Wooster
Thursday 29th June 2006 11:21 | Summer Attack |
| Oh wow...this is exciting...and I loved how Dudley changed a bit. Very interesting! |
Concealed
Saturday 6th May 2006 15:31 | Summer Attack |
| Oooh! I love it so far! Very original! |
cckeimig
Sunday 12th March 2006 20:24 | Summer Attack |
| This is really good so far. I'm off to read more!!! |
jessy
Friday 10th March 2006 22:24 | Summer Attack |
this was brilliant!!!!!
it nearly made me CRY
keep it up
n
keep in touch!!! |
hedwig_edwiges
Saturday 4th February 2006 03:43 | Summer Attack |
| Nice start! When we will have more to devour? |
| Saturday 4th February 2006 12:55 | Summer Attack (Author Response) |
| The next chapter is in the works. This story, and the climax of it, has changed significantly since I started it so while it started out as a one shot, then changed to two chapters, I'm now considering making a third chapter. If that happens then hopefully the second will be out soon. My beta has the first draft of what may be the second chapter. This is longer than I wanted to take to update but hopefully there will be more soon. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm looking forward to what you all think of what I've done next. |
critmo
Friday 13th January 2006 01:41 | Summer Attack |
| Off for a good start. However, where were Ron and Hermione? Weren't they supposed to stay with Harry? |
| Friday 13th January 2006 13:41 | Summer Attack (Author Response) |
| I'll explain where they were in the next chapter. I wrote this pre-HBP
which is honestly why they aren't there. Good catch though, I'd
forgotten about Ron's statement at the end of the sixth book.
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potternut190
Wednesday 11th January 2006 22:27 | Summer Attack |
| Great! I look forward to your next chapter. One of the few stories I've read about Harry projecting his emotions. Good example of his concern for others. Well written. My only complaint is you used coach when you meant couch ;-) otherwise keep up the good work. |
| Wednesday 11th January 2006 23:01 | Summer Attack (Author Response) |
| Thanks for the review. It's funny that you should mention the "coach"
issue I had (I just got the email for your review) because, I
swear, not more than ten minutes ago, my sister was reading the rest of
this chapter in the same room as me laughing and pointing out me doing
that over and over. I'll be more careful in the next chapter. :)
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Arnel
Monday 9th January 2006 10:21 | Summer Attack |
| Gripping...that's the only word to describe this first chapter. You have the main characters' personalities completely believeable and I love how Dudley is seeing Harry as something other than his personal punching bag after the incident in the park. The use of Lupin's Pensieve was genius in conveying the message of what truly happened to Vernon. It was nice to see the man speechless for once! I really look forward to future chapters...I'm hooked on this fic. Well done! |
| Monday 9th January 2006 13:37 | Summer Attack (Author Response) |
| I'm very glad you're enjoying it. I was a little nervous about Lupin
because his role was originally for Dumbledore but I wrote the first
draft before the 6th book was released (but don't worry that's not a
sign of how long I will take to update). But once I switched Lupin in
there I thought it would be interesting to get him to step up as a
parental figure for Harry since obviously the Dursleys do not have his
best interests in mind.
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jeanne
Sunday 8th January 2006 16:24 | Summer Attack |
| Now I know ,this is the beginning of a good fic.I was wondering about Petunia,and thought Molly,s demeanor to be very subdued.She usually arrives in fine fettle.Vernon will never change,but is there hope for Dudley,?and a Memory charm on the lot of them wouldn,t be remiss,as it would prevent them from ever passing on info re.Harry to the wrong sorts.[Just remove Harry from their Memory.] |
| Sunday 8th January 2006 16:39 | Summer Attack (Author Response) |
| This was originally a one shot but I'm adding at least one more
chapter. If I write a "7th Year" story, it will be a continuation of
this story.
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jeanne
Sunday 8th January 2006 16:18 | Summer Attack |
| Was this a one shot,or is there more.I did like it so far. |
myopias
Sunday 8th January 2006 10:52 | Summer Attack |
Wonderfully engaging! Jumping quickly into the action and plumbing the
depths of Dudley's psychology is intriguing. I'm glad to see you have
joined the ranks of writers here and are gracious enough to share your
imagination with us.
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arios
Sunday 8th January 2006 09:31 | Summer Attack |
| Great first chapter! |
Melindaleo
Sunday 8th January 2006 07:47 | Summer Attack |
| I enjoyed this story. I liked Dudley's dim recognition that there is more to Harry than he ever saw, and how like Harry to step in front of the curse, despite the fact it was Dudley. Where was Aunt Petunia though? I'd like to see Molly's reaction when she sees Harry's little room, and I'm unreasonably worried about the stuff he keeps hidden beneath his floorboards. That's his important stuff, how will she know? LOL. It might have absolutely nothing to do with your story, but I can't get the thought out of my head. |
| Sunday 8th January 2006 14:13 | Summer Attack (Author Response) |
| Though I don't
mention where Aunt Petunia is, in my head she was out at the store. But
don't worry, I am planning on having her make an appearance in the next
chapter. I wasn't planning on writing Molly's reaction but I've given
it some thought after reading your review and I think I might just
include it in the next chapter, thanks for the idea :-)
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Delfino
Saturday 7th January 2006 17:08 | Summer Attack |
No words could honestly express my thoughts right now. But I'll try anyway.
Great, awesome, super, fantastic, fabulous, exciting, thoughtful...
Well, my brain just seems to be overloaded. You get the picture. This is a wonderful story! I especially liked Dudley's part in it. Not to overdone. I love it. Definately one of my favorites. Please, please, PLEASE update soon!
Delfino
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| Sunday 8th January 2006 14:04 | Summer Attack (Author Response) |
| Dudley will also appear in the next chapter, I hope you enjoy his reaction to the whole experience.
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Treck
Saturday 7th January 2006 14:43 | Summer Attack |
A wonderful start on your first story. (at least here) I hope you can update soon.
Treck
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| Sunday 8th January 2006 14:01 | Summer Attack (Author Response) |
| This is indeed my first story at any site. I'm glad you're enjoying it.
I have to admit, I was a little nervous about how my first story would
be received. I'm working on chapter two as we speak :-)
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