Ladybug
Tuesday 23rd May 2006 07:13 | All Night Long |
Splendid, just splendid! I love your story, it's so well crafted. Ooh, looking with the hindsight of Ron's appalling sixth year, I really felt for Hermione when she said: When he does wake up to girls, I’ll be the first girl he sees. Oh dear, poor girl! I just love how 'knowledgable' she is about relationships: You should read more, Ginny. Oh, that cracks me up!
But, apart from your wonderful depiction of Hermione, it's all about Ginny, really, isn't it. And she is fabulous - absolutely wonderfully written. |
| Wednesday 6th September 2006 10:30 | All Night Long (Author Response) |
Thanks for such a glowing review. It was a pleasure to write about such wonderful characters - both Ginny and Hermione are wonderful in canon, aren't they?
I actually wrote this pre-HBP, but I was thinking of the Yule Ball. Hermione's complete confidence was NOT justified - you can't use book-learning to make someone else fall in love. Thank goodness she and Ron both grew up eventually!
Ginny was a little harder to hit off correctly because she's less like me, but there's no question about her being completely distinct and leap-off-the-pages real in JKR's writing. I'm glad you were comfortable with the way I invaded her mind in this story (NOT the way Tom Riddle invaded her mind!). |
critmo
Tuesday 16th May 2006 13:23 | All Night Long |
| Well, I thought the part about "very good-looking, even if he does forget to comb his hair" was a little constructed, but the end was very good. Especially Ginny's natural tendency to defend Harry. |
| Wednesday 17th May 2006 01:18 | All Night Long (Author Response) |
Dear Critmo,
Do you know, when I wrote that, I had completely forgotten that Harry is the one with messy hair! I was so focussed on 13-year-old Ron - who strikes me as a boy who wouldn't be too particular about grooming - that I didn't realise how contrived it might sound.
But Ginny will always support Harry. Thanks for your supporting me.
GhV |
Mullvaney
Saturday 13th May 2006 07:24 | All Night Long |
I really like your sory! you've done an excellent job portraying Ginny; how she feels odd-man-out all the time, when really everyone likes her. You've avoided making her "Oh, woe is me!" Ginny, she knows what's what, and although she might feel a bit sorry for herself, your Ginny doesn't wallow in it.
Wonderful job, I can't wait for more! |
| Monday 15th May 2006 15:21 | All Night Long (Author Response) |
Dear Mullvaney,
I don't think self-pity is at all a heroic quality. The challenge in writing is to highlight the hero(ine)'s troubles for the reader without having the protagonist wallow in it. Thank you so much for telling me I succeeded in this chapter. JKR likes Ginny, so we should too.
New chapter is now posted,
GhV |
aschowin
Friday 12th May 2006 23:11 | All Night Long |
| That last part gave me a chuckle. Poor Ginny though, going through these feelings all alone. You've really made me feel for her character. I suppose everyone goes through it at some point, but it sounds so much more dramatic reading it from someone else's point of view. Great job. |
| Monday 15th May 2006 15:19 | All Night Long (Author Response) |
Dear aschowin,
Yes, poor Ginny - although she was comparatively "content" at the end of CoS, it doesn't sound as if she had a friend, or that her family understood her, does it? The girl who has seen Voldemort and lived must have quite a lot in common with Hary Potter. Anyway, we've supplied her with a friend now, and a canon friend too. Thanks for reviewing.
Regards,
GhV |
EmeraldPrincess
Friday 12th May 2006 21:21 | All Night Long |
Wow Ginny!
Nice, she went all.. emotional and confused.
Sorry about lame comment! |
| Friday 12th May 2006 21:32 | All Night Long (Author Response) |
Dear Emerald Princess,
I love your "lame" comments, they mean my story knocked you speechless! Hermione may have a word for every occasion, but I know I don't.
Thanks for reading and reviewing,
GhV |
Ardie Bea
Friday 12th May 2006 15:24 | All Night Long |
Hi Grace
I enjoyed this originally on the Quill and I'm enjoying your rewrite too.
"The bedroom walls shrank away, and the bed covers billowed up enormously, and the candles – and shadows – flared up to the ceiling. I had lost all sense of balance, and didn’t know whether I was swaying backwards onto my pillows or forwards into Crookshanks." Loved this description of disorientation; the blending of psychological event and bodily being. Helped this older male to feel for Ginny. |
| Friday 12th May 2006 16:22 | All Night Long (Author Response) |
Dear Ardie,
Thank you for the very great compliment of reading this story twice. It's always good to know I've created some empathy. I hope your daughter will agree that you understand teenage girls; I have a son who is older than Ginny, and, needless to say, he informs me that mums don't understand anything!
Have a good day,
GhV |
Hank
Friday 12th May 2006 07:53 | All Night Long |
That was a fun read! Poor Ginny - torturing herself over what turns out to be nothing. It's also kind of cute that she can't see Hermione liking anyone other than Harry! Too funny!
I love the interaction between Hermione and Ginny. You've done a good job of capturing the intimidation that Ginny would really face. Here's the wise Hermione, friend to the great Harry Potter. Talk about a scary prospect! Yet you've not neglected to capture Hermione's persona as well. You've done a great job capturing her with her penchant to plan everything down to the minutest detail, her exasperation with Harry, and I love how you have her coping with the destruction of her idol, Professor Lockhart. Also, you've managed to capture her complete inability to empathize with others, especially Harry. That's an aspect of her persona that still needs work... But that's JKR's problem.
Good job! Thanks for sharing! |
| Friday 12th May 2006 16:18 | All Night Long (Author Response) |
Dear Hank,
Yes, don't you feel clever when you know more about a situtation than the characters do?
Poor Hermione, it's not that she doesn't feel any empathy for others, she's just hopeless at expressing it. So all her friends have to be people who can see beyond the obvious.
I think I would be embarrassed to have fallen in love with a person like Lockhart. But how much has Hermione really learned? You can't reduce love to a text-book formula, Miss Granger. Oh dear, I wouldn't want to be 13 again ...
Ginny will be less tortured in the final chapter. Thanks for keeping the reviews coming.
GhV |
Evelyn
Friday 12th May 2006 01:17 | All Night Long |
This was so much fun to read! I was waiting all the time for the big revelation and the end put a huge smile on my face. Even though I knew what was coming. Very, very well written.
It's a really good idea to compare Ginny/Riddle with Hermione/Lockhart. That conversation was like a group therapy, with a cute little mediator, Crookshanks.
And I knew then that I wanted both of us to win. That's nice of her... I love the way you make her become friends with Hermione so cautiously. |
| Friday 12th May 2006 16:14 | All Night Long (Author Response) |
Dear Evelyn,
I never thought about Crookshanks as a therapist ... interesting idea! He certainly is a smart cat, so why not?
Ginny wouldn't have shown any courage if she had resented Hermione right up to the moment of the revelation. It's her willingness to accept friendship under difficult circumstances that makes her a heroine.
I'm glad to put a smile on a reader's face. Thanks for all your input,
GhV |
