dun8y
Tuesday 10th June 2014 01:07 | Vis Insita |
| I've just realised stupid predictive text changed a word from 'Hell', to 'he'll' Grrr!! I'm normally quite good about checking what I've written as well! x |
| Tuesday 17th June 2014 23:19 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
| Autocorrect can be a real pain sometimes. |
dun8y
Monday 9th June 2014 04:00 | Vis Insita |
Oh I love the idea of a Death Eaters wife giving him he'll if he caught a cold! It made me chuckle! Poor Kylie, no wonder she never said much having a family like that, I thought there must have been a reason for her being so quiet. I like this chapter, as always, a good fast pace throughout.
Lila, I think she's a good antidote to Scott, she's just as gung-ho as he is, but not as acerbic or antagonistic towards others. As to you writing a story about Scott, you mentioned that he is already in a universe, ie the Harry Potter one, could you not invent another world for him? (This is from a non writer who would love to be able to play with people's emotions the way that writers do!)
Thank you once again for writing for our enjoyment, Sue x |
| Tuesday 17th June 2014 23:16 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
Oh I love the idea of a Death Eaters wife giving him he'll if he caught a cold! It made me chuckle!
He won't have to worry about it, as he was dead shortly after saying that. The banal nature of the exchange was meant to provide some humanity to characters who otherwise existed as cannonfodder.
"Poor Kylie, no wonder she never said much having a family like that, I thought there must have been a reason for her being so quiet. "
Yes, I'm still not sure why I decided to make her a more central character, but I haven't regretted it yet.
"Lila, I think she's a good antidote to Scott, she's just as gung-ho as he is, but not as acerbic or antagonistic towards others."
You think so? That's an interesting interpretation, but I think I get it. It's true that she's more no-nonsense that Scott is, and tends not to go on the verbal offensive unless provoked.
"As to you writing a story about Scott, you mentioned that he is already in a universe, ie the Harry Potter one, could you not invent another world for him? (This is from a non writer who would love to be able to play with people's emotions the way that writers do!) "
I've toyed with the concept and even done a little bit of preliminary world building, but nothing's come of it, yet. As for being a non-writer, have you ever tried? Or do you just not enjoy it, as may be the case. A lot of people find writing to be a chore, even if it's fiction. I do sometimes, as well, if I'm struggling with writer's block yet again. |
bazza28
Sunday 30th June 2013 12:17 | Vis Insita |
| Sorry , the chapter i mentioned wasn't the opening one! |
| Wednesday 14th August 2013 14:52 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
| Hey, it does exist, though! |
bazza28
Sunday 30th June 2013 12:14 | Vis Insita |
Hey there, i reviewed your last story around 4 years ago, doesn't seem that long ago though... time moves ever forward.
I came back to phoenixsong after not really reading anything from there for a couple of years. This story is quite possibly my favourite on this site, and i have read a good portion of them. Whilst the visitors to this corner of the internet are dwindling, i wanted to say that there are those who love your work and look forward to every chapter you post, whatever the delay. You have a gift for writing good prose and dialogue. I really love reading your work.
I remember first being hooked from the opening chapter of "That Terrifying Momentum" set in WW2, 1945. I am a Modern History grad myself so that struck a chord with me instantly, Keep going if you can, despite the writers block, the story is fantastic and unique on here.
Peace and love
Sam |
| Wednesday 14th August 2013 14:54 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
Hey there, i reviewed your last story around 4 years ago, doesn't seem that long ago though... time moves ever forward.
Yeah, it sure does. Very depressing.
I came back to phoenixsong after not really reading anything from there for a couple of years. This story is quite possibly my favourite on this site, and i have read a good portion of them. Whilst the visitors to this corner of the internet are dwindling, i wanted to say that there are those who love your work and look forward to every chapter you post, whatever the delay. You have a gift for writing good prose and dialogue. I really love reading your work.
Thank you. I don't know if your praise is deserved but it is highly appreciated.
I remember first being hooked from the opening chapter of "That Terrifying Momentum" set in WW2, 1945. I am a Modern History grad myself so that struck a chord with me instantly, Keep going if you can, despite the writers block, the story is fantastic and unique on here.
I am trying. I was away for two months without internet access or a computer but despite that handicap continued to write by hand (an unpleasant process, I've always felt). So there is more coming. |
mdauben
Saturday 29th June 2013 07:40 | Vis Insita |
| I just ran across your story the other day and decided to give it a try. I suppose I should have actually read your previous story first but even though I didn't it wasn't hard to jump in here and understand what was going on. This is an interesting twist on cannon and I've been enjoying it. Your Ginny seems a bit more... Forward than she did in the books but it does make a nice contrast to Harry's fumbling inexperience at dealing with their romantic relationship. I'll be looking forward to seeing how the horcrux hunt goes in your story and how your characters deal with the slightly different situation you've placed them in. |
| Wednesday 14th August 2013 14:57 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
Interesting that you didn't find it difficult to jump in without reading the preceding story; I would have said that full knowledge of the previous entry was mandatory for understanding. I guess I was wrong.
My Ginny does diverge somewhat from the books (she has a reason, though), I suppose. I was never able to glean a satisfactory version of her character from what little Rowling gave me, My interpretation has diverged as the story has.
I hope you continue to enjoy. |
The Pharaoh
Wednesday 19th June 2013 01:51 | Vis Insita |
We appreciate all your hard work fighting through writer's block to deliver us our latest fix. The closest I can come to answering your question is that I like Lila's banter with Scott. Thinking more on it, I think she's a good check for Scott, i.e., she can hold her own with him and even put him in line sometimes. It's fairly situational to their characters, but I think maybe it helps to have someone there who can stand as equals with Scott so he's not alone in his relative almightiness. Such a singularity could be intimidating to readers and could potentially cloud Scott's judgment.
Regarding Thomas Paxton's input, have you ever considered writing the stories that would result w/o it separately, as either independents or outtakes from this (though the couples probably haven't progressed quite that far yet here), on a website that allows it of course? Those are always interesting to read. Have you already done so, and if so, where?
Keep pushing for more prolifery! |
| Wednesday 14th August 2013 18:32 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
We appreciate all your hard work fighting through writer's block to deliver us our latest fix. The closest I can come to answering your question is that I like Lila's banter with Scott. Thinking more on it, I think she's a good check for Scott, i.e., she can hold her own with him and even put him in line sometimes. It's fairly situational to their characters, but I think maybe it helps to have someone there who can stand as equals with Scott so he's not alone in his relative almightiness. Such a singularity could be intimidating to readers and could potentially cloud Scott's judgment.
Lila is younger than Scott and technically he is also her superior officer, but that doesn't always count for much. As his sister she can and often has wielded influence over him.
Regarding Thomas Paxton's input, have you ever considered writing the stories that would result w/o it separately, as either independents or outtakes from this (though the couples probably haven't progressed quite that far yet here), on a website that allows it of course? Those are always interesting to read. Have you already done so, and if so, where?
Paxton's 'influence' amounted to a couple of changed sentences, nothing more. I tend to ignore him as often as I listen, which has resulted in more than a few debates. |
Dad
Sunday 2nd June 2013 13:14 | Vis Insita |
| All action chapter..waiting for more. |
| Monday 3rd June 2013 01:34 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
| Working on it, my friend. Still working. |
sylvelle
Friday 31st May 2013 16:33 | Vis Insita |
I like Lila a great deal. Why? I like her interaction with Scott and her big-sister attitude with the girls. And she kicks butt too. Yay.
Tricia |
| Monday 3rd June 2013 01:34 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
| Good, I'm glad you connected with Lila. I think she has created some interesting connections with the core cast. |
TomRiddle
Friday 24th May 2013 22:45 | Vis Insita |
Mr. Nova,
I'm surprised at the significant delay between when this was posted at FF.net and when it was posted here.
I loved the chapter as usual, I've become rather interested in the interactions between Scott and Kylie, it's nice to see a bit more of Kylie.
To your direct question.
I've never really understood massive distaste of OC's. Any OC's i've disliked have been due to poor writing overall, blatant mary-sue-ing, or an OC that takes over the story or has abilities that don't really fit well or are never properly defended.
To explain that a bit more. I don't necessarily care who it is, Harry, Seamus, Ernie, or an OC. I feel that the author has free reign to do whatever, but that it must be believable and within reason. There must be a mostly logical sequence of events that have led to this OC's existence or why a particular character is OOC.
TTM and VI could have been awful, however Scott and Lila's presence (and by extension Sophie and the other woman Scott talked to prior to Slughorn's christmas party, her name escapes me) were explained in a logical and thorough manner such that it makes sense that they're there. "Oh, TommyBoy should have died, the fact that he didn't is bad, Scott is a outside observer who is now taking more direct action to help out. But he's just as confused about why he's here as Harry & Co. are."
Even Trevor and Kylie were explained and you were gonna never talk about them again, you even almost killed Kylie off.
When it gets down to it, and i apologize if everything above doesn't make any sense what so ever. Is that Scott & Co. work and are believable to me as a reader because of your writing them so that they are believable.
I hope some of this makes sense or helps you in some way.
God that was a long review.
Please punch your good friend in the mouth due to the PG-13 ratings, but then buy him a beer for continuing to insist that it remain PG-13 so that there was a plot that is quite honestly amazing.
I Remain
~TomRiddle |
| Sunday 26th May 2013 06:54 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
I'm surprised at the significant delay between when this was posted at FF.net and when it was posted here.
It was actually done a couple weeks before I even posted it to FF.net. I was hoping to get Sherry's revised version first but she ended up being too busy to take care of it for awhile.
I loved the chapter as usual, I've become rather interested in the interactions between Scott and Kylie, it's nice to see a bit more of Kylie.
I never expected to be utilizing her this way, but I think it works.
As for the OCs, I understand that a rational is important. There are a lot of facets to Scott's mission, who he is and where he comes from, only a few of which are explored in the story. It's important to give context to Scott's presence and actions but I think equally important not to overwhelm with endless background on things that won't impact Harry's story. A few glimpses at the Kharadjai Republic is all that is needed.
Please punch your good friend in the mouth due to the PG-13 ratings, but then buy him a beer for continuing to insist that it remain PG-13 so that there was a plot that is quite honestly amazing.
I was being hyperbolic. The lines in question were changed from being mildly risque to more muted and realistic. I've never written anything explicit for Vis Insita and probably never will. |
