The Pharaoh
Tuesday 1st September 2015 17:38 | Vis Insita |
Haha, I like what you did with the Fourth Wall and Lila. I'm really wondering about the guy with the gun. If there was no more significance to it than to add flavor to an otherwise boring walk home and maybe for the sake of realism a la "could we really expect them to go for that long of a walk in that neighborhood without seeing somebody with a gun?" (I don't know anything about that, just considering all possibilities), then I like the fact that it is that, but I'm very suspicious that it'll come up again later. I liked Ginny's test questions, especially the trick question. Also, Ginny's sense of inclusion ("Insults were like endearments in the army, weren't they?") and Luna's innocent, simple frankness ("'Where are we to kiss now?'") were adorable.
I don't know exactly what happened with Remus and I don't know where to go back to in order to look for it, but I'm guessing Scott or Sophie did something to him in the shape at Grimmauld Place, or Lila found time to on that field mission. (Though, I don't see her caring enough—unless maybe she did it to obliquely help her new friend Tonks.) |
| Sunday 13th September 2015 22:13 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
Haha, I like what you did with the Fourth Wall and Lila
Vis and TTM get a little meta sometimes, although never more so than during the Horcrux dream sequences.
I liked Ginny's test questions, especially the trick question. Also, Ginny's sense of inclusion ("Insults were like endearments in the army, weren't they?") and Luna's innocent, simple frankness ("'Where are we to kiss now?'") were adorable.
It was nice to give Neville and Luna some slight focus again. I have to admit, there's an upcoming chapter where I use Luna's POV for the first time since… Well, TTM, I think. I had to go back and reread her segments just to get the feel for how I wrote her.
I don't know exactly what happened with Remus and I don't know where to go back to in order to look for it, but I'm guessing Scott or Sophie did something to him in the shape at Grimmauld Place, or Lila found time to on that field mission.
Not specific enough to win any prizes, but you're on the right track. It will be very obvious in retrospect. |
kopfsalat2000
Thursday 27th August 2015 08:10 | Vis Insita |
| Every month waiting for a new chapter is worth it Good job! |
| Sunday 13th September 2015 22:10 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
| Thank you. I hope you'll be back next month, too. |
potternut190
Wednesday 26th August 2015 22:12 | Vis Insita |
| The only thing it could have been was when Sophiw took Lupin's hand in the park and then shook her arm after letting go. The Shape is quite useful. |
| Sunday 13th September 2015 22:09 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
I can neither confirm nor deny that.
(but you actually nailed it) |
potternut190
Wednesday 26th August 2015 20:10 | Vis Insita |
Thanks for the update. I am one of the readers coming over from SIYE after plowing through your work which I have been ignoring here (sorry) But I had to camp out here for the latest!
I really have enjoyed your OC. I see some enjoyable parallels between Scott and Sterling Archer (similar sense of humor, a certain disregard that comes with the gig and being good at it, and the ability to successfully pull off some seriously insane stuff and not die) which endear him to me allow me to accept your universe/multiverse that and I love when you poke fun at the canon alternatives. Plastic drop cloth indeed! Now I've got to find where Lupin was... |
| Sunday 13th September 2015 22:08 | Vis Insita (Author Response) |
"Thanks for the update. I am one of the readers coming over from SIYE after plowing through your work which I have been ignoring here (sorry) But I had to camp out here for the latest!"
There was an unusual delay at SIYE concerning the latest chapter. Ideally, however, SIYE and PS and FFN should all be concurrently up to date.
I really have enjoyed your OC. I see some enjoyable parallels between Scott and Sterling Archer (similar sense of humor, a certain disregard that comes with the gig and being good at it, and the ability to successfully pull off some seriously insane stuff and not die) which endear him to me allow me to accept your universe/multiverse that and I love when you poke fun at the canon alternatives
I can't say it's a parallel I've ever considered before, but I suppose at times Scott might come across as a much, much more grounded Archer. Scott couldn't get away with acting like Archer in combat, etc. of course, but Archer is an absurd comedy and TTM and Vis aren't. |
