GryffindorDragon
Sunday 12th November 2006 12:18 | Two Nights in the Garden |
'He was outside weeding the garden earlier.' -- wouldn't degnoming be more appropriate for Wizards?
'I guess seeing her hurt by someone she thought she could trust made me realize how I’d done the same thing' -- rather perceptive for Ron
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| Sunday 12th November 2006 19:27 | Two Nights in the Garden (Author Response) |
Heh, I suppose you're right, degnoming would probably have been more appropriate. I think in the back of my mind I had him doing something that Harry was familar with from his time at the Dursleys.
Ron was rather perceptive in this piece. It comes with the times and the age. He knows he's about to embark on a journey that he may not return from. That tends to make one reflect on one's past mistakes and want to make amends for them. I think that's exactly what he's got in his mind here. He knows he made mistakes in his relationship with his sister and now he feels bad. |
daniel_r_crazy22
Saturday 2nd September 2006 13:41 | Two Nights in the Garden |
| Wow. Ron, don't hurt him too bad. And I can't wait to see what happens between Harry and Ginny and Ron and Hermione. Very good chapter. |
| Sunday 3rd September 2006 20:17 | Two Nights in the Garden (Author Response) |
| Well, Ron and Harry are both male, and we all know how males work things out... |
ninkenate
Thursday 31st August 2006 07:14 | Two Nights in the Garden |
I think Ron got his point across to Harry without having to yell or actually get physical. Ron is stuck trying to be a good big brother and a good best friend. I believe he can see both sides and is just trying to help strike a balance for them. I don't think he's really choosing sides but trying to help the one that needs him the most at the time and right now that's Ginny.
I'm not sure Harry really understands or realizes how much he's hurt Ginny yet but I think he's starting to.
It was a great brotherly conversation between the boys. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. |
| Thursday 31st August 2006 16:39 | Two Nights in the Garden (Author Response) |
| Yeah, I think Ron and Harry are maturing in their relationship, as well. They both know they're not innocent in having hurt Ginny so they're kind of going easy. Ron really could have gotten on Harry about what he did, but he took the high road and recognized his own faults through his friends mistakes. I appreciate you noticing all of the details! |
critmo
Saturday 26th August 2006 08:56 | Two Nights in the Garden |
| Harry's not very passionate about this, is he? |
| Saturday 26th August 2006 09:27 | Two Nights in the Garden (Author Response) |
| Well... It depends on what "this" is. He's passionate about Ginny but a little irked with Ron's strange behavior. He's also worried about how his first meeting with Ginny will go, on top of the fact that he knows he's about to leave her for what may be a very long time. Perhaps despirited is the right word. |
hpiknut
Friday 25th August 2006 08:18 | Two Nights in the Garden |
| Good chapter. I thought Ron's and Harry's talk was very well done. I love Ron wanting to take care of his sister. I loved the end of their little talk! Can't wait for the next chapter! |
| Friday 25th August 2006 17:58 | Two Nights in the Garden (Author Response) |
| Yeah, Ron's such a good older brother when he wants to be. He's really trying to make up for lost time now! He's even showing a bit of maturity that we haven't seen before. Thanks! |
Evelyn
Friday 25th August 2006 06:59 | Two Nights in the Garden |
Sweet story. You know how to build a quiet, sad atmosphere. I loved the part in the first chapter when Ginny tried to forget a part of Harry and ended up thinking about it even more...
I liked the brother/sister moment in the first chapter, and the idea of Ron comparing Harry and Ginny's relationship with his and Hermione's. I have to admit, though, that just now in the second chapter, Ron's attitude toward Harry seemed just slightly overdone to me. I can see that he doesn't want Ginny to be sad, but still... He always seemed more discreet to me.
But never mind that, I'm looking forward to the next chapter. |
| Friday 25th August 2006 17:54 | Two Nights in the Garden (Author Response) |
Thank you for the comment about the atmosphere. I strive to make the conditions seem real and tangible because I want the reader to feel like they're standing in the scene listening.
As for Ron's overprotectiveness, well... I really wanted to show him discovering, and trying to make up for, all of his mistakes. So a little overboard seemed okay. I appreciate the notice though. Thanks for reviewing! |
Ladybug
Friday 25th August 2006 03:52 | Two Nights in the Garden |
| Nice! Love seeing Ron and Harry being boys together, particularly as this is a bit different with Ron standing up for his sister. You did that so well. Ron's brotherliness is just lovely - wish I had a brother like him! - and poor Harry not getting the attention he's used to when he arrived. That was a really nice idea. I loved Moody, too, and poor Arthur, LOL. I'm enjoying this little story very much. |
| Friday 25th August 2006 17:52 | Two Nights in the Garden (Author Response) |
Thank you! I'm glad you picked up on the difference between Ron talking to Ginny and Ron talking to Harry. They are teenage boys, after all, so it's impossible for them to talk about their feelings.
I love the nickname for Molly. We even named one of our cats after her and we call her Mollywobbles!
Thanks for the review! |
