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Friday 2nd June 2006 07:26 | Gift of the Mages | | I almost didn't finish reading this chapter for two reasons. First, it seemed so out of character for Ron, who hates being poor, to not do better at business, especially if he has Hermione to make sure he's organized. Second, while Ron broods in canon I found Ron's self-recrimination quite depressing. However, I persisted and did enjoy the parts the other characters are playing. I also like the sense of mystery you have incorporated into this chapter, leaving several key questions unanswered for the next chapter to resolve. The Gift of the Magi is one of my favorite all-time storieas and I think you're doing a creditable job of addapting the story to suit the HP universe. I look forward to the next chapter. | Fuzzy
Monday 29th May 2006 10:10 | Gift of the Mages | | It took me awhile, reading your story, to remember the plot-line of the Gift of the Magi. Our school made us read it when we were in 6th grade, and, honestly, it was one of the better stories. You just wrote this so well, I couldn't tell 'till half way through that I'd already read something like it. Great job! | critmo
Monday 29th May 2006 06:53 | Gift of the Mages | | Oh, dear. - Laid out nicely. | Shadow Hider
Sunday 28th May 2006 21:04 | Gift of the Mages | | this is good so far | Mullvaney
Sunday 28th May 2006 18:30 | Gift of the Mages |
Oooooo. Gift Of The Magi is on of my favorites This is a great elaboration of that theme. Poor Ron and Hermione. Who would have guessed hse would have gone into defending helpless creatures I'm very anxious to see what happens with those pictures, and the bits of parchment. |
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