Pansy’s tongue flicked out, tasting the blood that was creeping out of her nose.

“You hit me,” she said in a shocked, disbelieveing voice.

“I did,” Padma nodded. “You are scum. You are a vile racist, and I hate you and everything you stand for.”

“Okay, sis,” Parvati said, pulling her sister back slowly. “Let’s not lose it here.” “But—” Padma complained. “—I know, sis, I know. I want to smack her around for a bit as well. But we can’t do that; it would make us as bad as her.”

“Semantics,” Padma sniffed. “Treating someone as they deserve does not make us as bad as her.”

She stripped off Harry’s t-shirt and her knickers, and played with the knobs.

This story is fantastic!  I looked it up and it took about a year between chapter eight and chapter nine so if all things go well you will do an update on this sometime this year which would work so well into my HP entertaintment waiting schedule.  For early in 2007 we will have the OOTP movie and in mid 2007 book seven and then probably in early to mid 2008 the HBP movie and then mid to late 2009 the book seven movie.  See, we NEED something "BIG" to happen in the HP world this summer.  The last chapter of this story IMO rates up there as a big event.

This is the best, most well thought out and fun to read story ever.  You have action, adventure, romance, comedy, loyalty, friendship, family, etc.. and it is all told so we get a nice big dose of Harry getting one over on those he has been hurt, wronged or whatever by w/o having him be cruel in his retribution.

I LOVE the mmail.  I love the twins!  I love the way all the characters work in this!  I love H&G! I love this story.  I love it so much!

Thank you so much!  God I love it.

I have never read a story quite like this!! I LOVE IT!!

This i must say is the best story i have ever read. Even more entralling then JK's work. Which is very weird... Since JK owns all of this... lol

Anywayz i have enjoyed what you have written so far and hopefully this review will make up for all of the wonderous chapters i did not review for.

Please update soon!!!!!!

Hi,

I love the idea if you don't know what you can't do, there is no stopping you. And the nicknames in the 'M-mails' are very imaginative. Genius!

please please please update!!! I have read this story loads of times because it is the best story i have read and makes me laugh every time. I don't want to nag too much but maybe just a small note saying how far through this last chapter you are?  

I need more (lol).

Hannah

Dear Tym Boy

Thank you for your personnal andwer!

I apology for the previous review but I felt frustrated after reading the other reviews.

You made a great work and I'm sure that it will continue.

I didn't have the right to write what I've written.

Sorry and take your time.

Mallory

First of all, thank you for this awsome fanfiction. I must admit that it's one of the amazing I've ever read and I've read a lot! It's just equal to "HP and the Power of Emotion" and its sequel "The Curse of the Damned". As I know you like those two fanfiction, you'll want to read "Toward Tomorrow" and "Today the tempest" (hgnetwork.co.uk/siye).

So, to the point. On a less enjoyable note, I have a few things to tell you.

Even if I agree with you on FF.net you can't do what you're doing! As you've written in your own fanfiction through AD caracter, with great power comes great responsabilities!

You've written a great story and you're really gifted in writting! This gift is you power! That why you have great responsabilities ! You started something, you've to finish it to show your readers respect and in order to respect yourself! How could you see in a miror anymore when it's your reader who suffer this sitation and not FF.net or you!

I know it takes time to write and I'm not asking you to post the 10th chapter immediatly because I don't even knom if it's already written! All I'm asking is to inform your reader :

1) If you'll write the 10th chapter and the others (if tere others will be)

2) On with web site you will post it

I think it's the less you can do especialy after a great story like that!

Otherwise, as much as I love your story and you style ans as much as it pains me, I personnaly won't be able to consider you as an author I can trust and will never ever read a story from you. It's not a threat because I know my place and I know that it's not the kind of thing that can touch you. But I fears for you that a lot of readers will think the same and you deserve better than that;

I've not told you all that to be mean, I'm not like this. I've only told you all that to make you think about it.

To conclude, thank you again for your great story and sorry for my english mistakes (I'm french).

Mallory

I have so enjoyed this story and your writing! I laughed so hard a the funny bits. Please give us the final chapter -- I don't care if the story is AU now, we need to see the Dark Tosser go down!

I must say that you have taken JKR's hints at Harry's and Ginny's powers and ran with them! I was certainly hoping that HBP had been something along these lines, but I can only hope that what she has in store for the 7th is a bit more "macho" as your take on Harry and his status as AD's successor. He just has to pull his head out of Peter Parker's backside and remember that is power is love and let Ginny  in on it. I think AD's portrate or the girl herself are going to have to knock some sense into him.

Great writing, Great stoy, PLEASE finish it!!!

You havent really kept your promise and i quote 'I promise that there will not be another massive wait for the final part, because I need to have this story finished before HBP arrives.'

Please please finish this story as it is wicked and loads of readers are waiting x

Please sir may we have more?

Lovley. I really enjoy this story, especially how you brought Sirius back. I'm not normally a big fan of people who do that, but you did it in a down-to-earth sensible way that I admire. Just one thing. How could he apparate when he was stupefied? (At least, I presume the 'red light' Bella sent at him was a stupefy spell).

Thanks for a great read, I'll definitely be back for the last chapter.

<><

Another excellent chapter, despite not particularly like H/G you manage to make this a great read with the (usually) subtle touches of humor.

Though it's a very minor point I think Fred and George should really look into their future as bookmakers - those odds were not exactly suitable for making money - if Snape won they'd need more than 3.5 times as many people betting on Ginny than him to make a profit and if Ginny won they'd need twice as many people betting on Snape than Ginny to make a profit. Given that there were only two sides I'd have thought odds of 3/2 and 2/3 for Snape and Ginny respectively would be a lot more realistic or even 3/2, 1/2 -and even in both cases they would be betting on Ginny winning to make a profit.

I can't believe the story is over!!!!  

What happens next?!?!Who's the spy?!

I LOVE the way you write!! I bow down to the fanfic master!!!!

Please update soon or I will die of anticipation!!!!

Alright, well I already explained that this is my favourite story.

Now I've read this a few times, and I'm really sorry if you did mention it (cos it really annoys me when people ask questions that are really bloody clearly answered in the story)

but what happened to the Sadie Hawkins dance, did it happen? Did Harry and Ginny miss it?

There was something else I wanted to ask too, but I've completely forgotten what it was. Oh well. I'll write again if I remember.

Hope all is well in your world

I just read this story again.

And I love it.

I have decided that without ANY exceptions, this is my absolute favourite fanfic.

Congratulations. authors all over the  world have huge fights over who's gonna be my favourite. And you're it.

Okay delusions of grandure over. Really love this story. I'll be sad to finish the last chapter

I read Naked Quidditch match a long time ago, seeing as I was a GT admin at the time, and was wondering what the hell such an obvious parody/-take was doing on our archives.  It was OOC, completely unrealistic, and more than a little weird.  However, once I'd read it ... I liked it.  Okay, so it wasn't canon, but it wasn't meant to be – it was a clearly defined parody of all that was HP, and it was funny.

So, when someone directed me to a new story that was based on the same concepts as NQM, I jumped at the chance to read it.  And since I always try to leave a complete and in-depth review of all long stories that I read, I tried to gather my thoughts to provide a coherent critique of my reading.  Please be assured that this review is certainly not meant to be a flame, no matter how harsh some of my comments may seem - a flame is a personal attack on the author, whereas a critique is my honest deconstruction of the story.

The first thing that really struck me, overall, about this story is that it really seems to be having somewhat of an identity crisis.  It doesn't really know what it's meant to be.  Certain elements of this story have the air of a parody, the same as NQM played up to very well indeed.  The Mmail format, the elements with Voldemort, Wormtail and the like are all plain spoken nods to the fact that the author of this piece doesn't really expect us to take this as a normal sixth year story - it's meant to be a parody; a subtle mickey-take of all that most serious authors take great pride in making angsty.  However, other aspects suggest that this could actually be considered as something that could well occur within the course of Harry's sixth year.

This duality doesn't help the story along at all, and gives rise to a certain amount of confusion as to just how we are to take this piece of fiction.  A story should be one of two things; a highly serious and realistic account of Harry's sixth year, or an unashamedly silly parody.  The serious story should stick true to the canonical rules, not including Mmail or any other devices, or the "James Bond villain" style approach to Voldemort.  The Parody should state quite clearly that it is a parody, and push the reality right out of the window, with Monty Python humour and Slartibartfast being named as the new DADA teacher.  A wishy-washy mix of the two just doesn't catch my interest, and falls short of succeeding on both counts.

My main thought is that the author really needs to decide which way they are going with this piece of fiction.  Do they want a serious, canonical approach to book 6, or do they wish to create a silly, joke filled alternate universe the likes of which Douglas Adams and the Monty Python crew would be proud of?  You can't do them both.

My next thought, being somewhat of a canon Nazi is that of character development.  While I've read this entire story, I can find absolutely no trace of Harry, Ron, Hermione or Ginny - they seem to be somewhat absent, having been kidnapped by the pod people. Alright, my opinion here could be countered by the claim that "after OotP they grew up," but I really don't think that this stands up in the face of real-world psychology.  People change, yes, but over a period of time ... The Harry we see in OotP, shy, not a clue about women, deeply traumatised, is not going to turn into a happy-go-lucky, student leader, awe-inspiring, all-powerful sex-god overnight.  While I can see how some individuals might want their heroes to remain heroic and their villains to remain suitably villainous, in the real world, things just do not happen this way; there are shades of grey.

The true litmus test of a developing character is this simple question ... "Can I relate this character to the one I saw in the last book?"  I'm afraid that, in this situation, the answer is no.  The difference in attitude of all the major characters since book 5 is huge, and I can't really see much reason for your decision to strengthen the characters in body and mind.  Part of the endearing nature to the people involved here is that they are not perfect.

Harry is not Arnie, nor is he Angel/Angelus ... He is Harry; the same flawed, rash, emotional individual we saw in book 5.  He is not going to heal this quick, nor is he going to give his trust away so quickly.  I really think you need to re-read all the HP books before attempting to define the characters within, as they really are slipping over into the "standard superhero definitions."  Even the minor characters give us hints as to what they are like, but TMW seems to simply pick personalities out of the air based on stereotypes rather than detailed analysis of canon; this I cannot support.

Sirius?  Well, I would start by saying that, If you wish us to believe that the mutt is still alive, then there needs to be a build up to this.  I was incredibly confused until you finally got around to explaining it.  Even so, I think that his resurrection had a lot more to do with artistic "license" than any real appreciation for canon. 

Sirius was killed due to the application of a number of literary rules.  For those who do not understand, the Harry Potter series is a fairy-tale in seven parts, detailing one lost boy's search for a family.  The family of his past has been destroyed, so he needs to seek one in the future ... Sirius' role in the plot was of the "brief glimpse into what might have been."  As with all glimpses into the past, however, this had to die.

If you really intend to break all the literary rules as you don't like what JKR has done to him, then at least take the trouble to truly attend to the story, and not just throw it in as an "oh yes, here's the island where Sirius recovered."  This is a cheap trick and devalues the story.

Looking at the dialogue, I think that the author of this story needs to shadow students in an average secondary school.  I read this dialogue and imagine myself at the age of 16, and I can't imagine any 15/16 year old saying any of the things that Harry does here.  It's too mature.  I maybe can imaging Harry being this confident and this flirty at the age of 18/19, but not at 15/16 - he just isn't emotionally mature enough.

Character-wise, some things are extremely stuffed up.  Snape is far too nice, Dumbledore is less controlling, and the entire staff seem to be living in some sort of Alice in Wonderland fantasy.  If this story were a parody, I'd give it 10 out of 10, but I don't believe that this was the original intent.

I have to admit, I had some doubts about the ego of this author following the A/N after Chapter 8 regarding plagiarism, and the fact that an author wishing to use the Mmail format "didn't like the restrictions [Jeco] put on it - that they follow the genesis of Mmail from chapter four - and ignored them."  I nearly spit my drink through my nose at this, as I couldn't believe that the author had the arrogance to presume that he had the right to regulate what the Mmail format should be portrayed as.  Intellectual Property rights for the Mmail format are vested solely with Anya, with TMW being a derivative work, much in the same way that fanfiction is a derivative work of JKR's creation. The only person who has the right to determine what the Mmail format should be portrayed as is Anya, who was the original creator of this format.  Anyone else is merely copying her, and has no authority to restrict anyone else in what they do with this concept.  It was this, above all else, that left a bad taste in my mouth concerning this offering.

Add to this, the clear joy the author feels in making a 150 page chapter in MS Word. This is not a healthy size for a chapter. As a rather silly comparison, I would say that a chapter should very closely resemble a Cornish Pasty.  The meat and potatoes, which form the action and description (or cheese, onion and potatoes if you're a vege like me,) should be contained within the solid framework of a pastry plot and framework.  The whole package should be something you can pick up and carry anywhere you like, which can be easily scoffed for lunch, and which will fill an appetite until tea-time.  A fanfic chapter should be well-planned and executed.  It should have a point, be well timed, have a beginning, a middle and an end, and leave people feeling that they've got their money's worth.  It should not be a rambling monologue, like chapter 9, which ends whenever the writer finally gets bored, and which prevents true progression.

In summary, I believe that the author here has tried to provide a standard "hero stands against the dark forces and gets the girl he loves" affair, without really considering the personalities and the quirks of those involved.  If Harry does turn into a confident, powerful wizard, which I am sure he will, this will be over a long period of time, with the fruition being at the end of his seventh year at the earliest.  If he is to have a relationship with Ginny, he will have to get over his inherent problems when it comes to dealing with girls.  This is not something that will occur at the clap of a fanfic author's hands. but rather a gradual process that will encompass his growing knowledge.

I really do think that you need to practice writing "imperfect Harry", simply due to the external factors involved.  Harry isn't Superman, he isn't the one you've portrayed here, he's a 16 year old boy who's just looking for a few breaks in life.

well my guess for who the spy is would be penelope

my reason for this is she was present for the discussions about the takeover

when harry told everone his plans at diner also she would have known when percy was going to visit azkaban the first time and no one else at the table would have known that

since you seem to have forgotten that six students from school went to the ministry that night i am courious to know why you havent had neville play a more important part in this story ?

and i do hope that your not  going to make him out to be the spy for (moldy shorts) as j.k.r. has apptly proven that neville is a good guy not only for goingwith harry but for his actions while doing so dont forget neville was going to let the d.e.'s crucio him to keep them from getting the prophecy

and if anyone would know about that kind of pain it would have been neville as its doubtless that he has studied it and knows what it can do to a person

looking foward to your next update of this story on the edge of my seat

Wow. Another great chapter in a wonderful story. I can't wait to see how you wrap everything up in one chapter.

I don't know what I'm looking forward to the most. You still have me on pins & needles waiting for the prank on Sirius. Is Harry's relatives going to live long enough to be pranked by the Weasleys & company?

I could go on for a while, but I'll spare your eyes & my fingers. 

I'll try to wait patiently for the next chapter.

How could you leave us with a cliffhanger.  Wow that was awsome.  You have to hurry and write the next Chapter. That was Brilliant.  It has the perfect amount of Fluffy and action.  I've read it before, but each time theres a new chapter I read it again, and it keeps getting better and better.  Thanks, I really liked it :)

Keep writing, And Plez write me back, I'll be waiting impatently

levotatingT

Well, it took my three full nights but I finally got through this (after most of week to read the first eight chapters). You will never be accused of selling your readers short. As usual, you've got an amazing amount of stuff going on and just about all of it is enjoyable.

In fact, there's so much going on in this chapter it's almost hard to know where to begin. I guess, it's the way you bend the characters to fit your purposes that I probably most impressed with. Harry can be everywhere, Sirius and Snape can be friends, Dumbledore can be in the dark and Harry can have his own team of worshipful clothing designers/interior designers, and there's backstory to explain all of it. It's even believable, with the right amount of willingness to suspend the 'facts' of canon. I can only imagine the amount work you must put in to accomplish that (though, given the length of your chapters I don't have to imagine too hard!).

I still think it's the humor that is most enjoyable, though. Harry and Ginny constantly having to beat back the 'competition' struck me a cute repetitive angle. Fred and George planning to blow themselves and the Death Eaters up and launch a promotional advert at the same time might be a bit morbid but their tongue-and-cheek attitute about it (and the gradiose nature of the plan) was great. And the way you crafted Luna's performance with Pansy just about killed me. Talk about using character's traits perfectly. I've got to feel back for the poor, starving narbuckles though.

I will say that the sappiness of the H/G in this chapter started to get to me (the reader with the canon-Snape-like regard for fluff) a bit. At no point after Chapter Two of this story do Harry or Ginny act like they're 16 and 15 years old and that's obviously true about how they feel about each other too. But with the  public displays of affection, they professors' and the Weasleys' liberal attitude toward their intimacy and the ring scene, it seemed a bit like you would much rather be working with 18- or 20-year-old characters and the options that would open up. But at least your characters had the good sense to shout down the OBHWF comment (even if they were acting it out)!

What I do like is how you're starting to bring the plot together -- getting all the . Weasleys in one place; developing the characters' skills; setting up big things in the report, the butterbeer takeover and the werewolf cure (even if I think that spell is complete bupkus in canon). And I like how you're not making the bad guys completely incompetent. In this chapter Voldemort almost kills Harry and the Death Eaters are on the attack. That bodes well for an exciting finish. And as unique and interesting as the games in this chapter were, I can't wait to see what you do with the big grudge quidditch match.

And lest I forget, I might as well make a guess as to the spy. Marietta the tackling dummy would be the obvious choice as she's already proven her ability to work behind peoples' backs in this story, but I can really see her having access to sensitive information after all her transgressions. Thus, my guess is Sinistra, who is obviously uncomfortable with the new order Harry's established at Hogwarts and who, as a teacher, would be in a better position to know certain things. But I'm probably way off.

Anyway, I could ramble on for another couple hundred words easily enough (you do), but I think I've said enough. Good job on another comprehensive and enjoyable piece of work.

Tim, you've got a great story going here.  I'm hooked.  I am really looking forward to Chapter 10.  The dialog, the interpersonal relations, the pacing, the descriptions... everything about this story draws me in and makes it a real life experience.  Fantastic job.  And, for the length of it, you have very few spelling errors. Your betas/editors have, no doubt caught many errors, but they still missed a few (i.e.It must have been on of the Weasley Wheezes...) in this latest chapter. grin

Anyway keep up the good work.

Grossclout

The Editor From Hell

For some reason I REALLY liked: "Friday morning dawned with the monotonous regularity of something that happened once a week."

Crenth wouldn't be short for Carenath, would it?

Well, I can't tell you how much I love this story. I mean, Super!Harry and everyone else being the same makes me hate a story, but this one works cus it's so funny :D Anyway, it was great to finally get another chapter, I do hope that the next one will come along soon enough :)

Too bad McCaffrey doesn't permit fanfic.  I'd love to read some of that.

Actually; I'm glad Tim isn't writing Pern fic; because I was never able to get into the first book of the Dragonriders; and would be missing a lot of his excellent writing.

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I've loved the story so far.  Even though I usually don't read stories like this.

I love the Harry can do anything nature of the story.

The long chapters are awesome. I think it makes it so much easier to read.

Best of luck!

Yo.  Tim.   I've got it.  It's Slitscythe.  He knew of the plan, and Pancy had already informed him on the Thomas's and Dursleys'. 

Personaly i hope the Dursleys' survive, Harry and company saving the day, and the punishments that they rightly deserve come to play.

What might also be interesting would be Dudley actually managing to save Harry as he was distracted by something.  Another foe perhaps.

Definatly put him in good graces with the Weasleys', Blacks, and Ginny.

Another great chapter.  Look forward to more.  Less then three months.

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YAAY!!!!!

Ahem.  With the preliminary squealing over, I would like to say I am very very pleased that you've updated.  I love this story!  I wonder who the spy is.  You say the clue's in the story, but... hmm.  Interesting.

The duel-y thing between Harry and Dumbledore was great fun to read.  It reminded me a little of the duel between Merlin and Madam Whatsherface in The Sword in the Stone.  Much cool magic-flinging going on there too, but I think I like the friendlier tone!

As always, looking forward to more!  ;-)

Great Another Cliffie!  Sometimes I hate you Tim!

I was amused with your "Crazy" Luna she reminds me of Drucilla from BTVS!

Great story as always Tim, can you forcast how long we have to wait for the next part? 

I was so happy to see this story updated; I've missed it terribly.  I must admit, just  before I read it I'd an email "discussion" with a H/Hr shipper.  We have long-running friendly debates over our ships.  Anyway, she'd asked about you and I gave her SUCH a hard time about looking for one of the wonderful H/G writers out there...then I read your A/N about exploring other ships.  I have to say...I was crushed.  And none to pleased to have to go back to my H/Hr friend and eat crow either.  So, big fat raspberry for bailing on the "right" ship.

Now, the story was wonderful.  It still has the power to make me laugh out loud, and I so love protective Weaslesy.  I love Ron and the boys not only coming around, but aplogizing as well.  I'm so glad he has Ginny to help him get through the emotional effects of having to kill.  As I was reading, even though I was enjoying (and it took me ALL day to get through it - thank you!) I found myself really sad.

I couldn't figure out why but the sadness persisted until I finally realized it's because canon Harry DOESN'T have the support system you've given him.  So, I wish you much luck and creativity in getting this final chapter done.  (And I'm crossing my fingers that you'll find your way back to the H/G ship).

::cat whistles, applause and a riot::

Absolutely magnificent!

Another cliff hanger! ::frustrated noise::

Hope you update soon!

Status: Incomplete at Review (9 Chapters)
Initial Comments:
This is my second review of this story. The original review was at
the end of chapter 8, however this one will include updated points
for chapter 9.
I read a lot of fanfiction. A LOT. In fact, 90% of my spare time is
spent reading.
I'll be the first to say that I really like good Ship stories. My
personal preference (as I am very analytical, and I believe that
it's more likely the final one) in Harry Potter Ships is H/Hr. This
doesn't mean that it's all I read by any means. Of the three stories
that got me into HP fanfics, one has both H/Hr and H/G, another is
H/G, and the other is H/Hr. Even split. I've read good stories that
are H/Tonks, and even Polyamorous stories--I simply like good
stories.
I was intrigued by 'Naked Quidditch Match' and the use of 'Mmail'. I
really liked the layout of the story, and so when I heard that 'This
Means War!' used the same format -partially-, I really wanted to
read it too. So, I've tracked it down and done so. Four times. Once
reading it aloud to my girlfriend. I must say I really like this
story, and I cannot wait to see the completion. Now I have to read
it aloud again, so my girlfriend can catch up. (She doesn't like to
sit and read. She likes to listen.)

Story / Creativity - 9.5/10 [was 9/10 - Half Point Increase]
[ * * * * * * * * * / ]
The storyline is very good and believable. I could really see
something like this happening, honestly. For a humor based fic, you
must look past all the seriousness that has come out of the HP
Canon. I don't mean forget it, but look past it and find the places
to put jokes. Bringing in the 'pranking' bloodline within Harry was
a very believable way to do this. I can also see Ginny being able to
start this, so the creativity and story is well based, and it is
something I really haven't seen on this level. I have seen somewhat
similar stories, but this one has the unique qualities, adding
appropriate new twists, and integrating one idea with others quite
well. Not only that, but with the new plot points in chapter 9, much
is coming together, showing a much more thought out story than was
originally hinted at. Along with discussion on three or four major
points in the discussion groups around this story, there are things
to come that are hidden deep and have been hinted at since the
middle chapters. Much creativity was used to build a deep storyline.

Characterization / Use of Source - 8/10 [was 8/10 - No Change]
[ * * * * * * * * x x ]
This one is a little more hurt. Yes, I believe the characters--
especially Harry and Hermione, are out-of-character. I DO believe,
however, that it is done in a believable way. Harry is shocked into
a personality change, and Hermione growing up a little being dragged
along works well. Many many of the original Canon elements are
mentioned and flow in smoothly, although Sirius's survival has just
a bit of shaky foundation. Still believable, so it doesn't hurt the
score much at all. Well portrayed of all characters, and the changed
personalities are even kept very close. I find Fred and George to be
portrayed almost perfectly, and Percy to be portrayed exactly right.
I can really see the Weasley boys doing this. I really can. I don't
see much change in this score possible, because that's how this
story has been written--it's the basis that scores here, not the end
result.

Grammar / Spelling - 10/10 [was 10/10 - No Change]
[ * * * * * * * * * * ]
Spelling is excellent. Grammar is excellent as well. I have noticed
one or two minor--and I do mean minor--grammatical mistakes, but
these would not be noticeable to an uncritical eye. Besides,
everyone has their own unique writing style, and even I use
spellchecking software. I know that no human can catch every
mistake, and computers are far from perfect at finding them as well.
I am very impressed with the extensive Beta system used for this
story.

Quality / Length - 10/10 [was 10/10 - No Change]
[ * * * * * * * * * * ]
Story is a very nice length. Currently, even though it is
incomplete, it is as long as the novels. 167K words, plus whatever
else is in the next chapters, making it a very long epic story.
(Order of the Phoenix, in comparison, is 264,000 words, and Goblet
of Fire is 195K. One more chapter, and this will be just as long as
the canon.) Writing quality is very good, effectively on par with
the original books, while adding in the unique traits of fanfiction.
Excellent work.

Theme / Presentation - 10/10 [was 10/10 - No Change]
[ * * * * * * * * * * ]
The story's theme is that of humor, with an underlining focused
plot. Good-natured humor surrounded by the continuing life of
someone 'destined' to be great, and who is proving that he is
reaching the point that is has become what he was destined to be.
This is held wonderfully all the way through the story. Serious
scenes pop up along the way, as one would have to have in a HP
fanfic of any length, but these are surrounded by light-natured
scenes constantly. Many little cliffhangers, scenes shifting to keep
you thinking until you return to find out what happened, keep you
reading onward. Wonderful transitions, many timed to break scenes,
while others keep going until they are resolved. Molded nicely all
around from start to finish.

Fic Rating - Average of the Above Scores
47.5/50 -> 95/100 -> 95%
Modifier: Incomplete (Automatic): -05%
Rating at Current: 90%
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Nine Stars out of Ten

Advice to Author:
Keep listening to the discussion comments. I really think they
improved the quality of the story in the last chapter, however with
the scores the story deserved and earned as they were, a grade
really cannot show the increase being based in a system like this.
Keep writing and looking for the tiny improvements you can add--they
really do make a story much more.

Final Comments:
Definatly in my list of the "Best of the Best" in Harry Potter
Fanfiction. I have been waiting for this updated, and I must say I
wasn't dissapointed. Chapter 8 ended on a major cliffhanger, and I'm
glad this one didn't do the same. It's much easier to enjoy what's
been written if you're not highly annoyed and desperatly waiting for
the next part. Additions such as the Luna and Pansy incident, and
the 'SPAM' email (that originated in the discussion groups and made
it's way into the story) truly give it those moments where you have
to stop reading to catch your breath after laughing. This is my favorite story in the H/G Ship category, and most likely will remain so.

I know many of the sections above didn't change much, if any, from
the previous review. The reasoning behind that is that it is the
same story--simply with a little more added to it, therefore, the
same review should, for the most part, be valid still.

Final words? Keep it up, and bring on the next part soon.

--RKumono
The Kumori Index
Best of Fanfiction - Indexing and Reviews

wow, this story is so good that if i were sane i wouldn't be able to handle it!

i can't wait for more!

Wel, it took me a while, but I finally managed to read it all (at least once). I might contact you through your yahoo group for a Q or two when I finally go around to do the translation. Great chapter, as always Tim. Kudos!

And about that cliffie... *groans!* I can hear the readers at FanAutores..... (Not again!) *sighs*

Hi Tim!

I had to come online ....couldn't stay away from TMW!

Okay,first of all....you do realize that this one chapter is roughly the length of and entire multi-chaptered fic,right?

lol

Wonderful!

Thank you for saying this ....

"I promise that there will not be another massive wait for the final part, because I need to have this story finished before HBP arrives."Finally!

But I will be one sad stalker when TMW! get done...afterall,it is the reason I started stalking in the first place!

Good job,sweetie!

Can't wait for the next chapter...It took me two and a half hours to finish this....umm....around five the next time?*me very greedy*

Ron had a look on his face that was half a laugh, half complete relief, and half regret.  “You two really need to get away,” he mumbled.
AND
“Actually I told Harry to put Ginny to bed,” Molly corrected. 

Okay, I think that makes EVERYONE in favor of them being together in every sense of the word.  You just enjoy torturing them, don't you? ;)

Too bad McCaffrey doesn't permit fanfic.  I'd love to read some of that.

Looking forward to the next one.

THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU it is wonderful to resume reading this story when i got my muggle e-mail and saw you'd updated it my happy screech frightened my mate and two cats in the other room.  I love the bashing of Pansy and the obliteration of the fic stereotypes and cleches please more as soon as you are able

Most entertaining as always.  I'm not so convined that Ginny needs to go through all the effort the other girls put into making her look good though - bearing in mind how easy it was for Lavender and Parvati to 'break' Harry just by getting him to imagine Ginny in the short skirt (from the earlier chapter), I would have thought he'd be happier with her 'au naturel', but hey...

I'm looking forward to you tying all the loose ends together, and seeing how they help Harry defeat He-whose-name-must-be-hyphenated.

My guess for the spy is Professor Sinistra.  She's jealous of the freedon Harry gets.

After such a long time I was worried that I wouldn’t like this. And to begin with I didn’t. I had a problem with Super!Harry, he was just too super. I think the gap meant that I wasn’t in the flow of things and it took me time to adjust to the world I was in. But as the chapter went on I found myself drawn in and at the end I was frustrated that there wasn’t more – some people are never satisfied are they?

Good to see a few nods to films and TV - George P Wildebeast included. Mind you with George P W and Molly it began to feel like the whole of Dudley was in attendance *grin* As ever you are a bit transatlantic in your phrases, but that is pretty small beer. I liked the Animagus scenes the best and would hope to see more.  

As I’ve said, Hannah had a big smile on her face this morning but there may be too many hormones in this chapter for her.

Thanks Tim.

WOW WOW WOW that was most definately worth the wait. I think it is safe to say we cannot wait for part ten. Well done

This is a wonderful chapter - hilarious!!!  My favorite line -->

“is the most fun I’ve had since Albus and I went on a Mediterranean Cruise with the Mother of All Saints Nunnery.”

“One day,” Harry said slowly, “we are going to sit down, and you are going to tell me all your stories.”

Please tell me that you will explore this further. 

As usual I loved this.  I particularly like the way Harry is taking charge and boosting everyone else in the process. 

Also, thank you for letting them have one wonderful, disaster free day. 

But my favorite part might have been the author's not at the end, saying it won't be too long before the final chapter .

Great chapter, as always.

After 3 plus something hours of continually interrumted reading (or was it 5?) what can I say??

great

lookinf forward to translating it to Good Old Castillian.

Bea

Absolutly BRILLIANT!!!!! That was AWESOME!! You are a great writer. Please excuse me as I go and try to get my cat to stop looking at me funny as I am remembering a few parts that made me laugh! You have a great story going and I will be impatantly waiting on the edge of my computer chair for the next chapter! Great job! (I love this emoticon!)

Oh Tim, that was wonderful!

I'm not certain yet who the spy is; I raced through it, so now I'll have to read it again to try to figure out.  I liked your nod to OBHWF.

I also liked "Harry's Girls" and the various projects they undertook.

I suspect that I'll leave a more detailed review at your group, after I read it again, but in the mean time, wonderful stuff!

In a word; Outstanding!   I was actually worried about what kind of cliffhanger you were gonna be leaving us with, and was actually relieved it wasn't that bad, this time!  Of course, after the last one you gave us; dental surgery without anesthesia isn't that bad! *GRIN*

Red

Tim - As usual, Excellent chapter, I bloody LOVED it!!!!!! And it was well worth waiting for.  Poor Harry & Ginny, I think they might explode from sexual frustration before too much longer.  The whole teasing going on at the picnic was just downright evil.

And did you have to leave that cliffie there?  Of course, you did! J 

And, I’m still not sure I know why you threw the spam mmail in there, although it was very funny.  Did I miss the email from the yahoo group that explained the reasoning behind it?  Can’t wait to see who LV’s new spy at Hogwarts is…did I tell you that cliff-hanger was evil (although almost predictable by not having Harry dress in his uniform that day, just in case something happened.  I kept expecting the DM’s to attack at the picnic, but I’m glad you let them have their day of fun (and the way Harry beat DD was just priceless!)

Loved, loved, loved it, and I hope you finish it off before HBP comes out (I know you’re not working on anything else at the moment, so it shouldn’t be a problem, right?!? J ) Just kidding, I loved the chapter and your sense of humor definitely hasn’t dulled any in the months since you’ve updated.

Cheers,

Rachael

I am so glad that there will not be a massive wait like there was for this one.

That being said, THIS IS AWESOME!!!!! I swear no one writes fanfiction like you do. When I was just a wee person, and stumbling into my obsession of Harry Potter yours was the first story I had read. So its your fault that I am hooked on fanfiction. Well done. I love your story!

~thehopefulGinnyPotter