Moonshoes
Sunday 23rd October 2011 11:33 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love |
This story is great! I'm not usually one for love stories, but this is incredibly entertaining .
It could just be my interest in psychology, but I would love to see more of his interactions with "Dr. Nutters" . I saw that you said you were writing something for them entering a memory in the pensieve; I think that would be so interesting, especially if it was a really personal memory that Harry has a really strong reaction to.
Thanks for such a great story! Keep writing! |
smasher1
Saturday 15th October 2011 10:03 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love |
Oh crap. I am not even fashionably late. My defense, I changed the phone app and lost all my links and then never got around to restoring them. >.>
Another great chapter. I seriously loved the pink floyd part! Please tell me you gave him Another Brick In The Wall-Part 2 too. "We dont need no edu-kaaaation"! lol!
The part with Ted was pretty awesome too. Kids are fun. I was on my cousin's lil daughter's bday yesterday. Fun little rugrats
As always, keep up the good work and post soon!
Smasher
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| Thursday 20th October 2011 04:20 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love (Author Response) |
| Hi Smasher, Thanks for the review. I don't care if you were late! I was late in responding so we're even. I'm glad you like that I have Harry listening to Pink Floyd. Yes he received all of The Wall and know he will get a kick out of that song too. Thanks for commenting on baby Ted, and I'm glad you liked that section. Won't be long until the next chapter posts, hopefully within the week. Thanks again. - R |
smasher1
Saturday 15th October 2011 10:03 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love |
Oh crap. I am not even fashionably late. My defense, I changed the phone app and lost all my links and then never got around to restoring them. >.>
Another great chapter. I seriously loved the pink floyd part! Please tell me you gave him Another Brick In The Wall-Part 2 too. "We dont need no edu-kaaaation"! lol!
The part with Ted was pretty awesome too. Kids are fun. I was on my cousin's lil daughter's bday yesterday. Fun little rugrats
As always, keep up the good work and post soon!
Smasher
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smasher1
Saturday 15th October 2011 10:02 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love |
Oh crap. I am not even fashionably late. My defense, I changed the phone app and lost all my links and then never got around to restoring them. >.>
Another great chapter. I seriously loved the pink floyd part! Please tell me you gave him Another Brick In The Wall-Part 2 too. "We dont need no edu-kaaaation"! lol!
The part with Ted was pretty awesome too. Kids are fun. I was on my cousin's lil daughter's bday yesterday. Fun little rugrats
As always, keep up the good work and post soon!
Smasher
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ursulabear
Saturday 15th October 2011 05:09 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love |
Great chapter. I am looking forward the next one.
I really liked your idea of putting Teddy in a role of cushioning Harry's and Ginny's tension at their first get-together. I cannot help but think how Ginny can see a great future father in Harry, seeing his interactions with the baby (girls always think along this way). I think Ginny's tension is a bit too much, considering her extended written communication with the improved Harry during the last months. Well, the unexpectedly strong flaring up of her love may just be the explanation.
I am very curious how the other auror trainees will react to Harry's return, how he works his way back to his community. And I want to know more about Dr. B's personal reactions and thoughts about Harry, and how a wizard's treatment is different from that of a muggle. I found the opening about the inhibiting effect of the Statute of Secrecy great and worth exploring, building upon. I am dying to know how a re-evaluation of a memory of Harry's works.
Sorry to be more interested in Harry's journey than in the fate of his relationship with Ginny - or are there more surprises about this relationship? I hope it won't be steady and... boring. The happy ending is satisfying to expect, but ... how about some unexpected turns along the way there (then maybe I ask too much ... criticizing is way easier than writing, so I am sorry if the author is offended). |
| Thursday 20th October 2011 04:33 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love (Author Response) |
| Thanks for your comments along the way. I'm glad you are reading and enjoying the story. You've made some great comments above. I think there are many avenues I could potentially explore with my story, and you have some great ideas. I've never thought to write in Dr. B's point of view! I will divulge that you will see him enter a memory with Harry at some point soon. Overall, it's interesting to see everyone's different takes on the story and what interests them. I am not offended by your comments, and I'm glad you realize that writing isn't easy! It's a lot of hard work and I simply can't please everyone. Either way, I am nearing the finale, so you'll find out if there are surprises or turns soon. Thanks for writing to me, I appreciate it and hope to hear from you again! -R |
twinsmom
Tuesday 11th October 2011 22:26 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love |
I'm just catching up with everyone else with this story. I love how believable it is. I love how you have Harry dealing with all his issues. And I love that you are taking them thru some baby steps.
The only catch I think I made was in Fleur's letter in this part. She mentions Dominique coming for a visit. Don't you mean Gabrielle? Isn't Dominique the name of a future child?
Anyway! Love this. I hope you have a bit more of Neville and Luna in future bits.
~christy |
| Thursday 20th October 2011 04:23 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love (Author Response) |
| I caught the error and updated and changed it at SIYE, but I need to get my beta to update it here. Yes, neither I nor my two betas caught the error, which is so strange. Thanks for pointing that out though. Thanks for pointing out the believability of my story. I"m glad you like watching Harry and Ginny's baby steps as they move closer to a reconciliation. No promises for Neville and Luna but now that you asked, I will think about adding them in certain parts! Thanks for reading and leaving your thoughts! Cheers, R |
kopfsalat2000
Tuesday 4th October 2011 16:57 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love |
Hello there!
Oh yeah, I know that CD
I'm glad we're finally seeing the "new" Harry, but I don't quite understand Ginny's reluctance... maybe it's because I'm to firmly on Harry's side (and male, too), but if she still loves him, what's so difficult? However, she seems willing to forgive him, so there's hope.
I like your Teddy, he's cool
Thanks, as always, for the update and for the work you put into this. |
| Friday 7th October 2011 08:46 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love (Author Response) |
| You know you're the only one out of all my reviewers who commented on the Dark Side of the Moon, or the music at all! Actually, Pink Floyd is my husbands favorite band, and I think Harry would enjoy the album. Among other albums Harry received from the Grangers and Dr B were the Beatles White Album, Abbey Road and Revolver, Fly bv Night by Rush (another of husbands favorite bands, And he also received other Pink Floyd albums including The Piper at the Gates of Dawn, Ummagumma ,Animals Wish you were here, and the Wall. A nice selection really. I also think they threw in some Clapton, probably Disraeli Gears by Cream in there too...and a few others..Anyhow, can you tell I'm a music freak? Back to the actual writing, Thanks for saying Teddy is cool, I had to do some one year old baby research to write that piece but I like how it came out! And I also do see a difference between the way that men and woman react to Ginny's behavior here. I hope you like where I'm going with this. Thank you for taking the time to review! Best, R |
Patches
Saturday 1st October 2011 14:50 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love |
| This is excellent. I'm so glad Harry is happy with his flat. It is just enough for him. I was surprised but I shouldn't have been when he invited them over for tea. Of course Molly would bring him a knitted afgan. That was a nice touch. She also brought sandwiches. Not unexpected for Molly. Of course there was also cake. Got to have pudding. I really like the fact that Ginny was a little off. She is feeling uncomfortable and wanted to be there but also didn't. Harry was thrilled to see her and was doing his best to be a good host. Andromeda and Teddy provided a good distraction and then a catalyst to help them start a good conversation. I think for a first meeting sense Harry discovered how he really feels for Ginny this went really well. You did a great job putting this together. Ginny has a lot of pride and it was pure Ginny that didn't look back to see Harry on the balcony. Thanks for writing. p |
| Friday 7th October 2011 08:31 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love (Author Response) |
| Thank you Patches! I do appreciate all your comments, they were fun to read and I'm glad that you thought this was good writing. It's great that you thought that all of Molly's little touches that afternoon were authentic. She definitely wanted to make sure his day was special. I'm also glad that you thought that the meeting between Harry and Ginny went well. Your last comment about Ginny being 'pure' Ginny when she didn't turn back to see Harry staring at her from the balcony was fab! I am glad I was able to pin her so well. Thanks again, and I'll get back to writing the next chapter! Best, R |
keeptheotherone
Saturday 1st October 2011 01:46 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love |
| I really enjoyed this chapter! Ginny's confusion seems very real and understandable, and it's so nice to see Harry thinking about her and making good choices for himself. Looking forward to more! |
| Saturday 1st October 2011 11:13 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love (Author Response) |
| I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter, and that you feel that Ginny's feelings are authentic for her situation. Thank you for leaving your thoughts! -R |
Andie28
Friday 30th September 2011 21:48 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love |
Great chapter! I like Ginny's contradiction between wanting to be with him and protecting herself, that's very real and exatcly what i was expecting from her. Besides, it's amazing how you portray the new Harry, from the way he dresses to his behaviour, everything is an indication of his improvement, which is great.
The interaction between them is both painful and sweet, there's so much tension but at the same time there's a familiarity that makes you smile. Even when they were acting awkward it was fun, and baby Teddy made me laugh, he reminds me of my niece.
Sorry to hear you don't have much time to write, i've actually been checking your story every day to see if there was a new chapter, and its been sad not to be able to read beacuse i was on vacation and now i have classes next monday My freedom days are over :'(
But i at least was granted access to Pottermore three days ago and it's been very enterteining, i absolutely love it! The new information is great, i adoro Rowling even more now
Well, i won't bored you anymore Good writing! Bye. |
| Saturday 1st October 2011 11:20 | A Less-Than-Perfect Love (Author Response) |
| Thanks for commenting on the writing having to do with baby Ted. I own a specialty baby store, so I'm around babies all the time, so I did some baby observing for the story! I was hoping that I was writing the scene in a believable way for a one year old to behave. My son didn't walk at one so I figured that Ted didn't walk yet, and I also wanted to show how fascinated a baby could be by something simple like a sheet of parchment. I'm glad he reminded you of a baby in your life! Speaking of Pottermore, I just checked into the site this morning for the first time, and was kicked out by the server after a few minutes! It seems neat, but something that could consume even more of my time! A goal of mine is to post a chapter once monthly until the end (there are five chapters left to go as of now) so check back periodically in October, but towards the end of the month. You don't bore me, I did enjoy reading your review and writing you and appreciate your thoughts. Cheers! - R |
