daniel_r_crazy22
Tuesday 30th May 2006 21:15 | The First Horcrux |
| I lie the begining. Can't wait to read some more. So you know what, I am goig to the next chapter so I can. |
critmo
Tuesday 30th May 2006 14:09 | The First Horcrux |
| Good start, well written, so allow me to point out two weak points: the orderly appearance of No. 4 should hold some appeal to Hermione, whereas Harry's chaos wouldn't be her cup of tea. And Harry is awfully rude about Godric's Hollow. - Just two thoughts, no substantial problems. Looking forward to ch. 2. |
Wooster
Thursday 9th February 2006 06:12 | The First Horcrux |
| Oh this is gonna be cool...really cool. It's to bloody early to be more eloquent. So you're just gonna have to settle for I love your stuff and I love this. |
obsidiana
Wednesday 25th January 2006 03:13 | The First Horcrux |
Wonderful start! I can't wait to read more!
Thanks for sharing...
Sid |
Arnel
Monday 23rd January 2006 12:22 | The First Horcrux |
| I love how you begin this story with Hermione's perspective. I hope we'll see more of what's going on in her head as the story progresses. The fact that she and Ron are able to and do use magic at the Dursleys to make their living arrangements more pleasant is a nice touch, especially when they are discovered by Aunt Petunia and Uncle Vernon. Also, I was encouraged when Harry stood up to them. This is a very nice start to another one of your truly entertaining narratives. I definitely look forward to your next chapters. |
graup_hagrid
Sunday 22nd January 2006 16:24 | The First Horcrux |
| Nice start to a new fic.
I like the way you personify the characters, very illustrious. It makes it easy to be drawn into the story.
Thanks for sharing it. |
Hearts on Fire
Sunday 22nd January 2006 13:36 | The First Horcrux |
| Excellent...re read it LOL yep still awesome!!! |
batsnumbereleven
Saturday 21st January 2006 14:07 | The First Horcrux |
| Interesting start. I wonder how Harry's going to deal with Kreacher when they move into Grimmauld Place. ...and how much 'Dung has filched from there, too!
I like your Harry so far - he's brooding, but can still function and has a plan (I assume! It sounds like it, anyway). |
mary-v
Saturday 21st January 2006 12:34 | The First Horcrux |
| Absolutely brilliant!!!!:D:D:D:D:D:D:D I really cannot wait for the rest!!:D |
EmeraldPrincess
Saturday 21st January 2006 12:03 | The First Horcrux |
| Yes it is Hermoine... lol
Great chapter LOVE IT!!
Write more sooon!! |
cutgril
Saturday 21st January 2006 10:17 | The First Horcrux |
| I am glad that you are writing again. I check your website periodically and thought that maybe you had quit writing. This story sounds promising. I am anxious to read the next chapter.:) |
misslara
Saturday 21st January 2006 04:09 | The First Horcrux |
| I've always wondered what it would be like for Hermione, living in 2 worlds as she has been doing. You've worded what I was imagining perfectly and I applaud your talent to do so.
As for the introduction to the rest of the story, it sounds intruiging. Harry sounds like he's grown up a little but he and Ron are still obtuse, ignorant, and immature boys and you've kept them that way.
This chapter has all the setup for intrugue, drama, romance and adventure. My favourite kind of story. I'll look forward to the next chapter!
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aschowin
Saturday 21st January 2006 01:25 | The First Horcrux |
| Great first chapter. You wrote Hermione's point of view really well, it was refreshing to hear her thoughts. I'm interested in seeing where you take this. |
hjdevnull
Friday 20th January 2006 21:03 | The First Horcrux |
| Very interesting -- can't wait to see more. I like the friendship between Harry and Hermione, it's very well-done. I'm interested to see where you take this. |
Hearts on Fire
Friday 20th January 2006 20:35 | The First Horcrux |
| I cannot begin to tell you how utterly THRILLED, I was to see you back Mr. Intel!!!! I even did a war dance!!!!! I have been waiting anxiously for months to see you writing again, and I have once again not been dissapointed!!!
Hermione leaving her parents....heartbreaking!!! You are just simply amazing at what you do, and the stories you create are high quality! I am enjoying your take on book 7 and I VERY EAGERLY await your next chapter! I hope to one day see some of your other stories finished as well!!! :blushing:
WELCOME BACK, and Brilliant job!!!!!:thumbsup: |
EJH0904
Friday 20th January 2006 20:34 | The First Horcrux |
| Very nice, indeed. Please continue, I'm very anxious to see where this goes. |
Aibhinn
Friday 20th January 2006 20:25 | The First Horcrux |
| Whee! Mr Intel's back! Mr Intel's back!
*ahem*
A very strong start to what looks like quite an interesting story. I enjoyed seeing things from Hermione's point of view (and I loved the lemonade analogy!). I agree with her; this is going to be an interesting year, and I can't wait to see the rest of it.
Welcome back, Michael! You've been missed! |
Tinabell
Friday 20th January 2006 17:34 | The First Horcrux |
| So glad to see a new story from you!
Hope the updates come fast and furious!!??
So far, so good! Look forward to getting into the "meat" of it! |
| Friday 20th January 2006 19:03 | The First Horcrux (Author Response) |
| Thanks! I hope they come fast, too. I've got a few chapters in the can, so those will come relatively fast. ;) |
Jake
Friday 20th January 2006 15:41 | The First Horcrux |
| Another great start to another great story, I can't wait to see what happens next, keep up the great work! I can't wait to see the dursley's reaction to Harry's house guests and room additions.
-Jake |
| Friday 20th January 2006 15:50 | The First Horcrux (Author Response) |
| Chapter two has the Dursley's reactions, never you fear. It's in beta now. :D |
fritz42
Friday 20th January 2006 10:19 | The First Horcrux |
| What a great start to the story. I loved Hermione's
perspective. I particularly loved seeing her understand what it
was like to be Harry Potter. It was gripping for me to read
that. You have alluded to many interesting aspects, such as
Harry's feelings for Ginny and Hermione's opinion that Harry's noble
act was doomed to failure; it will be fun watching them play out in
your story. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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snuffles007
Friday 20th January 2006 09:18 | The First Horcrux |
| An excellent beginning! I can't wait for more. Please update soon!
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| Friday 20th January 2006 14:38 | The First Horcrux (Author Response) |
| I will! Thank you for reading. |
Hank
Friday 20th January 2006 08:57 | The First Horcrux |
| This is off to a nice start. I like how things started out from Hermione's perspective. That was an interesting and well-done twist. I think you managed to capture her character and her motivations rather well. I also enjoyed the bit there at the end where she was upset about Harry stealing a library book. Vintage Hermione! |
| Friday 20th January 2006 14:37 | The First Horcrux (Author Response) |
| I really enjoyed writing from Hermione's perspective and hope to be able to do it again in the future. She's a fun character. :D |
dancinginmagic
Friday 20th January 2006 08:09 | The First Horcrux |
An interesting start and I look forward to reading this as it
continues. One thing, though: I don't understand why Hermione had to
write the address for Harry and Ron. That's how Dumbledore did it, but
surely that was only because he couldn't be there to tell Harry
himself. Writing it down isn't part of the charm, only being the only
one who can tell others about it. Ah well. I'm probably mistaken.
Can't wait for your next chapter!
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| Friday 20th January 2006 08:40 | The First Horcrux (Author Response) |
| Well, I don't think she *had* to write it down, but that seemed the best way to her at the time. Most people (Hermione included) don't like to fix things that aren't broken. She knew that was how it had been done in the past and so that was how she did it for Harry and Ron. Besides, it seemed to be a bit more dramatic that way.
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fritz42
Friday 20th January 2006 07:28 | The First Horcrux |
| What a great start to the story. I loved Hermione's
perspective. I particularly loved seeing her understand what it
was like to be Harry Potter. It was gripping for me to read
that. You have alluded to many interesting aspects, such as
Harry's feelings for Ginny and Hermione's opinion that Harry's noble
act was doomed to failure; it will be fun watching them play out in
your story. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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| Friday 20th January 2006 08:37 | The First Horcrux (Author Response) |
| Yes. I plan on addressing Harry and Ginny's breakup a bit differently than I have in the past. This will be closer to what I think JK intends (at first). But I plan on turning things on their ear as soon as I can. It's much more fun to twist plots that way.
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Melindaleo
Friday 20th January 2006 06:59 | The First Horcrux |
| Great start. I'm always pleased when an author remembers that Ron and Hermione said they were going to Privet Drive. I'm eager to see Hermione's reaction to the abysmal treatment Harry receives from the Dursleys. |
| Friday 20th January 2006 08:36 | The First Horcrux (Author Response) |
| Indeed! Unfortunately, I've kept the Dursleys out of the picture for most of this story. Perhaps as I go through the chapters I've written already, I'll revisit that. It's nice to have another author critique my writing and I hope that I can live up to your expectations.
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Xaphania
Friday 20th January 2006 04:00 | The First Horcrux |
| This is the first post-HBP fic I've started to read, and so far, I like it. Your writing style is great - not too complicated, not too simple, just right. I like where you're going with this so far, I'll be looking out for updates. |
| Friday 20th January 2006 08:34 | The First Horcrux (Author Response) |
| I appreciate that. One of my goals is to keep things simple enough to reach everyone, but complicated enough to push readers a little. Thanks for the review.
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KEDme
Friday 20th January 2006 02:27 | The First Horcrux |
| Oh yay!!! This is awesome and it's nice to see some quality fanfiction coming out again. I can't wait for the next installment, and I'm hoping this project is going to be longer than it seems. Good job! |
| Friday 20th January 2006 08:33 | The First Horcrux (Author Response) |
| Actually, it's going to be at least 50-75k words (possibly more). It all depends on the muse and the time spent in front of the keyboard.
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parakletos
Friday 20th January 2006 01:12 | The First Horcrux |
| Good to see you back and posting fics again. A very good start; I look forward to more.
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| Friday 20th January 2006 08:33 | The First Horcrux (Author Response) |
| Thanks. It's good to be writing again.
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