gymnastgal19
Saturday 20th October 2007 19:19 | Black Shadows |
| liked it |
Ari
Wednesday 25th January 2006 16:24 | Black Shadows |
| Great story, LP. Hope you keep writing. I'm off to read the others now... |
hewithnoname
Thursday 20th October 2005 16:03 | Black Shadows |
Hi ya, just read your fic. Nice one, got anymore? I liked the way he described Peter, about not sticking up for his friends. Hit that one right on the mark,.well written, to the point.
All the best. |
wickedwillowtree
Monday 25th July 2005 18:05 | Black Shadows |
| aw. it was cute. it was a look into the mind of sirius and how he saw everyone around him. ;-) i love stating the obvious! ~ willow |
Sassenach
Thursday 21st July 2005 19:56 | Black Shadows |
| Hey girl. I liked this little one-shot. It shows a lot of insight into
Sirius's thoughts. It's very true to his character and you do it
justice. Nice job.
|
hewithnoname
Thursday 21st July 2005 16:44 | Black Shadows |
just read your fic. It was good, not many people have done this type of fic, but I'd say you did a good job on it. you should follow it up with the other ones Janes and Remus. Possibly Peter as well.
Hope It goes well with Voldie and the knicker hitting.
Darren (Voldie's nephew) |
Fuzzy
Sunday 8th May 2005 16:52 | Black Shadows |
| Great job! I hope you have more great work for me to read. |
Eressea
Monday 2nd May 2005 19:45 | Black Shadows |
| Your writing style is absolutely excellent. The way you structure your sentences and everything. Although I feel that the plot should say more new things, instead of what we already know from the books. Like show a new story with the same characters or a different outtake of an old scene. That is not to say that you don't do this at all. Now that I'm rereading it, I'm seeing all sorts of new things. Especially in paragraphs three and five. I think that this is just a different format from what I'm used to and it took me by surprise. It's Sirius' thoughts rather than all action and some thoughts. I still feel as if there should be more new stuff, but I'm realizing that it may be just me and that I'm being overly critical, especially since I'm no professional. Anyway, other than the plot, your writing seems excellent. You're very good at conveying his emotions. I hope you'll write more soon. |
takon65
Monday 2nd May 2005 18:10 | Black Shadows |
Awe Bummer!
As I scrolled back up and saw that this work was completed. I was hoping for a W.I.P.. I really enjoyed your views on MPPW and the Blacks in general.
With hopes from me and your other fans, may Sirius whisper in your ear again soon. I would love to see a sequel.
Keep up the great work,
Sam |
| Monday 2nd May 2005 18:56 | Black Shadows (Author Response) |
Glad you liked it, there may be a sequel of some sort or something. Depends on my Spanish grade, whether I can zone out again. It also depends on whether the plot bunnies can find me again. This is to everyone who has reviewed so far, as I just figured out how to do an author response thingy. My computer doesn't like me very much at the moment. I'm about to kill my firewalls, they won't let me do anything. |
Arnel
Monday 2nd May 2005 07:43 | Black Shadows |
That's it? You've got to write more! I love stories that get into people's heads and show how they're thinking. You've done a really nice job of presenting your story and I hope that there's more to it than just this first chapter. Hope you post again soon. |
Muggle Witch
Monday 2nd May 2005 07:03 | Black Shadows |
| That was so good, and very well written. Well done!! |
Black_White_And_Grey
Monday 2nd May 2005 00:47 | Black Shadows |
| I loved it. It is extremely canon, and it really sounds as if it's coming from Sirius- 'specially when he's speaking of his family (like he wants to). It's really nice, I love your (or rather, his) descriptions of everything. It just seems so... true to form. Again I say, I love it. :) ;) :D |
