TangoCharlie
Thursday 25th September 2008 00:12 | Summer Story |
Sorry Arnel, didn't mean to get hung up on such a minor point! For some reason that one detail really stuck with me... I'm still really enjoying your work, and I can't wait to see where things are heading from here, I feel like we're being set up for some real excitement soon!! To re-hash an often-used compliment, the pacing of your story (or rather, stories) is SO good.
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| Thursday 25th September 2008 00:29 | Summer Story (Author Response) |
No offence taken. I'm glad you caught the descrepancy. It gave me a chance to defend the reasons for writing the chapter the way I did. If I were writing the chapter right now, I'd probably be consulting you for realistic details and advice on how to present what I wanted to happen.
Thanks for reviewing. |
TangoCharlie
Thursday 25th September 2008 00:08 | Summer Story |
I noticed for the first time reading this chapter the inconsistency between Madam Pomfrey ordering Harry off all weight-bearing activities (like chores), and Dudley getting him to do weights.
It's not at all a big thing, and given the stuff with Dudley progresses the story and the characters so significantly it's easy enough to overlook. The discrepancy just suddenly jumped out at me during this chapter when Ginny was reading Harry's letter (perhaps because my dad's going through rehab after a shoulder reconstruction, and it's months on now and he still has limited range of motion and strength...) |
| Thursday 25th September 2008 00:24 | Summer Story (Author Response) |
| I did that on purpose. I did extensive research on the treatment of dislocated shoulders and from what I learned, I decided that Madam Pomfrey was being overly cautious and rather restrictive in her instructions to Harry. You also have to take Harry's personality into consideration as well. Harry is not one to sit around and be lazy; he pushes himself to the limit and that's exactly what he did. Dudley's more observant than one thinks; he found a way to help Harry, but because being nice to him is entirely new, he doesn't supervise Harry the way he should and the result is one very sore, overly-taxed shoulder. I think my point in all this is that sometimes the Muggles do know a thing or two about healing! |
twinsmom
Thursday 24th July 2008 15:00 | Summer Story |
I just can't help but think Harry is making a mistake giving that necklace back. I think I may be missing something in the plot here, so help me out, please. It is invisible, right? And wasn't the original intent to give some of her magic to him- a boost of sorts? Or am I mistaken about that?
I'll go back to the first one and take a look, but maybe you could clarify for me when you get a chance...?
Still lovin' this!
Thanks,
Christy |
| Thursday 24th July 2008 21:05 | Summer Story (Author Response) |
Christy,
You've found one of the hidden subplots in this story! Good for you! Oh, yes, Harry is making a BIG mistake giving the necklace back. He may not need it here in the single-digit chapters, but once you get further into the story, he's going to end up regretting giving it back. Yes, Harry's phoenix pendant is invisible when it touches human skin, so no one, not even Harry, can see it. And yes, Harry will miss having Ginny's magic with him later in the story. Keep reading, but remember that this is my work in progress, so once you hit chapter 13 you'll have to wait just like everyone else for my betas to return the chapters.
I'm really glad you're enjoying the story.
Arnel |
harry_ginnyfan
Monday 22nd October 2007 22:28 | Summer Story |
| Great story,keep going! Cheers! |
| Monday 22nd October 2007 22:44 | Summer Story (Author Response) |
| Oh...I'm so glad you've read it. Chapter five should be up soon. Look for it in a week or two. Thanks for the review. |
bookish327
Saturday 13th October 2007 19:19 | Summer Story |
I liked this chapter, even though it didn't end on the fluffy note I always hope for. When they first got together again at Mrs. Figg's, Harry and Ginny were so cute with the thoughts they sent each other. Laughing about Ron's embarrassment about them sitting so close was also cute and fluffy. Then, I felt so bad for Ginny being shut out by Harry. Even though she knows there are good intentions behind it, it almost makes it harder for her and Harry to have this mental connection, since he's now blocking it sometimes.
I rarely read WIP stories because I can't stand to wait to see how a story will end. But, I've loved your other work so much that I HAD TO continue reading this, even though I'll just have to re-read previous chapters each time you post a new one to keep everything fresh in my memory. I know you have other things going on in your life, but take it as a compliment that we are all so eager to read your next chapter. |
| Monday 15th October 2007 07:16 | Summer Story (Author Response) |
I’m honored that you’re even considering reading this WIP while it’s being written. Just so you know, I’m currently writing chapter eight, so there are a few chapters in the wings just waiting to be posted. My goal is to add a new chapter every three to four weeks as my betas and I finish each new chapter. (My goal is to keep each chapter under twelve pages and so far I am succeeding. The shorter chapters should be a quick skim, then, to remind you what happened previously to the characters.)
This fourth chapter was meant to reassure Ginny and Ron that Harry is holding his own while he’s at the Dursleys. It is also meant to foreshadow later events in the story as I try to bring an AU Post-OotP story up to Post-HBP. Stay tuned for Chapter Five which should be coming out soon.
Thanks for your review.
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martin83
Thursday 11th October 2007 00:05 | Summer Story |
| im enjoying the story i cant wait to see how harry and his cousin are getting along cant wait to read the rest |
| Thursday 11th October 2007 06:17 | Summer Story (Author Response) |
| Chapter five has a lot of Dudley/Harry interaction in it. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. Thanks for reviewing. |
J.R. Lewis
Wednesday 10th October 2007 20:45 | Summer Story |
I'm not the best at encouraging, but please keep this going. I like it!
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| Wednesday 10th October 2007 21:06 | Summer Story (Author Response) |
| Just the fact that you took the time to type me two sentences counts! I'm glad you like the story. |
Grandma Kate
Wednesday 10th October 2007 13:05 | Summer Story |
Your Ginny is growing up so much. I loved it when Molly shared her feelings-
"I felt the same way when Fabian and Gideon went out on their first Order missions and left me at home with your grandparents."
I'm looking forward to more. |
| Wednesday 10th October 2007 21:09 | Summer Story (Author Response) |
| I'm so glad you liked Molly's part of this chapter. More will be forthcoming soon. Chapter five is nearly ready for beta! Yippee! Thanks for your thoughts. |
