aharkins
Friday 30th May 2008 12:29 | Dudley's Redemption |
Excellent story so far. I looked at the house and floorplan, and think it's a beautiful place to live. Almost too good for the Dursley's unless they do some serious changing while they're in hiding.
Keep writing, you're quite good at it, and thank you for sharing your work.
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KateB
Monday 19th May 2008 18:32 | Dudley's Redemption |
| I'm very much enjoying this so far! I look forward to more. My only (small) quibble is that Dudley's language is a little cutesy when talking about his parents. Not that that will stop me from reading and enjoying! Thanks for posting so regularly, dreadful to have to wait a long time between chapters!! |
| Tuesday 20th May 2008 05:00 | Dudley's Redemption (Author Response) |
| Oh and we've (my beta and me) are planning every other day posting. I hate having to wait ages between chapters too, so we waited till I had written so much that there would be no big delays for your reading pleasure |
cckeimig
Monday 19th May 2008 11:17 | Dudley's Redemption |
| Oh, and I agree...the pictures and floorplans are very helpful! |
cckeimig
Monday 19th May 2008 11:15 | Dudley's Redemption |
Going quite well, although I have to agree with a reviewer from the previous chapter that Dudley wouldn't speak like a little kid when he's 17 years old. Also, you're doing a lot more telling rather than showing in your writing...let us feel what's going on by using more dialogue and description instead of reporting things...
I look forward to more! |
kickstand75
Sunday 18th May 2008 10:19 | Dudley's Redemption |
| Oh - PS. I forgot to say that the pictures of the house are really cool and a nice addition to the story! |
kickstand75
Sunday 18th May 2008 10:15 | Dudley's Redemption |
| This was a great start to a new story (sorry read chap\'s one and two at once and am just reviewing at one time)! I'm going to add it to my favorites and see where it's going. Can't wait for more! |
| Sunday 18th May 2008 10:18 | Dudley's Redemption (Author Response) |
Thanks! There'll be more in a couple of days
This was a great start to a new story (sorry read chap\'s one and two at once and am just reviewing at one time)! I'm going to add it to my favorites and see where it's going. Can't wait for more! |
Wolf\\\'s Scream
Sunday 18th May 2008 08:08 | Dudley's Redemption |
| Excellent so far! Dudley's vague glimmerings of Clue are showing up rather well against his mostly-clueless (and very self-centered) background. :-} Vernon & Petunia's (differing) reactions (both from each other & over time) are making sense to me, as well. Well done. |
| Sunday 18th May 2008 08:41 | Dudley's Redemption (Author Response) |
I love reveiws like yours, Thanks!
For all Petunia bans magic and talk of it, what we know from Snape in DH shows she's not scared of magic itself, but disapproving of abnormality.
Vernon on the other hand is anti-magic. Probably got pranked by James (and Sirius) and had a bad introduction.
Excellent so far! Dudley's vague glimmerings of Clue are showing up rather well against his mostly-clueless (and very self-centered) background. :-} Vernon & Petunia's (differing) reactions (both from each other & over time) are making sense to me, as well. Well done. |
bronte
Sunday 18th May 2008 03:21 | Dudley's Redemption |
Thanks!
Vernon especially is a pompous .
Excellent portrayal of how blind, ignorant and arrogant the Dursleys are. They have not yet figured out that they are being treated far better than the way they have treated Harry.
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ngayonatkailanman
Sunday 18th May 2008 03:18 | Dudley's Redemption |
Excellent portrayal of how blind, ignorant and arrogant the Dursleys are. They have not yet figured out that they are being treated far better than the way they have treated Harry.
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J.R. Lewis
Sunday 18th May 2008 00:30 | Dudley's Redemption |
Ok. First off, I know I sounded harsh in my last review. Sorry about that. Now that I kinda understand where this is coming from, it's a bit easier. I think I'm going to like this story. Keep the updates coming. Unforgivables for not updating are rather painful.
You know that, right? |
| Sunday 18th May 2008 02:24 | Dudley's Redemption (Author Response) |
PLease hold of on the Unforgivables. I promise you we have a plan in place. This will be 10 chapter plus an epilogue, 8 chapters are beta-ed and ready to go. The final two are wiht my pre-beta. We are looking at an every other day posting. I hope that will keep me safe from torture.
Thanks for the review
Ok. First off, I know I sounded harsh in my last review. Sorry about that. Now that I kinda understand where this is coming from, it's a bit easier. I think I'm going to like this story. Keep the updates coming. Unforgivables for not updating are rather painful.
You know that, right? |
Grandma Kate
Saturday 17th May 2008 20:47 | Dudley's Redemption |
This is very easy to picture-
Dudley sat down on the pink covered bed and looked around again before falling onto his back and closing his eyes against the pink. |
| Sunday 18th May 2008 02:18 | Dudley's Redemption (Author Response) |
Great. I'm trying to add enough detail that you can see what I see.
Thanks for the reveiw.
This is very easy to picture-
Dudley sat down on the pink covered bed and looked around again before falling onto his back and closing his eyes against the pink. |
mynameisginny
Saturday 17th May 2008 12:54 | Dudley's Redemption |
| why are one and two the same? |
| Saturday 17th May 2008 13:04 | Dudley's Redemption (Author Response) |
Accident. Sorry. We're on it. Check back soon and we hope to have it fixed.
why are one and two the same? |
