kash2210
Friday 17th October 2008 10:53 | A Wrinkle in Time |
| Nice way to end the chapter. A couple of points however, firstly, Harry's too young to be using magic, which he knows, and secondly, it would take them a ages to get to Godric's Hollow from London! From the books Godric's Hollow is located in the west of England, while London is in the East so that a journey right across the coutry, on a bus to the end of Londo would still leave a VERY long way to go, but hey it's a story and a very entertaining one at that! |
TangoCharlie
Friday 3rd October 2008 07:58 | A Wrinkle in Time |
Well, for all my reservations about Harry and Ginny getting together too quickly, the moment that they finally came clean about their feelings for each other was very, very sweet. Reading this chapter, I could almost feel the pair's relief knowing that for the time being at least they don't have to worry about Voldemort.
I really felt for Harry when he came fce to face with Sirius at the end... There must be some very raw feelings there... |
Prongs739
Friday 22nd August 2008 08:41 | A Wrinkle in Time |
I think they might be caught.
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gymnastgal19
Wednesday 19th March 2008 14:52 | A Wrinkle in Time |
:O:O:O:O:O:O ITS SIRUIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
THATS AWESOME!!!!
omg! I wonder whats going throw harrys head.....
yes! ginny and james are together! woot woot
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Aqua Fountain*
Monday 26th February 2007 02:59 | A Wrinkle in Time |
Wow. Poor Haryy. I wonder what's gonna happen...like will Sirius see the similaritie between Harry and James? And what about Lily's eyes?
At least Sirius was smart enough to realise that Harry and Ginny were not James and Lily by noticing their heights, and looks.
Great chapter
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daniel_r_crazy22
Wednesday 31st May 2006 18:14 | A Wrinkle in Time |
| Well, what a way to end it. Lets hope Sirius isn't to hard on them. |
Kelleypen
Wednesday 23rd February 2005 17:24 | A Wrinkle in Time |
| NIce little declaration of affection. Good use of Sirius. well done. |
irish gal
Sunday 30th January 2005 21:55 | A Wrinkle in Time |
| Well, I'm highly enjoying this so far...I hope there will be an update soon...I like the title too...I've never read it, but is this like the book by Madeline L'Engle at all, or just coincedental title? anyway, its great so far, and I can't wait to see more...I love all your stuff! |
p0tterfan
Tuesday 14th December 2004 00:01 | A Wrinkle in Time |
Cliffy ... noooo ... and you're working on three stories at once ... kudos ..
Aren't the potter's under the charm already? Perhaps thats why no
one knows them in the village? Ok, enough speculation.
Looking forward to the next chapter ... as always :)
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Kokopelli
Monday 13th December 2004 16:39 | A Wrinkle in Time |
wow i was really starting to enjoy this fic then it
happened you went and had h&g never having kissed ,dated,or so much
as hold hands in public to snogging & provessing thier undying
&unending love for each other in less then half a page i swear that
the only writer on this site that can get it right as far as any kind
of plauseable realationship between h&g is kokopelli do yourself a
favor and read his fic T.L.O.S. to
Sounds like a great idea, what do you think, Michael?
JEC
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| Monday 13th December 2004 17:45 | A Wrinkle in Time (Author Response) |
I dunno, John. It's an awfully long story. Maybe you could just give me the reader's digest version.
Girl meets boy.
Boy meets .
Girl and Boy ride on a .
Absolutely no snogging,
I like mine better.
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seamusisevil
Monday 13th December 2004 14:37 | A Wrinkle in Time |
| wow i was really starting to enjoy this fic then it happened you went and had h&g never having kissed ,dated,or so much as hold hands in public to snogging & provessing thier undying &unending love for each other in less then half a page i swear that the only writer on this site that can get it right as far as any kind of plauseable realationship between h&g is kokopelli do yourself a favor and read his fic T.L.O.S. to |
Neely61
Monday 13th December 2004 14:23 | A Wrinkle in Time |
| Excellent story so far. Can't wait to see what you have planned. |
NightBird
Monday 13th December 2004 13:47 | A Wrinkle in Time |
| Hey, I enjoyed the story, and I look forward to updates :D |
lissabee
Sunday 12th December 2004 18:52 | A Wrinkle in Time |
I think I have read this story on another site before where you have at the least one more chapter up. It was nice to re-read it, but I noticed something that seemed a bit like a continuity error that you might want to check on...
You wrote:
They were both silent as they each contemplated what they had talked about on the bus. Harry put his hands in his pockets and looked at a spot two feet ahead of him as they walked. Ginny seemed to be equally pensive, swinging her arms loosely at her sides but she kept a firm grip on his hand
I higlighted in red the parts that didn't make sense to me. Which is it, are Harry's hands in his pockets or is Ginny holding one? I suppose you could mean the unoccupied hand...well anyway
I'd also like to say that like the rest of your stories I like this one, though it seems that Harry came to the realization that he loved Ginny much too quickly...but then, I like a little angst with my fluff, so that is just my personal opinion.
Oh, but I really like the idea of the wishing stone...it was very creative. |
mary-v
Sunday 12th December 2004 17:53 | A Wrinkle in Time |
Brilliant! This story is great so far! Though if your other stories are any clue, I shouldn't expect any less from you! You write tremendously well!
~Maria~ |
Kelleypen
Sunday 12th December 2004 17:13 | A Wrinkle in Time |
| Nice confessing love and first kiss scene. But you always do a bang up job of that. It's why you're a gifted fluffist. |
lizzyrose89
Sunday 12th December 2004 16:19 | A Wrinkle in Time |
Cool story! Nitpick: Sirius has grey eyes. Tiny, I know, so don't worry about it. I've become hooked on 'most all of your stories, now! There's only one I haven't read. Can't wait for more! |
| Sunday 12th December 2004 16:32 | A Wrinkle in Time (Author Response) |
| Yeah... I wrote this over a year ago and wasn't too concerned with details like that at the time. I'll fix it ASAP.
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parakletos
Sunday 12th December 2004 16:03 | A Wrinkle in Time |
| This is going to be interesting isn't it ? I look forward to the next chapter.
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Robert Owen
Sunday 12th December 2004 15:06 | A Wrinkle in Time |
| I'd forgotten about this story until you added the update. I like the entire concept and this should prove an interesting meeting with Sirius. |
| Sunday 12th December 2004 16:27 | A Wrinkle in Time (Author Response) |
| I'd forgotten about it, too! I wrote this over a year ago and am
only just now getting it betaed and posted. Don't look for too
much depth here, it's just a proof of conccept sort of story.
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Pugpal
Sunday 12th December 2004 15:00 | A Wrinkle in Time |
| ooo! Me like! Love that last part. Kind of a "Dun dun dun!" sort of a thing. |
Iris
Sunday 12th December 2004 13:52 | A Wrinkle in Time |
ahhh....evil cliffie (well, not really, but still...)
i'm still in awe of how you can write so many different plotlines at the same time and make them all equally good....
anyway, doesn't Sirius have gray eyes
Look forward to more of ALL your stories
~Iris :rudolph: |
