lauberry
Saturday 26th January 2008 16:11 | Hope and Loss |
| This is so beautifully written. Thanks for sharing it! |
gymnastgal19
Friday 25th January 2008 13:27 | Hope and Loss |
this was a lil confusing.... kinda jumping all over the place, i thought
not bad though
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aggiebell
Thursday 24th January 2008 21:09 | Hope and Loss |
Oh. Very, very nice. This was incredibly poignant, all of it, and beautiful and hopeful at the same time.
Dean was...perfect. He's not a character that I spend a lot of time thinking about, honestly (I'm a Neville fangirl, so most of my time is spend wondering about him instead ). But I think Dean was the perfect choice for the main character and POV of this fic. It really brought home to me how much everyone went through and how much they all were affected. I love, love, LOVE that you had Dean help Madam Pomfrey; I love even more that you didn't make it easy for him (which sounds cruel, I know, but it's the reality of war that people die).
Little details caught my attention, too. "Undesirable 387" and Luna and the holes in the knees of Ted's jeans and OMG, "Madam Lestrange" and the mud in Ted's wounds. I think that's an image that will stay with me for a while, honestly. That just took the knife and twisted it, where my heart was caught in my throat for the horror that she'd do something like that and then make certain that her *sister* saw (not to mention the fact that the coroner obeying Bellatrix shows how bad things had gotten). On a happier note, Dean's comment about Neville never having to buy his own drinks again made me squee.
Like others have said, I really like the fact that this ended on a hopeful note. Not happy, but I really feel like Dean helped Andromeda to start healing here.
Excellent missing moment.
~Julie |
pyromain
Wednesday 23rd January 2008 12:28 | Hope and Loss |
| great story really loved it surviver guild I think the call it. Well I hope dean will be all right. |
narumi
Tuesday 22nd January 2008 12:59 | Hope and Loss |
"Go home and make her the happiest woman in the world."
Oh, wow, that one had me in tears. Very well done. I absolutely love to read the 'immediate aftermath/funerals' fics, and this is definitely right up there at the top of my list. Morbid of me, I guess, but I love the sharpness of moments, the poignant images that penetrate the fog of surviving when so many others died... It's just great to read a fic that can really capture that. Keep writing! |
majolie
Sunday 20th January 2008 19:09 | Hope and Loss |
Okay, that is the 2nd story I have read tonight to make me cry. Whecnever I think of poor Andromeda, I always feel so bad. To lose so much in such a short time would be too much for many people, so I have enjoyed reading stories that show her starting to recover a bit. Obviously, she is not really in recovery in this story, but I see you are giving her something to work with and hold on to. And manybe she and Dean will develop an ongoing relationship.
I also really liked how you showed the persepctive of one more person not quite feeling in the mood to celebrate yet. So many fics deal with Harry, or, one or more of the Weasleys not being ready to party etc ... but it makes sense that they would not be the only ones. There would be a good number of people who had lost friends, family and acquaintences, who would feel it difficult to rejoice when there had been such a price paid.
So - although I am going in search of some fluff to put me in a better place, I really liked this and thought it was well-thought out and written. |
lucyjekyll
Saturday 19th January 2008 23:25 | Hope and Loss |
| Wow, that was really touching and well-written. |
| Monday 21st January 2008 01:24 | Hope and Loss (Author Response) |
| Thanks, I'm glad that you liked it. |
Arnel
Saturday 19th January 2008 03:40 | Hope and Loss |
| I really enjoyed your story. The hopelessness that both Dean and Andromeda feel is palpable. I was deeply touched by Andromeda's memories of identifying Ted's body and how much pain the situation was causing her and Tonks and Lupin. I'm really glad you ended the story the way you did; there definitely was hope in Dean's offer to help and he might just have given Andromeda the comfort she needed when he recalled her husbands words. Nicely done. This is a story I'll be coming back to read again. |
RIPHedwig
Friday 18th January 2008 13:58 | Hope and Loss |
oh my god that was beautiful. i love your style of writing! that opening was just amezin! - 'The pink blush of the morning had been replaced by clear blue skies and a strong breeze which bedecked the surface of the Lake in white lace ruffles.'
perfect, you gripped me all the way through and i had tears in my eyes at the end. i am now off to see what else you have written! |
| Saturday 19th January 2008 01:28 | Hope and Loss (Author Response) |
Thanks! I'm rather fond of the opening as well, I feel that it shows off Dean's slightly poetical nature, after all, being an artist, when he looks out of a window he's got an eye for the potential of a view.
If you are really interested in other fics of mine, I have a WIP up at the SQ under a different (and very much older) pen name:
http://www.sugarquill.net/index.php?action=profile&id=1104 |
