GryffindorDragon
Tuesday 30th January 2007 10:30 | Harry Potter and the Secret Horcrux |
Severus got off easy. Why would Voldemort not punish him?
I like how you have Bella getting in Snape's face, so to speak.
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cckeimig
Friday 26th January 2007 10:51 | Harry Potter and the Secret Horcrux |
| Oooh, I like it. We all love to hate Snape, but this is so very plausible...the idea that Dumbledore knew and was ready to die for things to keep going and all that. I'm off to read more! |
sunnychristian
Thursday 25th January 2007 14:15 | Harry Potter and the Secret Horcrux |
| This sounds oddly like the first chapter of my story, haha. I hate that. But it's very well done and the conversation is very believable! Good job! Best wishes, Sunny http://www.sunnychristian.com |
HermioneWeasley1972
Thursday 4th January 2007 23:24 | Harry Potter and the Secret Horcrux |
| Wow this was a great beginning. I can't wait to read more. |
daniel_r_crazy22
Tuesday 11th July 2006 19:54 | Harry Potter and the Secret Horcrux |
| Okay. That was a very good start. Did they go to Number 12? |
ImmortalPhoenix
Friday 14th April 2006 18:07 | Harry Potter and the Secret Horcrux |
Loved this chapter. You are a really talented writer and I hope to read a lot more from you! So far it has been a great story.
Kortnee |
Rocky235
Tuesday 7th February 2006 11:14 | Harry Potter and the Secret Horcrux |
| Good grammar and nice dialog make me a happy reader. A reformed Snape sticks in my craw though. |
siobh007
Monday 16th January 2006 14:09 | Harry Potter and the Secret Horcrux |
| great start ... you make it sound that snape isn't such a git, but
stilll that he is one ...( i'm not sure you can make out what I'm
saying ... sorry) GReat
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Ladybug
Sunday 15th January 2006 00:03 | Harry Potter and the Secret Horcrux |
Wonderful start! This is a very believable and seamless follow on from HBP. There are some great lines here, especially
"... You have made your allegiances perfectly clear.” “Does that mean yours are not?”
This reminds me of the opening chapters of all the books when something is set up that will come back in a big way at the end.
Great work! Right, now I will eagerly read on... |
