gymnastgal19
Tuesday 30th September 2008 21:44 | Any Chance of Us |
nice story
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pyromain
Sunday 2nd September 2007 15:46 | Any Chance of Us |
| Is there a sequel? I really loved it so far, will be looking at what else you wrote right now. |
Ainsley
Monday 2nd January 2006 23:25 | Any Chance of Us |
| I don't know what everyone was running from, if Harry had defeated Voldemort.
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SillyGillie
Sunday 9th October 2005 14:29 | Any Chance of Us |
| Very adorable! I loved it! Brilliant. |
Delani
Sunday 18th September 2005 20:57 | Any Chance of Us |
Wow. I tell ya, wow. This is looking to be something I know I'll look forward to.
"Harry interrupted, and broke off in a fit of very manly giggles. "
Manly giggles. *snort* Bout died laughing reading some of this... I really am excited.
Delani |
Wolf's Scream
Saturday 17th September 2005 16:29 | Any Chance of Us |
Hmm.... this was ... odd. The story is well-written, but it came
across (to me) as excerpt deprived of its context -- rather like when
the local "classical" music radio station plays an isolated movement
(or less!) of a symphonic work: I find either rather on the
frustrating side. (I suppose it's less of a concern if it's a
familiar work, but imagine someone who had never heard Beethoven's 9th
Symphony just hearing the 3rd movement of same, and gaining his whole
understanding of the work from that excerpt. I expect he'd rather
wonder what all the fuss was about.)
In the present case, Harry's been apparently isolated (of his own
choice, it seems) from Hermione & the Weasleys; unless I overlooked
it, we never really do find out why he chose to do that: six
years is a rather long time. We read that Ginny was practically
living as a Muggle for some time, but again, unless I missed it, we
aren't given much in the way of background to understand why.
And the end reminds me rather forcibly of the poem that Humpty Dumpty
repeats to Alice, and which "was written entirely for [her] amusement;"
it begins:
In winter, when the fields are white
I sing this song for your delight --
(This is in the chapter of _Through the Looking-Glass_ entitled "Humpty
Dumpty," and is near the end of that chapter, just after she has asked
him about some of the more obscure terminology in "Jabberwocky.")
If you read the poem, I think you'll understand why I likened its end to that of your story. :-)
Now, if you'd care to fill in some of the missing pieces with as much
skill as you showed in writing this, that would be grand! :-)
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Fuzzy
Saturday 17th September 2005 09:24 | Any Chance of Us |
Wow! You have to come out with more soon! This story rocks! |
hpiknut
Friday 16th September 2005 18:03 | Any Chance of Us |
| This was very good. I felt so bad for Harry being so mixed up. It' was so sweet that Hermione & Ron were waiting for him to stay put so they could get married. I hope you are planning a follow-up story. |
TigerLily8186
Friday 16th September 2005 17:01 | Any Chance of Us |
| Oh poor Harry. You have him so confused. It made me sad. This was quite lovely. I love the end where you leave us to decide. |
juliet
Friday 16th September 2005 16:54 | Any Chance of Us |
| More please!
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Buttamellow
Friday 16th September 2005 16:52 | Any Chance of Us |
Hello m'dear,
It's your friendly Southern
Version here to give you a little love. As you know, I love the
story. It turned out so well. *grins* I love how you
took a simple song that I
gave you and turned it into this. It's awesome. (Can't wait
until the sequel either. Oops, I probably wasn't supposed to say
that. *winks*)
Anyways, I don't care- I think it's perfect the way it is. I love
the cliffie/drop off. It leaves much to the imagination.
And- you know that I absolutely adore Drunk!Harry in this.
Fabulous job, darlin!
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PHsname
Friday 16th September 2005 15:17 | Any Chance of Us |
very nice story, well-written, and good flow.
it'd be fun to see where this could go if u kept it going, like some of the other reviewers said.
once again, well done. :D |
Ichtys
Friday 16th September 2005 15:05 | Any Chance of Us |
great story.
However I wonder if some of it is missing. The word counts differ quite a lot, depending where you read it. The front page says 16,453; but in the top of the story it says 7,847. If the last part of the story is missing, then I look forward to the rest. (I enjoyed the story as it is, don't misunderstand me, but it is a rather sudden end to a great story) |
catfood
Friday 16th September 2005 14:45 | Any Chance of Us |
| It's a grand story: but it feels unfinished, even for a one-shot.
But it flows nicely and the unsaid background details are such that
they don't feel like there are unweildy gaps: it all fits nicely.
If only it didn't end so abruptly...
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happydog
Friday 16th September 2005 14:40 | Any Chance of Us |
Good story. Like Bucktavius I think you could easily keep going.
However, it's also good as a one shot. Keep writing others.
Happydog.
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Bucktavius
Friday 16th September 2005 13:38 | Any Chance of Us |
| an excellent story, but c'mon you can't leave it like this! this is a superb start to something! why was he travelling? what happened at the battle? what the heck are Ron and Hermoine upto? still it is excellent |
ridgeback77
Friday 16th September 2005 13:26 | Any Chance of Us |
| Good work. I enjoyed it.
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