wluer96
Friday 9th December 2016 15:58 | The Sins of the Fathers |
| I love cliffhangers! And I'm so very glad you've resumed this story. It's such an interesting plot and I've always wondered where you planned to go with it. Thank you for such excellent writing. |
Dad
Tuesday 6th December 2016 19:37 | The Sins of the Fathers |
It is all happening here.
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Dad
Tuesday 6th December 2016 19:36 | The Sins of the Fathers |
It is all happening here.
It's just like Christmas with all the stories that have been missing for a while popping out of the woodwork.
Can we guess who Edith is?
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Dad
Tuesday 6th December 2016 19:36 | The Sins of the Fathers |
It is all happening here.
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Dad
Tuesday 6th December 2016 19:35 | The Sins of the Fathers |
It is all happening here.
It's just like Christmas with all the stories that have been missing for a while popping out of the woodwork.
Can we guess who Edith is?
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Dad
Tuesday 6th December 2016 19:33 | The Sins of the Fathers |
| It's just like Christmas with all the stories that have been missing for a while popping out of the woodwork. Can we guess who Edith is? |
Dad
Tuesday 6th December 2016 19:33 | The Sins of the Fathers |
| It's just like Christmas with all the stories that have been missing for a while popping out of the woodwork. Can we guess who Edith is? |
Dad
Tuesday 6th December 2016 19:33 | The Sins of the Fathers |
| It's just like Christmas with all the stories that have been missing for a while popping out of the woodwork. Can we guess who Edith is? |
| Wednesday 7th December 2016 03:50 | The Sins of the Fathers (Author Response) |
It's just like Christmas with all the stories that have been missing for a while popping out of the woodwork. Can we guess who Edith is?
The review system seems to be going a little crazy
Yes, who is Edith? Time may tell, but I'm not.
Thanks for reading and reviewing. |
1mperio
Sunday 4th December 2016 10:22 | The Sins of the Fathers |
| Thought I'd follow up on my review. The questions weren't a criticism, just an observation. The chapter felt like the Tarantino film (Pulp Fiction comes to mind) where a lot of interesting scenes are shown out of time sequence and from different character's perspectives. I remember watching the movie wondering what was going on, but at the end there was this great aha! moment that really tied everything together. The technique must work since it's been 15+ years and I still think about the movie, as I anticipate I will about this story. |
| Sunday 4th December 2016 11:29 | The Sins of the Fathers (Author Response) |
Thought I'd follow up on my review. The questions weren't a criticism, just an observation. The chapter felt like the Tarantino film (Pulp Fiction comes to mind) where a lot of interesting scenes are shown out of time sequence and from different character's perspectives. I remember watching the movie wondering what was going on, but at the end there was this great aha! moment that really tied everything together. The technique must work since it's been 15+ years and I still think about the movie, as I anticipate I will about this story.
Hi... and I took them s that. Its always fun to see people trying to work out what is going all. I will give you a clue; they were all in sequence, but some people's roles were determined as the story involved and a few of them changed. I hope I can deliver the great Aha! moment for you and still leave a few questions too. |
1mperio
Sunday 4th December 2016 00:04 | The Sins of the Fathers |
| Oh boy. This is an initial review, but you've played with perspective and time extremely well. The best I can figure is 1. Edith is an impostor (I think, with polyjuice and discipline anything is possible), either Bella is setting up an alibi or has imperioused some one, Kreacher delivered Ginny a trapped outfit, Sirious got waay to complicated in his planning, house elves can't be trusted and whats up and where the hell is Harry. A very well crafted chapter that I'm certain will make much more sense when the story is read in sequence. Now all you've got to do is post chapter14!!!! Great work. Thanks. |
| Sunday 4th December 2016 05:25 | The Sins of the Fathers (Author Response) |
You are right, Sirius has over complicated thing, and that's normally not the best thing to do. A for the rest of your comments...
Sorry you will have to wait for more answers and the next chapter.
Thanks for reviewing again. |
