daniel_r_crazy22
Wednesday 2nd August 2006 20:28 | There and Back Again Lane |
| A good bit of background info there. Good. It helped a lot. Very good so far. |
PHsname
Tuesday 9th August 2005 23:50 | There and Back Again Lane |
some of the narration was a bit hard to follow...out of curiosity, did u have a beta?
otherwise, it's a great story that you're unfolding...
now...time to move on to chapter 3...:P |
Kinsfire
Saturday 28th May 2005 10:52 | There and Back Again Lane |
Okay - reread it - I think that a minor rewrite of the "George died
next to Fred" line. It was what caught me to write that. I
showed that section to my wife and she agrees that the line could just
as easily be read as "The twins died ..."
Just a nitpick. Ignore or delete the previous one, if you want. (Still a good story, though. :) )
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| Saturday 28th May 2005 13:15 | There and Back Again Lane (Author Response) |
Thanks for your kind words and I apologise for the confusion I have caused.
George did die next to Fred, just that Fred didn't die. So, of the Weasleys there are still:
1) Percy
2) Fred
3) Ron
4) Ginny
It's a valid concern you mentioned, especially as I've the bad tendency to make such mistakes, but I think here I had intended it either as a misdirection or for brevity's sake (since Fred was revealed to have survived). Honestly, I can't remember as it's been almost a year since I wrote that chapter! :) |
Kinsfire
Saturday 28th May 2005 10:47 | There and Back Again Lane |
Little bitty oopsie in this chapter. You refer to four Weasleys surviving if you include the git in Swansea.
1 Molly (dead)
2 Arthur (dead)
3 Bill (dead)
4 Charlie (dead)
5 Percy
6 Fred (dead)
7 George (dead)
8 Ron
9 Ginny
Where's the fourth Weasley? (As I said, just a minor oopsie - I
have a head for math, so when it twigged me as being wrong, I worked it
through to verify.) Good story so far, though.
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MrRobertsIII
Friday 27th May 2005 09:01 | There and Back Again Lane |
| Excellent chapter! I take back what I said about your introducing Ginny too early. |
| Friday 27th May 2005 10:44 | There and Back Again Lane (Author Response) |
| Thank you. More about Harry and Ginny's respective pasts are explained later on in the story, though it might take a while to get there! |
rand_wot
Tuesday 3rd May 2005 18:13 | There and Back Again Lane |
| this is good. Are you going to explain more of the events that led up to the obliviation or is that up to our imagination. The mystery hooks me but I am dying to know |
| Wednesday 4th May 2005 02:49 | There and Back Again Lane (Author Response) |
Thank you for your kind words.
At present, there are nineteen chapters written, with chapters three and nineteen currently under revision. I hope to be able to present chapter three to my beta sometime soon. The tale of Harry's obliviation is interspersed between the chapters, but an in-depth discussion of it begins in chapter seven.
Thanks again! |
dophingirl79
Sunday 1st May 2005 17:31 | There and Back Again Lane |
| I'm intrested to see where this story leads to . keep the updates comming. |
| Wednesday 4th May 2005 02:47 | There and Back Again Lane (Author Response) |
| Thank you |
p0tterfan
Thursday 28th April 2005 20:11 | There and Back Again Lane |
Good start to the story. So he didn't really become a squib, they
just obliviated him? As JKR said ... you can not really become
magical or lose your magic.
Good story ... eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
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| Friday 29th April 2005 12:53 | There and Back Again Lane (Author Response) |
| Thank you! |
Lulabelle
Thursday 28th April 2005 18:47 | There and Back Again Lane |
| This is a great beginning! Definitely a new twist on things that I haven't read before. I hope you're an author who updates frequently because I don't think I can wait that long for the next chapter! Update soon please! |
| Friday 29th April 2005 12:52 | There and Back Again Lane (Author Response) |
| I will try to be swift in my updates and thank you very much for your kind review! |
angelmorph
Thursday 28th April 2005 17:59 | There and Back Again Lane |
| Interesting start. I look foward to seeing more. |
| Friday 29th April 2005 12:52 | There and Back Again Lane (Author Response) |
| Thanks! |
juliet
Thursday 28th April 2005 17:04 | There and Back Again Lane |
What a great story. Intriguing, emotional, even a touch of fluff....it has it all.
Look forward to the next chapter.
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| Friday 29th April 2005 12:51 | There and Back Again Lane (Author Response) |
| Thank you! |
dancinginmagic
Thursday 28th April 2005 12:35 | There and Back Again Lane |
Wow... that's a freaky thought. Good story, though; waiting for more! |
| Friday 29th April 2005 12:51 | There and Back Again Lane (Author Response) |
| Thank you! |
Hank
Thursday 28th April 2005 08:15 | There and Back Again Lane |
| Interesting story and very nicely written. I like this. You've done a marvelous job with the backstory and everything flows well. More please! |
| Thursday 28th April 2005 09:57 | There and Back Again Lane (Author Response) |
| Thank you! |
