.  I.E., my version of a Dementor is fully immortal.  You can chase it off, but it'll come back eventually, especially if it's being controlled.  A thousand of them in one place could depopulate Diagon Alley.  Pasting the DEs to the vault doors was a nice touch.

The crowning glory of this story, though, remains the ease and facility with which you create living, breathing characters that leap off the page and into my imagination.  The thoughts and feelings that they experience and express, the dialogues they have with each other, it's all just masterful.

Absolutely fantastic chapter!  Actually the whole story has been brilliant!  I really like how Harry has -very slowly- progressed closer to Ginny.  I agree completely that he has WAY too many issues with emotions and affection, having been raised in the Dursley house and living in a cupboard, to move quickly with ANYONE.  The whole Cho Chang crush thing was just that, a crush, here today and gone tomorrow.

He seems to have realized that Ginny is a keeper, and you have had him spend a lot of time slowly working his way through things to the point that they now have a true relationship (although I will admit that your Ginny did worry me for a bit when she walked away - although even that was understandable in retrospect).

I really enjoyed their transfiguration into snow dragons.  Are those their animagus forms now?  Now that Harry has 'marked' Ginny in dragon form, are they going to be able to tolerate the intensity of a more physical relationship while in human form?  Please write quickly!

You mentioned that this is the penultimate chapter ... I HOPE that a) that was incorrect, and you have more to write on this, or b) that now that the summer is over you will start a 6th year fic.

PLEASE!?

I have awated your next chapter with great expectations....I was not disappointed---THAT WAS WICKED!!!!!!! This ranks among my favorite fanfics, and thats saying something. Anyway great chapter- mmmm he marked her- so the bonding has occured. What great power they share and what a great commitment to each other. And Ron and Hermione not being thick-about time.  My hats off to you mate- great chapter, very nice storyline- although this fic is summer based I do hope you consider taking it theough the year- we have to see our couples through the year.   

Wow! I wasn't expecting such a wonderfully long chapter when I found your latest update.

I've been enjoying this story since it appeared here and have been a shameless lurker up until this point. Treating us to such a lengthy chapter has finally prompted some shame in me for not reviewing. Especially since I note there's only one more chapter to go. I now find myself on the horns of the eternal WIP-readers dilemma - I can't wait to read more and yet don't want the voyage to end.

All I really have to say is how much I enjoy your writing. You've crafted a self-consistent extension to the magical world that JKR has introduced us to. Do I think JKR is going to have dragons that mind-meld in future books? Of course not. Do I think it's a lovely idea, well described and totally engaging of the reader? Absolutely. You've brilliantly created an extension to the canon world that has drawn me in. My suspension of disbelief remains beautifully intact while reading your work and at no point do I think 'Hmph, JKR would never do that', because it doesn't matter. The style and quality of your writing is high enough that I enjoy it on its own merits, not because it bears a passing resemblance to a book I enjoyed. Add to that the fact that you've developed the characters in a convincing manner that's true to their canon selves and you have the best of both worlds. No ruining of our favourite characters, yet at the same time some interesting new ideas.

Thank you for a wonderful ride, in eager anticipation of the final chapter,

Caroline

Well, I was going to complain about the delay between chapters, but with this length, I really can't. 

Wow.  There's so much going on, I have to organize my thoughts before I can comment. 

First of all, I loved the development of H&G's relationship.  There seemed to be a logical progression, and all of their doubts and hesitations made sense. 

Remus and Tonks' love is a great little side-plot, and I enjoyed the pranks, as well.

I never expected them to turn into dragons, but I greatly enjoyed their teamwork in reptile form as well.  The marking scene was great.  I wonder how their human alter-egos will feel about that. 

WOW!  I repeat, WOW!  What more can I say.

Robert

Wow! I'm quite blown away. I was so excited to see your update, and having spent my entire morning reading, it was worth the wait. The characters are so well developed - but it was still a surprise to have Harry and Ginny transfigure into their dragon selves.

I did miss seeing Jasmine, she is a true original. Oh, I really like the way you bring in the Moony/Tonks angle, and I think your handling of going to church is very well done.

Thanks so much for this, it's a great story! I'll be looking forward to seeing the next chapter (take your time, we'll wait!).

Well, I'm certainly enjoying this story. I rather like the idea of marking ones mate.  Well sort of.

Things are now progressing nicel between Harry and Ginny aren't they

No more complaints from any of your readers I suspect....although Jasmine has been sidtracked into a bit part....I would have liked to have seen a bit more of her reaction to Ginny. And vice versa. But I am at the mercy of an authors whims....sniff.

Goof stuf ...please write more.

BUT- please take this as constructive criticism - your description of the service at St. Simons is -odd.

While there are certainly some heavily Anglo-Catholic churches in the UK I would say that the vast majority of churches do not use incense nor does anyone cross themselves. There is still quite a bit of puritanism in the ENglish soul. And we still haven't forgiven Guy Fawkes from trying to blow the King up 400 years ago - and crossing oneself (and kneeling upon entering church) is far too Catholic!!

While there is one church that I have been to that does use incense (still no crossing though!!)  it would never run an Alpha course - far too modern!

'Pigeonholers' have told me that Alpha courses are run by 'charismatic evangelicals' - as my Sister says, she is a fully paid up member of a 'happy clappy' church - but certainly the one I went on was not formal at all.

No doubt your source of information will write back and tell you that I don't have any idea what I am talking about - but your description was rang untrue enough for me to feel the need to write to you about it

RG

Wow.

Just . . . . wow.

I could give you a really long review on everything I liked and what I was giggling at and everything about this chapter, but that would take a while and I'm just too damn tired.

But I have to say that I loved the "Moony's Bitch" shirt . . . *snickers wildly*

I believe this says it all:

thank you so much for this extraordinary chapter; it's been the bright spot of my week.

--a fan

ps. will there be a sequel? *kitty-eyes*

Ok, what can I say? Absolutely brilliant and well worth waiting for !!

I loved all the Harry/Ginny interaction although I would love a kiss !!

However, that said, they went a whole lot further as dragons didn't they?

I personally want to see both Harry and Ginny hit Ron several times for interfering!! I know someone else mentioned it but how could Ron knock them out?

Can't wait for the next chapter !!

PS - I vote for a sequel !! Please ??

Oh, almost forgot:

"Have you told her?"

"I think she knows," he replied.

"She's a girl, she needs to hear it, Harry," she replied.

"I'll see what I can do," he said lightly. "Let's go get lunch."

That was BRILLIANT.

Wow. You don't do things by halves, do you?

I was wondering how long it would take Harry to 'mark' Ginny once they were in Dragon form. Ron being able to stun Harry seems rather odd - none of the Death Eaters could but he can?

We're not worthy, we're not worthy!

As always, a Kokopelli update to his own story is greatly appreciated -- I enjoy your input into other stories but I've definitely been hungry for an update to this one.

HUGE chapter.  Let me see my notes for the comments I had... ah yes.

For the diary entries, I thought this was a really excellent take.  The sharing of her concerns about what she thought he wanted, what she wanted, why she wasn't jumping him -- it's really well spoken as far as what Ginny's concerns might actually be. 

I got a kick out of Ginny's running/not running arguments, but particularly on the morning Harry was missing.  As a husband, I have learned to sleep through my wife leaving the bed, kicking the dog out, or having a leg cramp -- I don't know how I learned, so don't ask.  But it's easy for me to say that she could sleep through his departure and then suddenly freak out when she couldn't find him, magically or otherwise.  The way Harry reassures her when he returns is quite touching.

Harry and Arthur's conversation in the living room is amusing, particularly if you're looking at it from the parental point of view -- it's easy to remember being on the boy's side and being terrified, but I can see Arthur trying to be supportive of Harry's potentially fragile relationship -- no matter his unspoken concerns that he and Molly argued about.  It would be interesting to see your take on the conversation that he and Molly had that allowed Harry "visitation rights".

Depth of a coffee cup, indeed.

The galleon scene in Gringotts was excellent -- I love how Harry made his point about his money.  The money is always something for Ginny and the rest of the Weasley's to "get over" when dealing with Harry.  I think this is the first story that I've seen Harry ramming down the collective Weasley throat how lucky they all are -- the family dinner (last chapter), the galleons, etc.

I enjoyed the fight sequences, but I do wonder about Ginny's reaction when she wakes up -- both to Harry and to Ron.  I'm sure we'll find out (soon, I hope, but this chapter had to be a gargantuan effort), but in the meantime I'm rooting for a more open link for Harry and Ginny -- once Harry's black eye heals.

At any rate, there's a lot in this chapter to praise and to enjoy -- thank you thank you thank you.  I'm sure I'll be reading it again later and maybe I'll have more to say afterwards. 

Thanks, John.

K,

As always your chapters are wonderfully rich in description and well worth whatever the wait.  I really enjoyed the diary entries and the letters it made you feel more like you were part of the story.  Love the prank on the twins and Moony and Tonks.  H & G and R&H done so that it is believable.  It is always a good day when you update. 

"When next we see our favourite Wizard couple, they will be recovering in more or less recognizable form as mere mammals."

With an insufferably smug Tk'lch and Mm'lau, no doubt.  Oh, yeah, they'll be smug about winning the fight, too.

"When next we see our favourite Wizard couple, they will be recovering in more or less recognizable form as mere mammals."

With an insufferably smug Tk'lch and Mm'lau, no doubt.  Oh, yeah, they'll be smug about winning the fight, too.

HOLY COW!!!!!!!!!!! Awesome! Thanks, but that was a terrible place to leave us. Hope to see more soon.

HOLY COW!!!!!!!!!!! Awesome! Thanks, but that was a terrible place to leave us. Hope to see more soon.

Very well written!!  I've really enjoyed reading this story.  It is too bad that there is only one chapter left.

I would definately not want to be Ron when Ginny wakes up!!

Fantasmic chapter!!! I do so hope things are okay with Harry... and Squee!!! he finally marked her.  I think Ginny should be set lose on Ron... preferably in her dragon form ^_^

Update soon

HermioneGreen

That chapter was simply brilliant!!!!!!!!

I was wondering if you were going to have Harry and Ginny kicking some booty in this.

I have to admit that when I read in the A.N. that there would be no snogging in this I almost gave up on it.  However, I thoroughly enjoyed the courtship that you had Harry and Ginny going through in this chapter.  And if I have to be honest Rowling probably won't have a whole lot of snogging going on anyway.

I think Harry managed to "mark" his mate by the way.

Just curious is this the end or do we have a couple of more chapters to go?

I've heard two things concerning this.  One that you are planning to end this at the end of summer and not continue or I've heard you will end this at the end of summer and begin a sequel which will cover the sixth year. Which is it?  I'm hoping for the second.

Anyway brilliant climax to a brilliant story.  Look forward to more.

Geeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep!

--Surprises of surpises! I loved this chapter, as much or if not abit more than the other 19 of them.

I just can see Gred and Feorge's perplexed look when they begin to sing and dance. In my mind's eye, I just don't see singing, but operatic singing, with the exagerated movements you would see on the stage. "Get me some teaaaaaaaaa!" "You Prat, we're out and you were to  pick some up at the ma-ha-har-ket yesterdayyyyyyyyyy" (Ok, bad phonetic singing)

The  'MB' comment goes nicely with the silver kibble and water bowls from the birthday chapter. But it still surprised me and made me laugh out loud to find the 'translation' of it.

Well now that Harry's Dragon has marked Ginny's dragon--will it be next chapter to see Harry and Ginny's first kiss? Or will it be the one after that?..I smell a lipbalmed- first very close.

Thank you very much for such a awesome time,

Takon