Dad
Saturday 4th April 2009 05:48 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
| Every time you update the new story, I intend to read this one first. Got round to starting it at last. At the moment it is a bit like watching a video on fast forward. Lot of potential though. |
nightwing
Saturday 13th September 2008 19:07 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
| nice chapter |
Prongs739
Tuesday 5th August 2008 13:43 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
| Very parallel to the 1st book, so far. |
| Wednesday 6th August 2008 16:47 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate (Author Response) |
| The first half of this story follows the main plot of the books more or less. |
SpellBound
Tuesday 4th December 2007 00:07 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
I hope it deviates from the book soon...
sherellyn |
| Wednesday 5th December 2007 15:42 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate (Author Response) |
| Thanks for your reviews. This story is a mix of canon and my own plot. You'll just have to read on and find out how much. |
ImmortalPhoenix
Saturday 27th January 2007 15:10 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
Not much to comment on here. Hermione seems more... like Ron and Harry in your version than in the book but I think I like this Hermione better. I like the role Harry's parents play. I've never read a story where Harry's parents were alive... except this one where Harry went back in time and stopped Moldy Voldy from killing his mum... and then Snape was his step-dad and I don't remember much more. I've read so many stories the plots are all mixed together. Anyway, this sounds great so far. I like your writing style also. Authors that don't have a balance between too much detail and too little detail annoy me. Yours is right around perfectly balanced so far.
Great job so far.
Immortal Phoenix |
lacyrachil
Monday 18th December 2006 07:27 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
One of the Slytherin boys fell off his broom and broke his wrist
By this do you mean Neville is in Slytherin or is this a change you made in order for Neville to be with them when they found Fluffy? I really do like the idea of Neville being included from the beginning. I hope you continue that angle.
Be really careful in your writing. Sometimes we have to put a harness on our imagination to get description our the way they should be. There are many places where everything seems extremely rushed. You have to pretend like we, as your readers, have never heard this story before. If someone was reading this that hadn't read HP or seen the movies they would have loads of questions for you. Great ideas though, I'm excited to read on. |
Wooster
Saturday 29th July 2006 23:55 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
The classes themselves fascinated and dismayed Harry. He realized that there was still a lot for him to learn in spite of being exposed to the Wizarding world all his life.
I actually really liked this because it so closely mirrors Harry's thougts in canon when he's worried because he HASNT had that exposure. Very cool. The pacing of this is a little fast, but your changes are still very realistic so...thumbs up! |
crazyredhead
Thursday 27th July 2006 00:38 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
Marauders pleas make harry one please this is very good
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GryffindorDragon
Friday 21st July 2006 11:59 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
So you're not exactly following canon. Hermione is not alone in her brilliance. Neville is better, but I think you're a bit unfair to him making him need a remembrall. With his parent not space cases in St. Mungo's, I would think Neville would be fully functional and not spacey himself..
I did like the bit with Lily and James talking to each other in the letter; very cute
I like that you have Harry as youngest seeker again, but I don't think the scene at the Quidditch match would go the same, not with Harry's parents there. But then again no adults (aside from Snape) were doing anthing in canon. But I still think Harry's parents would show themselves more competent And why did you change how Harry caught the snitch . . . coughing it up was so classic!
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| Friday 21st July 2006 20:12 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate (Author Response) |
| My story is AU and considers how the characters would be in these circumstances. They may become OOC with regards to canon in some areas. The Quidditch match was almost canon because I thought that no one would think Harry was being attacked like that, even his parents. I was a bit caught up in writing and forgot about the coughing up the Snitch part, Sorry about that. |
Bookworm
Tuesday 18th July 2006 08:39 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
| This chapter was a little too rushed and sounded like it came directly out of the book. |
Believer
Saturday 8th July 2006 14:14 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
Great part
'nuff said. |
SillyGillie
Monday 3rd July 2006 21:18 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
| Brilliant, I love how the story is developing. I can't wait to read the later years! |
| Tuesday 4th July 2006 16:42 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate (Author Response) |
| Thanks for your review. I hope you'll like the way the story will go. This story will go up to Harry's fourth year then I'll start a new one which will cover his last three years at Hogwarts. I'll tell you guys the title of that one near the end of this one. Thanks again for reviewing and keep reading. |
mary-v
Sunday 2nd July 2006 10:58 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
| I like the subtle changes you've got going! And wow on the already written 40-something chapters! Wonderful! You still rushed through this, but it was better managed than the prologue. However, I noticed the only time you rush is when you describe thigns already written in the books, so thats fine. Whatever is more your wording is brilliantly done! I really can't wait for the next chapter! |
mary-v
Sunday 2nd July 2006 10:58 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
| And I forgot to mention, your characetrizations fo the characters are absolutely brilliantly done. You really made sure to keep them down to a tee! |
daniel_r_crazy22
Saturday 1st July 2006 20:54 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate |
| It is really good. It follows the real Harry Potter story but it has a new twist to it. I love it. Keep the chapters coming. |
| Sunday 2nd July 2006 07:27 | Harry Potter and the Twists of Fate (Author Response) |
| Thanks for your reivew. It'll be interesting and have many new twists, I promise. |
