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sonicdale
Tuesday 3rd May 2005 22:06 | Harry Potter and the Torch of Caelum | Nice chapter.
I liked the shopping spree.
The little girl is going to play a bigger part in this, i'm sure of it.
Good work.
An aside: Your style of writing had me baffled, for a while. Now I've
adjusted to it. Your narration tends to be heavy and light on the
dialogue. I'm hoping future chapters are not as heavily descriptive as
these were. I like hearing and feeling what the characters have to say.
You've scratched the surface, but I'm not feeling "it" yet. We'll see
with the next few chapters.
Again, good work.
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