DanAngelus
Saturday 2nd January 2016 05:41 | These Cuts I Have |
“I’m part of you, Harry. You did this. It’s all your fault, and forever will be. You have allowed your friends to die for you.”
Wow. The nightmare at beginning of this chapter was intense and that last line in particular gave me chills. I'm really enjoying the various characters emotional development as they all begin to work through their issues. Very well written! |
| Saturday 2nd January 2016 13:14 | These Cuts I Have (Author Response) |
| Thanks! The "You have allowed your friends to die for you" line comes straight from canon, but I think Harry's guilt will play it up and dwell on it for a while. It gave me chills when I read it, too! |
Mercer
Tuesday 18th August 2015 20:59 | These Cuts I Have |
| Great chapter.. |
kopfsalat2000
Monday 10th August 2015 05:05 | These Cuts I Have |
| Thanks for the update, good work |
| Tuesday 11th August 2015 03:29 | These Cuts I Have (Author Response) |
| Glad you're enjoying! |
Dad
Friday 7th August 2015 03:20 | These Cuts I Have |
| Plenty going on in this chapter |
| Friday 7th August 2015 08:17 | These Cuts I Have (Author Response) |
| Is that a good or bad thing? |
Bagelz
Thursday 6th August 2015 13:23 | These Cuts I Have |
| Was not expecting that! Great story. |
| Friday 7th August 2015 08:17 | These Cuts I Have (Author Response) |
| Thanks! Glad you're enjoying it. |
antosha
Wednesday 5th August 2015 04:50 | These Cuts I Have |
Man. Poor Harry. The nightmare never ends.
I don\'t know which was more awful: the dream, the attack -- or the flinch.
Harry would probably say the last.
And... I didn\'t even notice the chapter title until just now. |
| Thursday 6th August 2015 11:43 | These Cuts I Have (Author Response) |
| Ha! Yep, all the above count as nightmares for Harry, right. And I think you're correct, of the three, I think the flinch was the worst for Harry. |
antosha
Wednesday 5th August 2015 04:47 | These Cuts I Have |
Man. Poor Harry. The nightmare never ends.
I don't know which was more awful: the dream, the attack -- or the flinch.
Harry would probably say the last. |
Amamama
Tuesday 4th August 2015 22:39 | These Cuts I Have |
Aiaiai... A few points:
1) You\'re positively evil, leaving us with a cliffhanger like that.
2) Poor Harry, what a of a nightmare.
3) Poor Harry, not knowing what to do when people are genuinely concerned about him and want to help.
4) Poor Harry, not realising he\'s a chosen Weasley. They obviously consider him one of them, yet he has not embraced that idea.
5) Poor Harry, being too afraid of rejection to embrace being a chosen Weasley.
6) Poor Harry, needing to flee the ground floor of the shop to avoid being seen (but good for him to do stuff to help George).
7) Poor Harry, not even being able to enjoy flying without bad stuff happening.
8) Poor Harry, feeling responsible for the attack on the Burrow. It\'s him they want.
9) Poor Harry, being hurt and losing enough blood to faint.
10) Poor us, having to waith for the next update before we get to know more.
11) Brilliant you - an awesome chapter, as always. Sucked me right in, I could feel the nightmare ache in my body, and a need to hold and protect out hero and explain stuff to him. He really has to learn a new way of being in the world, hasn\'t he? A world where someone being upset does not mean he\'ll be hit, it only means they are upset - and this upset can be because they care.
12) Poor Molly and Arthur, they have a not-yet son in law who\'s the most darling ever, yet seriously messed up. What a challenge to help him find his way while dealing with the grief of a lost child.
13) Lucky me, to be able to read as brilliant fanfiction as this. Thank you! |
| Wednesday 5th August 2015 01:52 | These Cuts I Have (Author Response) |
| Definitely poor Harry, lol. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. I enjoyed writing it. I think Molly and Arthur are up to the task, but it'll take some work. My heart was with Molly in this one when she realized what Harry thought was going to happen. I find myself wanting to reach into the words and hug him. He'd probably hate me! |
Felix Felicis
Tuesday 4th August 2015 12:47 | These Cuts I Have |
Awesome chapter! I mean it, really great!
I continue to love what Mr. Weasley does for Harry. He really is the father that Harry needs. I hope Harry can learn to accept that he has a new family that loves him. It's interesting that you've kept him in character, in terms of him holding in his feelings and bottling it all up. I've always found that a really annoying character trait of his but I'm glad you've kept it up here. I think it keeps a nice continuity from the books.
The dream was well done. I usually feel that dreams end up either corny or overly detailed and too predictable. No so here. I think you did a nice job keeping it like what any one of us might actually dream. Well, maybe not so many dead friends but the parts about not being able to find where he's going and feeling slow and stuck are so realistic.
The Weasley brothers would naturally stand with George to help out with the shop. I'm glad you put that in.
The battle scene at the end was a good way to finish out the chapter but I have to confess that I found it a bit confusing. At first I wasn't sure where the spells were coming from, in the air or on the ground. And I'm not sure how many dark wizards there were. It was still nicely done but I think having a little more omnipotence might have made it clearer.
Always a joy reading your new chapters!
-Felix |
| Wednesday 5th August 2015 01:49 | These Cuts I Have (Author Response) |
Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts, I do appreciate it. Sorry the battle confused you. There will be a discussion with some of the characters next chapter, so I hope that will clear it up.
I'm glad you enjoyed the dream. I worked on that for a long time. They're difficult to do because dreams don't always make sense. I was happy with the way this chapter turned out, and I'm happy to see it connected with others, as well. |
professor webster
Tuesday 4th August 2015 08:57 | These Cuts I Have |
| Nicely done, the ending especially leading to tension. Whoare the attackers. Why? goodwriting! |
| Wednesday 5th August 2015 01:46 | These Cuts I Have (Author Response) |
| Thanks! You'll learn more about the attackers in the next chapter. I'm glad you enjoyed it. |
Arnel
Tuesday 4th August 2015 08:41 | These Cuts I Have |
Oh, poor Harry! Then again, he isn't getting any restful sleep because he's too stubborn to ask for a sleeping potion, so I suppose he can only blame himself. That said, I'm glad Molly trying to mother him. He's needed someone to take that role in his life and Petunia certainly hasn't and won't. It made me so sad when she realized Harry thought she was going to hit him, but it's a reality of his upbringing and is yet another thing for him to have to deal with in order to heal completely. I'm glad Arthur was witness to what happened because he'll be the sounding board Molly needs to rant against Vernon and Petunia and I think, eventually, Harry's sense of guilt will win out and he will have a much needed heart-to-heart talk with Arthur.
It was so good to see all of the remaining siblings, plus Fleur and Harry, helping George with the shop. Ginny's observations about Harry's sensitive treatment of the twins' flat made me smile, because she knows it's the kind of thing Harry is good at. At the same time, I admire Bill for taking on the difficult role of supporting his siblings and Harry. It certainly was nice of him to speak with the goblins when Harry didn't seem to know how to approach them. He spoke the truth when he reported what he said to get Harry's accounts unfrozen. I'm not sure that would have happened if Bill hadn't understood the goblins the way he does.
It's sad, too, that the aftermath of the war has to be so hard on the survivors, especially Harry. The sore losers really need to turn themselves in and face the consequences of their actions, but I doubt that's going to happen. Again I was thankful that Bill was able to strengthen the protective enchantments, even if Harry ended up getting hurt. Trouble always seems to find him.
Thanks for the cliffie. Well done. |
| Wednesday 5th August 2015 01:45 | These Cuts I Have (Author Response) |
Thanks so much, Arnel. I always look forward to hearing your thoughts. You're right - trouble does seem to find Harry, but that's what makes fanfiction so addicting. I like the characer of Bill, and I think as the eldest of so many siblings, he would've taken on the protecter role. His work with the goblins definitely worked in Harry's favor this time.
You're right, part of Harry's problem is his own stubbornness, but letting people in is something he's going to have to learn along the way, and I think the Weasleys are the perfect choice to do that. |
