Aqua Fountain*
Wednesday 4th April 2007 01:34 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
Brilliant story
The only flaw I find in this is that I dont think it really fits into HBP:
Dumbledore's reaction to Snape about to kill him was too convinsing. He probably would have stood tall - or not, seeing as the state he was in- , said goodbye, and then died. He wouldnt have acted like he did.
Otherwise, this is really good. What do you mean by:"So, we're working with Potter, then?" asked Draco, as soon as the professor removed the body-bind from him.
"For now, Draco. For now..."
though? Is Snivellus going to betray Harry? I hope you write a sequal or something.
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lacyrachil
Wednesday 6th December 2006 08:28 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| I really enjoy the way you write. I believe something similar to this will appear in the 7th book. |
| Wednesday 6th December 2006 10:58 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thank you, that's very kind. |
rhyno
Thursday 4th May 2006 12:10 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| You are going to write more chapters or at least a follow-up, right. This is too good a set up to just let it pass by. |
| Thursday 4th May 2006 13:39 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
I'm afraid not, I never intended to answer any questions with with this fic, and fully intended to have it ask even more!
Added to that I actually have no idea what those answers may be!
However I am glad you enjoyed it! And I'm honoured to have your first review. |
Stephanie
Saturday 8th April 2006 10:15 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| This was really good, very interesting . Too bad it's a one shot. When I can find the time, I'll read some more of your work. It must be enjoyable, even if it's just a tiny fraction as good as this was . |
| Saturday 22nd April 2006 10:53 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. |
daisymom
Friday 7th April 2006 19:44 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| I liked this story. It brought many thoughts that I had after HBP, and I think that's probably what happened between Dumbledore and Snape, but only time will tell if we're right. |
| Saturday 8th April 2006 00:52 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. |
jeanne
Wednesday 5th April 2006 14:12 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| Amazing how points of view can be so different from person to person.I most certainly would not have gone that route at all. Well written, though,as it had me extremely angry at Snape. |
| Saturday 8th April 2006 00:51 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. |
IHateSnakes
Tuesday 4th April 2006 23:38 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| Very good story, well written. I've seen a couple stories floating around with this second vow theory; if SS is trult not evil it may be the only way to explain his actions. S. |
| Saturday 8th April 2006 00:51 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. |
cckeimig
Tuesday 4th April 2006 21:17 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| Very nice! I really like how you handled this situation. Too bad you don't intend to update! |
| Saturday 8th April 2006 00:50 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. |
Bagelz
Monday 3rd April 2006 17:59 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| What a very beleivable concept. I've considered that JK would use your scenario in the next book, but I knew Harry wouldn't just forgive and forget ... he broods way too long and too much for that, but the way you did it here was excellent! Bringing Draco in this way was also very interesting ... can't wait to see where you take this one! B |
| Tuesday 4th April 2006 03:16 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
Well to be honest, Harry has neither forgiven, nor forgotten what Snape did, however he does realiase Snape may have his uses - as much as that disgusts him, he realises he doesn't have much choice.
Glad you enjoyed it though! |
aschowin
Monday 3rd April 2006 11:55 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| Good job. The way you wrote Snape is entirely believable; he's not the bad guy, but that doesn't make him a good guy either. He fits very well into that grey area. I appreciate the way that Harry cleaned his mind as well, very cool. |
| Tuesday 4th April 2006 03:18 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks, glad you enjoyed it, and who else but Ginny to make him feel better? |
XXXmister-E werepony unit
Tuesday 20th September 2005 09:13 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| not bad.a little odd,but i liked it!
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| Tuesday 20th September 2005 09:20 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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dophingirl79
Tuesday 13th September 2005 11:37 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| really good, but I wish you would add more to it though! |
| Tuesday 20th September 2005 09:20 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks glad you liked it, but unfortunatly I just don't have the ideas to go for a full chaptered fic on this one.
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Ladybug
Saturday 10th September 2005 04:02 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
Oh wow - this is a very believable follow on from the end of HBP and also is such a good rendition of the characters - I think you have them all portrayed perfectly, even Dumbledore through his letter. I can see why people are begging you for more (though I won't), because this is a rich story, not a simple narrative of one event, but like one episode from a complex tale, eg ..
"For now, Draco. For now..."
That's such a clever sentence! Well done, I really enjoyed this. |
| Sunday 11th September 2005 03:39 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. And I can't tell you how pleased I am
that you find the characters portrayed correctly; it's the first time
I've tried both Dumbledore and Snape, and they are hard people to get
right - at least I find so - so thank-you.
"For now, Draco. For now..."
That's such a clever sentence! Well done, I really enjoyed this.
Well, yeah I wanted to leave some question about Snape's true motives.
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Shadow Hider
Wednesday 7th September 2005 13:17 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| ^_^ this is good |
| Wednesday 7th September 2005 13:28 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks
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Hoss
Wednesday 7th September 2005 10:56 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| Bummer your not going to keep on with story, I think most of your readers would love to see more. thanks |
| Wednesday 7th September 2005 11:10 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks for your review, unfortunatly I have niether the time, nor the
plot to go for a full seventh year story, you will see other one-shot
stories from me though and of course the concusion of I Will be Waiting.
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sonicdale
Tuesday 6th September 2005 11:02 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
Working with the devil to dake down an even worse menace.
yeah, I can see that as what Harry will maybe have to do.
Loved the fact that Snape was his sneering, jolly self.
Kudos for making Draco shut up.
Good work. |
| Wednesday 7th September 2005 06:27 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks, glad you enjoyed it, I can't believe that Snape doesn't yet
have a part to play in the final book, and Harry having to speak to
him/work with him at some point, I think is a distinct possibility.
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Cherry
Tuesday 6th September 2005 00:12 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| Next one next one! |
| Wednesday 7th September 2005 06:04 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks for the review. I'm sorry, but I won't be adding to this. As it
says in my A/N, this was just a one shot of something that I think
could occur in book 7. Thanks again for reviewing! Glad you liked my
story.
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snuffles007
Monday 5th September 2005 22:04 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
| This is a great beginning. I can't wait for more. |
| Wednesday 7th September 2005 06:03 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks for the review. I'm sorry, but I won't be adding to this. As it
says in my A/N, this was just a one shot of something that I think
could occur in book 7. Thanks again for reviewing! Glad you liked my
story. |
JenMusic
Monday 5th September 2005 19:10 | The Second Unbreakable Vow |
This is really good, Bart. You have brought up many of the issues with Snape that I had after finishing HBP. And, I love that it's not resolved - we just have to wait it out.
Favorite part, hands down, was Snape's line:
"Why, Potter, have you never made a spur-of-the-moment decision that resulted in someone you loved dying?"
Interesting to think that this may be the connection that Snape and Harry end up having.
Thanks for sharing this! |
| Wednesday 7th September 2005 06:29 | The Second Unbreakable Vow (Author Response) |
| Thanks for your review, I'm glad you like that line it was the first bit of the story I wrote! Thanks again.
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