Firstly: The scene where Neville and Luna got together was very cute, but I think that now things are getting darker it should be something that's more alluded to than exposited; there's enough of teen couples worrying about keeping each other out of danger as it is.

Secondly: If you can find a way to work her in, sure, but I don't see how. Maybe insert her at the Ministry later on?

Thirdly: I, for one, read the quotes, but then again I don't like to skip things. The Kharadjai-related excerpts are like little bonus content, though I'm not as crazy about the quotes you get elsewhere. It would be different if I could see how those relate to the chapter (which I'm assuming they do) but I forget them as I'm reading the chapter.

I was thrown off guard, since I thought such a romantic interlude would garner more response than anything else in that chapter. Apparently no one cared. Hence my wondering.

I enjoyed this chapter even more than the last. I continue to enjoy you entirely skipping cannon sections, but then casually mentioning that they did still happen (like Harry talking to Dedalus).

I was dissappointed that we didn't get to see Harry and Ginny dancing, even if it would have been 'with her cousin'.

I found the running fight scene very hard to visualize, it felt fragmented and didn't flow well, but that could just be me, I was very tired when I read this last night. (I'm only now getting to the review because I was too tired to bother typing one out after finishing reading!)

To answer your specific requests for feedback: I do like the Neville and Luna parts, and I especially want to see glimpses into how life at Hogwarts is for them, and their leadership of the students.

I didn't care for the scenes with Sophie, because I have never enjoyed reading a romance between two OCs in a fanfic- that belongs in original fiction, in my mind.

I do enjoy the quotes prefacing each chapter, but I significantly prefer the ones that are textbook exerpts or similar. I'm just not a poetry person, and while I can appreciate that they are well written, I get a much better kick out of the geekiness and details of the field manuals, etc. It gives me a better sense of you going above and beyond as an author, to have created so much backstory.

Also: props to Sherry! I've always thought about submitting to become a beta here on PS, and I think fics that Sherry has beta'd are predominantly among my favorites.

Neville/Luna: Do what fits the overall plot. Ginny is with Harry et. al. so someone from the DA has to lead back at Hogwarts.

Sophie: I liked the character, she humanized (is that a pun?) Scott to an extent. Since Scott no longer needs his teenage subterfuge neither does Sophie. What I liked about her characterization in TTM was she had a severe case of emotional and psychological doubt when she de-aged but did her job regardless. I appreciated her professionalism.

If I remember rightly Scott wanted her at the party because she's better at reading the Shape than Scott.

That and I've already responded the wedding invitation Eva sent. Don't you dare cancel the event on me you pinheaded gamer dweeb.

It's not that I think that you've been writing N/L poorly, it's that they're not to a level where writing their relationship would be difficult in my mind. they're still fledgling in their affections for one another.

As for Sophie and Scott, I can't see them going off and being 'shipped' as you put it, 'shipping' to me has also been in a romantic sense as far as I was concerned and I fell that such a thing would be neigh impossible, as much as Scott may like Sophie, he has a job to do and the job comes first. On top of that Scott (at least to date) has spent much of his time aged down and therefore has teenage hormones which had presented issues in the past. I think that Scott truly does care for Sophie, I'm just not sure how a romantic relationship could work between them while he is helping Harry and the gang.

Apologies on the delay, I first read this on my iPad when you first published it and writing reviews (or writing anything really) is a bit of a pain in the on an iPad

Personally I've never seen N/L shipped well, it always seems as if they're thrown together because they're the only two people left without a pair.

If you could convincingly write their relationship I would love to see it, if you don't feel you can do that then, I wouldn't lose any sleep over it.

I am however all for the reintegration of Sophie, it shows some insight into Scott which is so rare for him, I think it also humanizes him a bit; Even Scott Kharan has romantic feelings for someone. My best guess for how to integrate her would be to have her follow the gang around, but I don't know how exactly that would work out.

As for the quotes, to me they're easter eggs, not really relevant at all to the current plotline, but interesting nonetheless, I would like to see them continue. I anxiously await the next installment, Hope you're enjoying your holidays.

So I either think this story is fabulous or I do not have enough to do with my time.

To answer your questions: Luna and Neville aren't that important. Yeah to Sophie, if there's a way to fit her in nicely. And I don't usually bother with poems, I want to get to the action

Thanks for the update, looking forward to the next one, as always...

For my part, I am addicted to this story, so much I wish I'd found it after you completed it.. Sorry I hate waiting.

Regarding poems quotes etc I like some of them, some not so much. Love the story though what's next???? more please Tricia

Luna can be one of my favorite characters and I enjoyed the interlude you're referencing but I don't know if they add much to your story. Basically, they ARE secondary...and we know them. The great appeal of your story is simple: SCOTT. And, the interactions of the big 4 Primes with him (and Lila). The fact is that you have almost certainly created the most successful OC character in HP fandom. So, ride that reality.

Which also justifies the "Yes" with Sophie; she opens another side of Scott that we otherwise don't see. So she could bring a lot to the story if you choose.

I believe the quotes add a lot to the story, which doesn't mean that I always read them. But I do sometimes, and when I do I always appreciate you a bit more, for how much care you bring to the crafting of your story. They are a high-level, value-added facet of each chapter. Appreciate your annoyance of not getting more recognition for them but I would encourage you to take a longer view.

In my judgement, there are many stories in fanfiction that have been/will be quickly forgotten. The trite and cliched fade from our memory. I believe that you're crafting something that will likely grow in popularity over time and will still be being read and appreciated in 10-20 years...precisely for the reason that you invest so much in each chapter.