Praeceps09
Saturday 18th July 2009 20:09 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| Basilik in the castle would be my idea. Otherwise I agree in CoS and OotP there were both stupid defense teachers. I like the story but am finding it hard to believe that H/G would take so much crap from her family. I understand her, but for H this is like the Dursleys and it doesn't make sense that they (he) would allow his beloved to live in the same environment as he did for 10-11 years |
Belthazor
Wednesday 29th August 2007 03:24 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| I have enjoyed the story so far. But 5 chapters centered around ruddy pyjamas is stretching patience. The story is going to huge that way. |
| Friday 16th November 2007 07:38 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| That's sortof the idea. Harry and Ginny's patience got severely stretched and then broke. Now, of course, that's all in the past. But, yes, this will be one of the longest books of the series. Thanks for reading. |
ubergeek14
Monday 20th August 2007 21:21 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
love the series so far! the ginny/harry dynamic you've created is very original and interesting, and i can't wait to see how you manipulate CoS canon to fit your story. this is easily one of my favorite fics i've read!
as a side note, I do wish that you were on the 4th or 5th book so we could see some romance and/or angst between ginny and harry. how will harry surprise ginny with a gift? how will he propose? how will the sex be like O.o! might have to do a one-shot of that on thebroomcupboard.net!
keep it up! |
| Friday 16th November 2007 07:37 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
Well, the bad news is that I'm horribly behind in responding to reviews. The good news is that we'll soon dive into the canon plot. Hopefully that balances out.
I have moments where I wish I was in years 4-5-6 for the same reason. So much potential! But we'll get there. As for an out-take... well, we'll see.
Thanks for reading. |
RaminGhauss
Saturday 18th August 2007 04:45 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| gd story, whens the nxt chapter goona cme out? |
| Friday 16th November 2007 07:31 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| Well, it already did, because I'm so terribly late in responding to your review. Thanks for reading! |
harrysnotgoingtodiein7
Friday 17th August 2007 08:53 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
cant wait for next chapter. I love the way you portray McGonogall, its perhaps my favorite portrayal, tied with Taking Control.
And boy oh boy there going to MURDER dobby.
I hope you take this series all the way through the 7 books, i really like how its developing. |
| Friday 16th November 2007 07:31 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| One of these days I'll have to pick up reading TC again. Just to see fake's McG, if nothing else. Everyone says she's wonderful, so I'm happy to be compared with his version. Thanks for reading. |
PinGy
Monday 13th August 2007 02:04 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| Hmph, apparently theres no 'Edit Review' button. Anyway, about the PJs, I have an idea who/what and why would be the person/creature to cause it, based on the original book. Hopefully not spoiling anything. |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 14:55 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| Hopefully you were right. |
PinGy
Monday 13th August 2007 01:58 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| Story is good, I personally like Minerva's and Arthur's characters, I believe I'm not alone at that. Keep up the work, been ages since last update. |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 14:52 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| Lots of folks like them, which pleases me. They're supposed to be likeable without being shallow. Thanks! |
lynb
Friday 10th August 2007 17:26 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| my heart did a little thump-thump when I saw the progress meter! yay, a new chapter is coming |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 14:51 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| I keep forgetting the meter exists. I should use it more. |
blue artemis
Thursday 9th August 2007 19:41 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| Those poor children. Considering how young they are, and that they didn't even think of anything sexual, not really until the family members started it, I would be ashamed of myself if I was Molly. I really like your Arthur, though. And this is how I wish Minerva always was. |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 14:50 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
I think perhaps Molly is ashamed of herself, now.
I enjoyed DH in part because it vindicated my view of McG's character. She's much sterner and whatnot in canon, as befits the different setup, but she's still especially dear to Harry. That was great.
Thanks for reading. |
anniep
Thursday 2nd August 2007 09:44 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
Your story series is unique and well-written. Are you really going to re-write all seven books?! That would be quite amazing, though with the quality of your story-telling I’m sure you’ll have plenty of readers for those many, many chapters.
Molly is really disturbing in these summer holiday chapters. She’s an experienced mother, so, as a mother myself, I can’t understand continuation of her horrible attitude. Yes, the kids’ connection would be difficult to understand and adjust to, but she’s had six months since the disastrous Christmas to work on that. Her deep fear of an inappropriate physical relationship between H&G would be more understandable if they were 14 & 15, but not really at 10 & 11 years old. She should be using this time before puberty to gain their trust and open the lines of communication in order to prepare for the difficult years of adolescence. Molly has already raised two sons to adulthood and has 3 teens at home, so what is her excuse? Please have her wake up soon!
Conversely, I love Arthur in this story and you make my heart ache for the terribly difficult position he’s been forced into. Minerva is wonderful also—I’m so glad you’ve given the kids a positive mother figure to turn to for advice and hugs.
Luna is terrific! I can see how she’d immediately accept H&G’s situation, and even better than accept it, she’s the first one to truly understand it (Alex!).
Looking forward to finding out what was happening with those pajamas. They’re doing a good job of destroying the Weasley family, but I can’t figure out the who & why yet and how that would move this story to the CoS.
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| Thursday 15th November 2007 14:47 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
I do plan to re-write all seven books, provided I live that long.
I think Molly's problem is that she's hardly seen Harry and Ginny for those six months. She got about 2 weeks at Christmas, and then she didn't see them again until she was brought to Hogwarts after the PS incident. At that time, Harry was severely injured, Ginny was clearly suffering (or had suffered) with him, and there was not a lot of feel-good positivity going around. So, all told, she's really only had the summer to get used to the idea in person.
I hope you enjoyed the rest of the pyjama sequence. Thanks for reading! |
Chatmandu
Thursday 2nd August 2007 06:27 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
I just realized something. In canon the Dursleys were the point of annoyance in Harry's life. Here we see little of them, but Molly seems to have taken their place for Harry, and is fracturing her own family too.
I was puzzled why Ron was eating a sandwich left-handed after he punched Percy. Then another "oh yeah" moment. Nice attention to detail by the way. Such care with little details makes the story so entertaining to read.
How far has MoO Molly strayed from her apparent pre-singularity self? Would pre-singularity Molly NOT heal Percy's cheek or Ron's hand? Now I wonder, how far you will let Molly slip? Her behavior, while understandable from one point of view, is becoming completely out of hand. |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 11:30 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
Isn't that entertaining? Even the Weasleys can be somewhat like the Dursleys in the right (wrong) situation.
I think the more interesting question is why Percy did not heal his own cheek, given that certain forms of magic appear to be allowed for the children. For the record, I don't think Molly noticed Ron's hand.
I hope the rest of the 'slippage' was satisfactory. |
GryffindorDragon
Tuesday 31st July 2007 15:29 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
That was quite intense. Still not much clue as to what is going on. Someone suggested Dobby at one point, but this has gone on too long for that to seem right. Dobby only makes one foray outside of shutting down the entry to Platform 9 3/4. And this problem with the PJs wouldn't keep them out of school; they're not in trouble with the Ministry but only with Molly (and Percy, and, to a lesser extent, Fred). Perhaps it is their subconscious frustration with the PJs that is setting off the charms. I would think some frisky dreams might be the culprit (combined with their magic) but it doesn't happen only at night and they don't seem have the interest to generate such dreams anyway.
After three long chapters I'm hoping a resolution to the issue comes along soon.
'emotionally abused' -- doesn't that seem a bit strong?
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| Thursday 15th November 2007 11:27 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
I hope the subsequent chapters addressed your concerns and questions.
I thought about 'emotionally abused', but when you think about it, that's what's going on. They're being made to feel very bad and wrong and unworthy for no justifiable reason. That's a form of hurting someone, and thus I think it's abuse. Of course, no one is required to agree with McG on that point. |
Bryher
Tuesday 31st July 2007 12:18 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| I'm enjoying this story, but it is taking frustratingly *long* to find out the mystery of the pyjamas! Hope we find out soon... Thanks, Helen |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 11:22 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| Harry and Ginny are getting frustrated, too. I doubt they'll wait much longer. Or, rather, they didn't wait much longer. Thanks for reading. |
bratatattack5
Tuesday 31st July 2007 09:46 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| do you know roughly how long it will take you to write another chapter that way I have something to look forward to .Please write Back.I love You stories, but I am curious about what the question is,Will you be telling us?Keep Writing! |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 11:21 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| Well, it's way too late to answer this question. Sorry about that. I hope you didn't mind the waiting times too much. Thanks for reading! |
jeanne
Tuesday 31st July 2007 07:58 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| I was delighted to see your update and read it avidly. Absolutely an insightful and 'feeling filled' fic. You are doing a wonderful job with this fic, and really showing Molly as not only a caring[ in a way], but an extremely possive and controlling person. Surely she can see that an 11 and 12 year old[ never mind the statistics we see about inderage sex among younguns], are innocent. Neither child has a background from which to draw such thoughts from. Keep up the great work, and I,ll follow you to the end, or as long as I am around to do so. Thanks, Jeanne. |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 11:20 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| I'm glad you're liking the story and 'getting' Molly's various traits. Thanks for reading! |
trentbusted
Tuesday 31st July 2007 03:42 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| I was so happy to see this on the latest stories list I love this story.. Thanks |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 11:19 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| Thanks very much! |
Darkarma
Monday 30th July 2007 23:30 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
I almost wonder if Dobby really is at fault but its such the obvious choice, its more than likely that your playing off of our CS expectations to come up with something more... simple. Dobby is certainly not the simple solution, he's the most problematic. So it could very well be not be him.
Maybe the family ghoul is just bored.
But personally its probably their magic overloading the alarm. After all their at their strongest when touching right? |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 11:18 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
Well, there's simple and then there's simple. Sometimes, a spade is just a spade, but even a spade can be dangerous.
The ghoul, though . . . that's downright funny. Makes me want to write an AU chapter or something. |
lantis222
Monday 30th July 2007 21:53 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| Hi! and just when we thought it was safe to get out of the water, this happens. I really feel for Molly throughout this. I don't think she's handling the situation all that well but as a mother I can see her point. On the other hand I don't really think that Harry and Ginny has handled it all that much better. I'm also kinda wondering what it is that Percy wants Ron to do. I have a shrewed idea, but do we ever find out for sure? All in all though a very well done chapter. I'm really enjoying it. |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 11:17 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| I really like hearing from people who get Molly. I don't agree with her actions personally, but obviously I get them. I hope you've been satisfied with the answers in subsequent chapters. Thanks for reading! |
Kamalia
Monday 30th July 2007 20:37 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| Excellent job! Very emotional. It's so sad, to see the family taking sides and to have no one believe Alex. I'm really looking forward to the start of school, though, and how you'll tell the story of the diary. Obviously, Harry will know if something's going on with Ginny - or they'll both be affected. Either way, I can't wait to see! |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 08:18 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| We're just about ready to jump into the school year, so you'll start to see how that unfolds. I hope you like it. Thanks for reading. |
rhetor
Monday 30th July 2007 20:37 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
The best aspect of this chapter, for me, was the development of Hermione's character. Through nothing but letters, you showed us her logical self (Occam's Razor, indeed!) at war with her loyalties, and her loyalties winning. That was marvelous to read.
You appear to be trying to build the tension and frustration to a crisis point in the reader, over several chapters. Things are getting progressively more upsetting and the mystery is becoming progressively less tolerable. Speaking only for myself, though, I had enough tension and mystery about two chapters ago.
I do realize there's a puzzle to be solved (possibly more than one), and that I probably have all the clues to solve it/them, but because this is primarily a character-driven story rather than a plot-driven story, I find myself less interested in solving puzzles than in seeing the characters develop and resolve. (Well, that's not fair -- I'm always less interested in solving puzzles than many of your other readers, and I'm not a representative sample.) Therefore, although I have one or to favorite theories about the pajamas and who did what, I'm not going to indulge in discussion of them here; when you want me to know the answer, you'll tell me.
Percy's development is interesting, but I don't think I learned anything about him in this chapter that I didn't know last chapter. Thus, the Percy-Ron situation is more interesting to me for what it says about Ron (he feels enough moral outrage about Percy's actions and requests to argue and to fight, but not to reveal it) than trying to figure out what it is that they're talking about. That's really interesting regardless of what the actual topic is.
I might have read the chapter for the discussion about McGonagall's and Ginny's feet alone, though. That was charming, and the relationship between her and the children (especially Ginny) continues to delight me -- although again, not much new ground was covered there in this chapter. What was new, and what I liked a lot, was her drawing a line in the sand for Arthur, pointing out that she was on the verge of becoming the de facto parent unless he rectified the situation.
I think all readers will be grateful that Ginny has now refused to wear the pyjamas, and will be disappointed if she's talked back into wearing them. It speaks well of her self-confidence and sense of truth that she's now able to say, "Trust me or do without me." That is magnificent.
Arthur evokes a lot of sympathy because he is in a highly difficult leadership situation. He is in the middle of a dispute between two highly charged sides, both of whom he loves dearly; he wants to keep the situation from deteriorating more than anyone, hates the pain that everyone is in, and keeps trying to negotiate compromises while simultaneously maintaining physical safety and searching for factual truth. Arthur may, in fact, be the most compelling figure in this series so far, although McGonagall is a close second. |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 08:08 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
You did find all of the most interesting bits of this chapter, I think. Since the plot questions have now been answered, the characterizations remain to hold our interest (hopefully).
I admit that I really enjoyed picturing Hermione, map of the area in hand, directing her parents to drive as close to streams and rivers as possible, looking for a house that did not belong. She'd have done it, too.
Ron's characterization is subtle here. Or at least I want it to be. Why would he be willing to get in a fistfight with Percy (who has 5" and 20lbs over him) but unwilling to tell the family what the fight was about? Why, to him, did silence appeal more than revelation? Ron's not a subtle guy, generally, so there's something specific there.
I really enjoyed the feet conversation, too. It added something to McG that I think had been missing, even in my expanded characterization. I hope it was clear that she did not want to replace Ginny's parents, only that she would if she had to. The decisions are simpler, from her point of view, but that doesn't make them less difficult.
Ah, Arthur. I have a hard time not making him functionally perfect, but I think it's clear that even he could have done a few things better. He is clearly doing better with a difficult situation than anyone else who's actually involved in it. And I, as writer and reader, am compelled by his effort to hold his family together by sheer force of will. Does anyone still wonder why he's not higher up at the Ministry? |
Felix Felicis
Monday 30th July 2007 19:21 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
Poor kids! I hope we get to see this problem worked out before long. I'm eager to see them go back to school but it would be rough if they haven't resolved this issue.
Maybe it's Voldemort making the alarms go off! Heh, probably not, but still funny to imagine!
Looking forward to the next. |
| Thursday 15th November 2007 07:52 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| It would be really rough to go back to Hogwarts with this problem unresolved. I hope you don't mind the time I took to get there. Thanks for reading. |
girlspell
Monday 30th July 2007 18:44 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
Everything that had happened to Harry and Ginny over a very long month boiled in their minds. All of the problems and heartache they had felt and witnessed, all of the arguments they had never thought they would see in the Weasley family, and all of the injustices heaped upon them swirled and melted together, and suddenly they could not bear the feel of the soft fabric on Ginny’s skin
Wow! What can I say? Amazing chapter. This has to be one of most original unique treatment of fan fiction I have ever read. The atmospher of hopelessness and frustration never let up.
Curled up against Harry’s side, with her face pressed into his shirt, Ginny eventually cried them both into a restless sleep.
Loved that line. What a great ending
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| Wednesday 14th November 2007 14:46 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
| I'm glad you liked that ending. I've been saving it up for a special occasion. |
GreenAngel
Monday 30th July 2007 17:48 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets |
| I have to say, Sovran, your story is absolutely fantastic. I thoroughly enjoyed the first one. So much so, in fact, that I had to print it out, and pass it to the rest of my family, who also enjoyed it. Seriously, it's BLODDY BRILLIANT! |
| Wednesday 14th November 2007 14:37 | Meaning of One, Part Two: Chambers and Secrets (Author Response) |
Bet that took a lot of paper.
Thanks for reading, and thanks for the kind words. |
